CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from redrider6612
Outstanding example of the triolet form! I loved everything about this poem, but most especially I loved the message it conveys. Natural rhymes, perfect flow, excellent word choices. I think you have a winner. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2009
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Outstanding example of the triolet form! I loved everything about this poem, but most especially I loved the message it conveys. Natural rhymes, perfect flow, excellent word choices. I think you have a winner. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2009
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redrider, thank you SO much for your wonderful compliments and this exceptional review!! So glad you enjoyed this! Thanks for your 6 star rating. Very much appreciated! Sue :-))
Comment from joercarusone
Not bad. I have a problem with these contrived poem foramts, they so retrict the talent of a writer. It makes it hard to judge a true poetic talent. The result can be clever but clever is not the goal. It forces a type of cliche writing. Are you better than that? I'd like to see more.
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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2009
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Not bad. I have a problem with these contrived poem foramts, they so retrict the talent of a writer. It makes it hard to judge a true poetic talent. The result can be clever but clever is not the goal. It forces a type of cliche writing. Are you better than that? I'd like to see more.
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Comment Written 06-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2009
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The contest is for a triolet. So, a triolet I wrote. In your own words: "It's hard to judge". So, why did you review it? I'm puzzled. Sue
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I said it was hard, not impossible. You have talent and I would like to see more. I thought this effort was okay, but not terrific. The question I have is this; was it the format that holds you back or was this your best effort.
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The only way I can answer all your questions and comments is for you to read my other poetry and you can be the judge. My confusion with your review was that you asked if I can write better than the triolet I did. It's irrelevant, as it was the triolet that was to stand on it's own merit.
A triolet is extremely confining. Only 5 lines to make a point and be creative enough not to bore the reader to death with the repetition. As with all forms, they each have their own purpose.
Thanks much for your further comments.
With regards,
Sue
Comment from words
Very well done and well stated:
Unique, we are born with free will
A gift to be cherished each day
With choices our own to distill
Love the opening and the repeat of: Unique we are born with free will....
Aren't we though and isn't it interesting what we do with it?
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Very well done and well stated:
Unique, we are born with free will
A gift to be cherished each day
With choices our own to distill
Love the opening and the repeat of: Unique we are born with free will....
Aren't we though and isn't it interesting what we do with it?
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Comment Written 06-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2009
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It's very interesting what we do with it!! Thanks so much for your great review. So appreciated, Sue :-)