Lonely Hearts Meet
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Comment from Belinda
Oops... the last paragraph puts me off guard. So this is your (and Troy's) secret so far. Now I can't wait to see Anna's and the court's reaction. You have done a thorough research for your story, Barbara. Good job.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011
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Oops... the last paragraph puts me off guard. So this is your (and Troy's) secret so far. Now I can't wait to see Anna's and the court's reaction. You have done a thorough research for your story, Barbara. Good job.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Dave M
Barbara,
So this is Troy's dark secret. The Rodgers' lawyer sounds like a real idiot, but he has a trump card to play.
I enjoyed this chapter and couldn't find anything to criticize. I also appreciate the information you post in your author notes. I've known people with hepetitis B.
Dave
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011
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Barbara,
So this is Troy's dark secret. The Rodgers' lawyer sounds like a real idiot, but he has a trump card to play.
I enjoyed this chapter and couldn't find anything to criticize. I also appreciate the information you post in your author notes. I've known people with hepetitis B.
Dave
Comment Written 23-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Janie King
oh me, oh my..this of course I didn't know about Troy but I'm trusting that they are smart enough to prove the child is safe...This is going to be a long week waiting for the answer. God bless.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011
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oh me, oh my..this of course I didn't know about Troy but I'm trusting that they are smart enough to prove the child is safe...This is going to be a long week waiting for the answer. God bless.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from dportwood
barbara,
I find this chapter to be well written as are all of your writings. The courtroom dialogue is well done and believable. I found no spag.
Duane
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011
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barbara,
I find this chapter to be well written as are all of your writings. The courtroom dialogue is well done and believable. I found no spag.
Duane
Comment Written 23-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Barbara,
this is another great chapter but I don't mind telling you I was stunned to learn Troy is a carrier of a life threatening blood borne pathogen. I'm thinking it may be hepatitis B or...it's not true at all. Which I hope is true. I enjoyed this chapter and can't wait until the next one....well done...blessings, chey
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011
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Hi Barbara,
this is another great chapter but I don't mind telling you I was stunned to learn Troy is a carrier of a life threatening blood borne pathogen. I'm thinking it may be hepatitis B or...it's not true at all. Which I hope is true. I enjoyed this chapter and can't wait until the next one....well done...blessings, chey
Comment Written 23-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011
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Thank you for the kind review and Troy does have some issues.
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Oh..I hate that!!
Comment from purrfect tale
Oh darn! The hepatitis thing is going to cause trouble. This is another well written chapter. It's easy for court scenes to become boring, you have kept your's engrossing while not reverting to court room theatrics. I just have one note for you: Sorenson's son, Troy - comma after "Troy"
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011
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Oh darn! The hepatitis thing is going to cause trouble. This is another well written chapter. It's easy for court scenes to become boring, you have kept your's engrossing while not reverting to court room theatrics. I just have one note for you: Sorenson's son, Troy - comma after "Troy"
Comment Written 23-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and I will fix that.
Comment from Aislinge
Nicely done, Barbara. The pacing is good here, with tension in the courtroom played out nicely with the snappy dialog. The reader gets a good sense of the nerves here, and Anna's anxiety.
Thanks for a great read.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011
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Nicely done, Barbara. The pacing is good here, with tension in the courtroom played out nicely with the snappy dialog. The reader gets a good sense of the nerves here, and Anna's anxiety.
Thanks for a great read.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from adewpearl
Mr Brown, please continue - add comma for direct address
Who's request - Whose
ensure Michael Rodgers' safety - add the apostrophe for possessive
Mrs. Rodger's threatened - take the apostrophe from her name
Boy does this attorney play hard ball. Excellent dialogue. Brooke
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011
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Mr Brown, please continue - add comma for direct address
Who's request - Whose
ensure Michael Rodgers' safety - add the apostrophe for possessive
Mrs. Rodger's threatened - take the apostrophe from her name
Boy does this attorney play hard ball. Excellent dialogue. Brooke
Comment Written 23-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011
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I thought I had a fairly clean post then you come along and blow the air right out of my sails. LOL
I appreciate you catching those for me. Thank you.
Comment from Shirley McLain
Wow, what a turn or events and you left me hanging. Now you have to hurry and get the next chapter done so I can find out what's happened. Great job.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011
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Wow, what a turn or events and you left me hanging. Now you have to hurry and get the next chapter done so I can find out what's happened. Great job.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from RebelRose
Oh my, that doesn't sound good. I don't like Mr. Brown's tactics but he sure has done his homework. Another interesting chapter. Well done.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011
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Oh my, that doesn't sound good. I don't like Mr. Brown's tactics but he sure has done his homework. Another interesting chapter. Well done.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2011
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
