Little Billy
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Letting Go."memiors from my life experiences.
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Comment from K. L. Bauman
One of those stories that's stranger than fiction. Although, those feelings of guilt over hurting people for not letting your mother go are not well founded. Love is love, and things happen the way they're supposed to, for the most part. Technically, there are a few punctuation errors, but nothing serious.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2010
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One of those stories that's stranger than fiction. Although, those feelings of guilt over hurting people for not letting your mother go are not well founded. Love is love, and things happen the way they're supposed to, for the most part. Technically, there are a few punctuation errors, but nothing serious.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2010
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thank you
Comment from animatqua
This was an intense story. I can almost feel the emotion coming through the keyboard and into the print. When things are this intense, editing tends to go by the wayside. In time, I think you should run through this again for the spags.
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This was an intense story. I can almost feel the emotion coming through the keyboard and into the print. When things are this intense, editing tends to go by the wayside. In time, I think you should run through this again for the spags.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2010
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thanks for the review
Comment from Jana Gifford
You may want to double check the punctuation for accuracy in the first few sentences of dialogue. Thank you for sharing this story! Right away I was hooked by the internal conflict I saw in the first paragraph.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2010
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You may want to double check the punctuation for accuracy in the first few sentences of dialogue. Thank you for sharing this story! Right away I was hooked by the internal conflict I saw in the first paragraph.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2010
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thanks for the review
Comment from sherr
Thank you for the deep and personal sharing. I'm sure it has been difficult holding on to it for so long. The release is sweet. Your writing is so natural, like you were simply talking. I very much enjoyed your sharing and I would imagine most of us would have some issue to let go.
sherr
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
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Thank you for the deep and personal sharing. I'm sure it has been difficult holding on to it for so long. The release is sweet. Your writing is so natural, like you were simply talking. I very much enjoyed your sharing and I would imagine most of us would have some issue to let go.
sherr
Comment Written 02-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
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Thank you for that great review and i'm glad you liked it. I don't like my writing to be forced.
Comment from l.raven
Very nicely written story.Had no problem holding my attention.And this is what I tell everyone .I hate when you need a dictionary to understand what I'm reading.Had no problem with this story.
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reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
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Very nicely written story.Had no problem holding my attention.And this is what I tell everyone .I hate when you need a dictionary to understand what I'm reading.Had no problem with this story.
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Comment Written 02-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
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Thanks I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from quashdog
Needs lots of work. You confuse me with your use of punctuation in the middle of a sentence then follow that up with the last word or words to finish the sentence. What is it with all the skipped lines? I've noticed that a lot in many of the writings not just yours. It reminds me of when I was in Grammer school and I had to write an essay of so many pages and this was the tactic I used to fill the pages with minimal thought as a thirteen year old. Also, this is a personal account on some injustice perpetuated on you as a child yet I don't feel the emotion with its monotone gait. I also don't get how adult decisions suddenly become your fault towards the end of the account
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
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Needs lots of work. You confuse me with your use of punctuation in the middle of a sentence then follow that up with the last word or words to finish the sentence. What is it with all the skipped lines? I've noticed that a lot in many of the writings not just yours. It reminds me of when I was in Grammer school and I had to write an essay of so many pages and this was the tactic I used to fill the pages with minimal thought as a thirteen year old. Also, this is a personal account on some injustice perpetuated on you as a child yet I don't feel the emotion with its monotone gait. I also don't get how adult decisions suddenly become your fault towards the end of the account
Comment Written 02-Oct-2010
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2010
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thanks for the review