Comment from enjoi

Excellent

Interesting piece, here. Considering the format, the restrictions inherent, I think it's a good piece, some great imagery. Much respect.

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2008

Comment from utopian_dream_x

Excellent

I love poems like this as they are short but still have a strong impact.
a stunning piece of writing with great imagery.
I like how you have mentioned a different season on each line.

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2008

Comment from CarolinasAngel

Excellent

I can't honestly say that I'm a fan of this form, but I think you did a very good job. Thanks for sharing.

write on!

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2008

Comment from Joseph David Soukup

Good

Seems to sum up quite well the transformation of one season to the next season. I enjoy the picture very much, but it does seem to steal the attention away from the poem. I should want to study the poem more than the picture. I also thought the poem could have been a bit longer or rhythmic to fulfill it's full potential. Good Job!

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2008

Comment from Scarlettdreams

Excellent

So true how winter just takes over and fall doesn't have much to say about it. LOL LOL I am such a fan of fall. I would give up summer for two falls. smiles. Bravo

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2008

Comment from guerillapoet

Excellent

This is well done. The word choice is strong and it helps give the piece imagery. I like the use of seasons, also.

Overall a very nice haiku.

GP

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2008

Comment from JoAnna Lee

Excellent

Very nice! The imagery is great. I liked the personification of nature. Good luck in the contest!

Thanks for sharing,
Donna

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2008

Comment from madhilde

Excellent

Hi Sixteezkid,

I just love this short, but very evocative poem. You've really touched on the feel of waiting for spring to come yet again. Circle of life stuff. Also, the picture goes well with the wording.

Mad

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2008

Comment from phild

Excellent

I love the title. It is an attention grabber. You've said a great deal with few words. I though the first line was especially effective at setting a picture in the readers mind. Good job.

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2008

Comment from wazzo

Excellent

Yes this one keeps all the rules for a haiku the syllables are correct and it is about nature and it makes sense. Well done Blessings Albert

 Comment Written 25-Nov-2008