Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "Part 4 Chapter 6"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from Patrates
I've followed this story since your first posting but I don't remember you explaining the connection between Paul and Anna, why Troy was excited to tell Paul, and why Paul was happy to tell his wife. Maybe in the future postings. I will keep on reading this story. Also, it shows how good of a writer you are. It seems that you've researched how attorneys deal with cases like this. The dialogue seems real to me.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2011
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I've followed this story since your first posting but I don't remember you explaining the connection between Paul and Anna, why Troy was excited to tell Paul, and why Paul was happy to tell his wife. Maybe in the future postings. I will keep on reading this story. Also, it shows how good of a writer you are. It seems that you've researched how attorneys deal with cases like this. The dialogue seems real to me.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2011
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Okay, you have missed a lot from previous posts. Troy's mother was murdered in front of Troy by his step father. Paul and Betty raised him. So Paul and Betty are basically Troy's parents. Does that make it more clear. Thank you for reading.
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I do remember that part but what i was looking for was the connection between Paul and Anna coz Troy was excited to tell Paul that he had found Anna. But maybe you'll explain it in proceeding chapters.
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Paul visited Anna in the hospital and has agreed to be her lawyer.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, barbara, i enjoyed reading this chapter where troy's father met with anna and went over her options with her, and she signed the papers she needed to
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this is very well written, barbara, i enjoyed reading this chapter where troy's father met with anna and went over her options with her, and she signed the papers she needed to
Comment Written 10-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Dave M
Barbara,
This is an excellent chapter that explains some of a battered woman's options, in the guise of the conversation between Anna and Paul. I enjoyed reading this post and have one suggestion:
"All right, I will meet you at [the] coffee shop by the Nature and Science Center in the morning."
Dave
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2011
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Barbara,
This is an excellent chapter that explains some of a battered woman's options, in the guise of the conversation between Anna and Paul. I enjoyed reading this post and have one suggestion:
"All right, I will meet you at [the] coffee shop by the Nature and Science Center in the morning."
Dave
Comment Written 10-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2011
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Thank you for the kind review. I must have been correcting the missing the, while you were reading. I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from Jen Gentry
Barb
this is another well done spag free chapter, I should like to start work again on my novel based on Domestic violence but it has been very difficult for me to find the time with my job and taking care of my family also boy do I know the pain of having a port removed all I can say is OUCH!!!
Best wishes
Jenny
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2011
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Barb
this is another well done spag free chapter, I should like to start work again on my novel based on Domestic violence but it has been very difficult for me to find the time with my job and taking care of my family also boy do I know the pain of having a port removed all I can say is OUCH!!!
Best wishes
Jenny
Comment Written 10-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2011
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Thank you for the kind review and insight.
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
barbara:
This is another excellent chapter. It is imperative any person who is in a domestic abuse situation have a clear cut exit plan to ensure not only her/his safety but also that of any children involved. Way too often, we hear about children who are murdered because parents want to get back at each other.
Thanks for sharing
One small piece of spag for you below
Love,
Jan
meet you at coffee shop >>> meet you at the coffee shop
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2011
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barbara:
This is another excellent chapter. It is imperative any person who is in a domestic abuse situation have a clear cut exit plan to ensure not only her/his safety but also that of any children involved. Way too often, we hear about children who are murdered because parents want to get back at each other.
Thanks for sharing
One small piece of spag for you below
Love,
Jan
meet you at coffee shop >>> meet you at the coffee shop
Comment Written 10-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2011
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Thank you for catching that. I appreciate the kind review.
Comment from writerwish
This story is still so engrossing and I find myself looking at them as real people. If this was a book, it would be a page turner. Well done. I'll be patient. I am glad to hear you found a way to have less pain.
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This story is still so engrossing and I find myself looking at them as real people. If this was a book, it would be a page turner. Well done. I'll be patient. I am glad to hear you found a way to have less pain.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2011
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Hopefully someday it will be a book. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Belinda
Hi, Barbara. Can I sigh with relief now? Oops, why do I feel anxious like Anna did? I'm sure it is because this story is so well written. I'm glad you added your author notes about the characteristics of a batterer. It helps readers understand.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2011
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Hi, Barbara. Can I sigh with relief now? Oops, why do I feel anxious like Anna did? I'm sure it is because this story is so well written. I'm glad you added your author notes about the characteristics of a batterer. It helps readers understand.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Barbara ....
Anna is, indeed, fortunate to have the help and support of Troy, his father Paul and his Aunt Margaret and this is a very interesting chapter with no changes to suggest.
Now, I look forward to the next chapter.
Love from ...... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2011
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Hullo Barbara ....
Anna is, indeed, fortunate to have the help and support of Troy, his father Paul and his Aunt Margaret and this is a very interesting chapter with no changes to suggest.
Now, I look forward to the next chapter.
Love from ...... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from glpar
This story continues to flow and sound true to the situation. It is a harrowing way for anyone to have to live but sadly many do. I'm looking forward to more.
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This story continues to flow and sound true to the situation. It is a harrowing way for anyone to have to live but sadly many do. I'm looking forward to more.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from fairy77
Hi Barbara,
Thanks for your vote I got recognized writer.That was an excellent chapter so at last Anna will be safe.Hopefully her husband will have some prison years!Who would have guessed she was at the aunt's.Well done that's the best piece of writing I've seen in a while.beth fairy77
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Hi Barbara,
Thanks for your vote I got recognized writer.That was an excellent chapter so at last Anna will be safe.Hopefully her husband will have some prison years!Who would have guessed she was at the aunt's.Well done that's the best piece of writing I've seen in a while.beth fairy77
Comment Written 10-Jul-2011
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2011
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Thank you for your kind review and encouragement. I appreciate both.