Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 63 "part two, Chapter 19"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from Gert sherwood
You deserve a six rating for this chapter Barb.
Your whole book right from the start has been very good.
I know I'm not much help to you helping edit your book
All I know your writing is emotional, filled with suspense and great cliff hangers.
Gert
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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You deserve a six rating for this chapter Barb.
Your whole book right from the start has been very good.
I know I'm not much help to you helping edit your book
All I know your writing is emotional, filled with suspense and great cliff hangers.
Gert
Comment Written 22-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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If I can't get the emotion across then I have failed, the commas and such will take care of themselves. Thank you for the kind review and the support.
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You are welcome Barb
Gert
Comment from Deejharrington
I have to admit I said "alright!" when I read the bastard had been shot right between the eyes. Though, in a fair world, he would have suffered more. Oh, my, the list of horrible abuse Anna suffered at that animal's hands. She will have a long road to recover physically, not to mention the mental. But, if she can get through the next few days, an end to the abuse is there. I look forward to reading more.
deb
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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I have to admit I said "alright!" when I read the bastard had been shot right between the eyes. Though, in a fair world, he would have suffered more. Oh, my, the list of horrible abuse Anna suffered at that animal's hands. She will have a long road to recover physically, not to mention the mental. But, if she can get through the next few days, an end to the abuse is there. I look forward to reading more.
deb
Comment Written 22-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from RazberryBullet
Got a chuckle here: "Troy, watching you pace is wearing me out. Can you stand still for a few minutes?" ;p
After hearing what the doctor said, it sounds like Anna barely squeaked out alive...so far :(
Excellent!
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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Got a chuckle here: "Troy, watching you pace is wearing me out. Can you stand still for a few minutes?" ;p
After hearing what the doctor said, it sounds like Anna barely squeaked out alive...so far :(
Excellent!
Comment Written 22-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and your wonderful support.
Comment from Kingsland
For a demure school teacher that teaches the very young. I never envisioned you writing such violent ferocity. You are really good at it. You put in very good imagery when you write. That is a necessity for excellent writing. I am enjoying reading your well written mind. Presented on this format for all to admire... John
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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For a demure school teacher that teaches the very young. I never envisioned you writing such violent ferocity. You are really good at it. You put in very good imagery when you write. That is a necessity for excellent writing. I am enjoying reading your well written mind. Presented on this format for all to admire... John
Comment Written 22-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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Thank you John, I have some personnel knowledge of abuse.
Comment from RebelRose
A great chapter but so sad. I hope we don't have too long to see how Anna's doing. You have really done a good job in making this all seem so real.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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A great chapter but so sad. I hope we don't have too long to see how Anna's doing. You have really done a good job in making this all seem so real.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from guinea
The description of events that happened to Anna are well written. Domestic abuse is rampant in the world. You held my attention. Good writing. Only one Grammar error. "She's has numerous. Should be "She has numerous.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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The description of events that happened to Anna are well written. Domestic abuse is rampant in the world. You held my attention. Good writing. Only one Grammar error. "She's has numerous. Should be "She has numerous.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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Thank you for catching that. I made the correction.
Comment from elgone
Talk about a cliff hanger ending. I thought the last was bad. This one is really bad. Which is a good thing for the writer, though. I really feel for Anna. She's been through hell, literally.
One minor thing, a typo:
Tory, Paul, and Everett watched the doctor rush into Anna's room. - Troy
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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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Talk about a cliff hanger ending. I thought the last was bad. This one is really bad. Which is a good thing for the writer, though. I really feel for Anna. She's been through hell, literally.
One minor thing, a typo:
Tory, Paul, and Everett watched the doctor rush into Anna's room. - Troy
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Comment Written 22-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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Thank you for your eagle eye. No matter how much I edit, I still mess up.
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That's why God invented editors, right?
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Comment from Overthehill
This is a tough story and requires very descriptive writing which you have achieved. I'm sure there was quite a bit of research needed to be able to write this and I was able to read it easily without wondering about the authenticity. An intriguing story very well told.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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This is a tough story and requires very descriptive writing which you have achieved. I'm sure there was quite a bit of research needed to be able to write this and I was able to read it easily without wondering about the authenticity. An intriguing story very well told.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from gramalot8
Barbara, this is a relief chapter. Thank goodness Bobby is now out of the picture. I know as a fact people can live without their spleen. Just hope you have a plan for her surviving all the rest of her trauma, mental and physical. So glad to know Troy is still in the picture to be there for your heroine. Thanks for this very intrigueing story. Jerri
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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Barbara, this is a relief chapter. Thank goodness Bobby is now out of the picture. I know as a fact people can live without their spleen. Just hope you have a plan for her surviving all the rest of her trauma, mental and physical. So glad to know Troy is still in the picture to be there for your heroine. Thanks for this very intrigueing story. Jerri
Comment Written 22-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from c_lucas
This is very well written maintaining the suspense throughout. There is a interesting flow of words, making for a very good read. Good job.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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This is very well written maintaining the suspense throughout. There is a interesting flow of words, making for a very good read. Good job.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and your continued support of my work.
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You're welcome, Barbara. Charlie