CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 52 "Embracing the Light"A collection of poetry
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Comment from RADIO
This poem certainly teaches a great lesson
in life about how we can overcome adversity.
Whenever you can turn a negative into a
positive you not only benefit yourself but
you shine that light on all who know you.
I learned your lesson well.Great poem.
Radio
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This poem certainly teaches a great lesson
in life about how we can overcome adversity.
Whenever you can turn a negative into a
positive you not only benefit yourself but
you shine that light on all who know you.
I learned your lesson well.Great poem.
Radio
Comment Written 16-Feb-2009
Comment from Brandenpaul
I bet there are many people that can relate to the message in this one. Making the conscious decision to make something of yourself despite the negativity that surrounds. Good lick in the contest.
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I bet there are many people that can relate to the message in this one. Making the conscious decision to make something of yourself despite the negativity that surrounds. Good lick in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2009
Comment from carolm5415
You have done well to overcome the obstacles you faced from a difficult childhood. It is represented in this excellent poem. I see no need to change anything.
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You have done well to overcome the obstacles you faced from a difficult childhood. It is represented in this excellent poem. I see no need to change anything.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2009
Comment from fayesh
I enjoyed your sonnet about overcoming the negativity of family influences and achieving one's own destiny and pursuit of the positive elements in life. Nicely done.
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I enjoyed your sonnet about overcoming the negativity of family influences and achieving one's own destiny and pursuit of the positive elements in life. Nicely done.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2009
Comment from Nescher Pyscher
"not ours to bide" is a leeeeeeeetle bit of a stretched meaning there, in my humble opinion.
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Not a fan of sonnets or sonnet-esque pieces, so I'll leave a love and respect fiver for a well-conceived poem.
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"not ours to bide" is a leeeeeeeetle bit of a stretched meaning there, in my humble opinion.
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Not a fan of sonnets or sonnet-esque pieces, so I'll leave a love and respect fiver for a well-conceived poem.
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Comment Written 16-Feb-2009
Comment from S.Yocom
A well-crafted traditional sonnet is my favorite form of poetry, so I enjoyed this one very much. It follows the rules of the contest and does so in a lovely way. Very nice work, Sue.
Sally
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A well-crafted traditional sonnet is my favorite form of poetry, so I enjoyed this one very much. It follows the rules of the contest and does so in a lovely way. Very nice work, Sue.
Sally
Comment Written 16-Feb-2009
Comment from Ragnar
Very good work...but I disagree with the "Fleeing from bad memories" description.
It seems that your poem is more like facing up to bad memories,and making a conscience choice not to get caught-up in the weight of the past by letting it drag you down.
Good luck in the contest
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Very good work...but I disagree with the "Fleeing from bad memories" description.
It seems that your poem is more like facing up to bad memories,and making a conscience choice not to get caught-up in the weight of the past by letting it drag you down.
Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 16-Feb-2009
Comment from Summer Falls
I am so glad I came across this! What an uplifting message you have penned! The rhyme scheme is spot on and the artwork you chose of the lighthouse showing the way fit well with your poem. Great lesson! Good luck in the contest!
summergirl
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I am so glad I came across this! What an uplifting message you have penned! The rhyme scheme is spot on and the artwork you chose of the lighthouse showing the way fit well with your poem. Great lesson! Good luck in the contest!
summergirl
Comment Written 15-Feb-2009
Comment from K-Patrick
Rhyme ? Nicely done.
Rhythm/Flow ? Flowed very nicely with a nice even pace.
Appeal ? I think everyone wants to learn from others and use that wisdom to improve.
Format ? Nice classic sonnet (?)
My Aesthetic Judgment ? A very nice poem that is well thought out and doesn't need any suggestions from me.
?Beauty is no quality in things themselves: it exists merely in the mind which contemplates them.? -- David Hume (1757)
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Rhyme ? Nicely done.
Rhythm/Flow ? Flowed very nicely with a nice even pace.
Appeal ? I think everyone wants to learn from others and use that wisdom to improve.
Format ? Nice classic sonnet (?)
My Aesthetic Judgment ? A very nice poem that is well thought out and doesn't need any suggestions from me.
?Beauty is no quality in things themselves: it exists merely in the mind which contemplates them.? -- David Hume (1757)
Comment Written 15-Feb-2009
Comment from Karen B.
An excellent poem about the damage negative thinking can do to us. Great rhyme scheme, and the poem flows well from start to finish. Very enjoyable to read. Karen
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An excellent poem about the damage negative thinking can do to us. Great rhyme scheme, and the poem flows well from start to finish. Very enjoyable to read. Karen
Comment Written 15-Feb-2009