Forest Memories
A Lover Looks Back75 total reviews
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
' Forest Memories ', is a strict me as opposed to a verdant and lush forest.
Returning to this lush haven is close to being in heaven. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
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' Forest Memories ', is a strict me as opposed to a verdant and lush forest.
Returning to this lush haven is close to being in heaven. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
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Wow, thank you for reading, your generous thoughts, and all the stars! I don't post much but am working on a few stories, hope you get to read!
Cheers, irish
irish, with good fortune I'll get to read your new stories.
Bless you and cheers,
the Duchess
Comment from sue133
A well written poem with beautiful imagery. It has a soft, almost melodic rhythm that flows really well. Sadly, we do lose people and we never forget them. But, slowly and carefully we must try to move on as they would have wanted us to.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
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A well written poem with beautiful imagery. It has a soft, almost melodic rhythm that flows really well. Sadly, we do lose people and we never forget them. But, slowly and carefully we must try to move on as they would have wanted us to.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
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Hi, Sue, thank you for reading, and all the stars! You have a great insight, and you are right, we have to recover, remember, and move on.
Cheers, irish
Comment from Goodadvicechan
I like the opening sentence. "Through the verdant woods we wandered,
where I walk now, all alone.
Are you there, behind the willows,
Through the verdant woods we wandered, where I walk now, all alone.
Are you there, behind the willows, or is it true, you're really gone?
or is it true, you're really gone? " This is very sentimental.
There are something in life. Once they are gone, let them remain the past
Conquer loneliness.. go out to meet people.
Thank you for sharing this.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
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I like the opening sentence. "Through the verdant woods we wandered,
where I walk now, all alone.
Are you there, behind the willows,
Through the verdant woods we wandered, where I walk now, all alone.
Are you there, behind the willows, or is it true, you're really gone?
or is it true, you're really gone? " This is very sentimental.
There are something in life. Once they are gone, let them remain the past
Conquer loneliness.. go out to meet people.
Thank you for sharing this.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
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Wow, thank you for reading, your insight, and all the stars!
You are right, we have to recover, remember, and move on with our lives. Very hard, in this case, a few years later this beautiful, young girl took her own life.
Take care, irish
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
I really enjoyed your poem. Your writing is light and airy, which works well here. What a beautiful sentiment, well done! I hope you keep writing and submitting your work for others to enjoy.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
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I really enjoyed your poem. Your writing is light and airy, which works well here. What a beautiful sentiment, well done! I hope you keep writing and submitting your work for others to enjoy.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
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Hi K, thank you for reading, and all the stars! I had excellent help with this. Working on some stories, will post later.
Cheers, irish
Comment from juliaSjames
What a balladeer you are.. Memories lurk where lovers ventured together. They sustain the partner left behind when they are separated by choice or otherwise. Some beautiful turns of phrase in this write, "begging carpet" " clouds as "Spanish galleons"
Very emotive poem.
Thank you for sharing and may your beloved friend rest in peace.
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
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What a balladeer you are.. Memories lurk where lovers ventured together. They sustain the partner left behind when they are separated by choice or otherwise. Some beautiful turns of phrase in this write, "begging carpet" " clouds as "Spanish galleons"
Very emotive poem.
Thank you for sharing and may your beloved friend rest in peace.
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
Comment Written 09-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
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Hi, Julia, what beautiful thoughts in your review, and all the stars!
had to explain the 'galleons' to some, but kind of expected that.
Thank you for reading, I am humbled.
irish
Comment from Terry Broxson
This is a very nice poem and an excellent remembrance of your loved one. I am glad she is forever in your heart. I know how that is. In this small way, they are not gone forever. Your imagery in the forest is excellent, the picture you chose is well suited for the poem. Good work!
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
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This is a very nice poem and an excellent remembrance of your loved one. I am glad she is forever in your heart. I know how that is. In this small way, they are not gone forever. Your imagery in the forest is excellent, the picture you chose is well suited for the poem. Good work!
Comment Written 09-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
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Hi, Terry, thank you for reading, your insight, and all the stars!
I feel the same way, as long as we honor their memory, thay are still with us.
Cheers, irish
Comment from visionary1234
What a beautiful dedication - you've captured the memory so movingly with your words.
One small correction:
I hear it's (its) greeting soft as rain, - no apostrophe, otherwise it will read as 'it is'
Your rhyming is lovely and unforced, though your rhythm sometimes is a little irregular - wasn't sure if you wanted to write in perfect rhythm or not???
But - lovely!!! Well done!
:)Sharyn
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
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What a beautiful dedication - you've captured the memory so movingly with your words.
One small correction:
I hear it's (its) greeting soft as rain, - no apostrophe, otherwise it will read as 'it is'
Your rhyming is lovely and unforced, though your rhythm sometimes is a little irregular - wasn't sure if you wanted to write in perfect rhythm or not???
But - lovely!!! Well done!
:)Sharyn
Comment Written 09-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
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Hi Sharyn! Thank you for reading, all the stars, and your great advice on my terrible grammar and punctuation. I had trouble with the rhythm, had some help, but to express the thoughts, had to sacrifice a little. Appreciate your help!
irish
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Comment from tfawcus
Evocative imagery and superb pacing make this a memorable and deeply moving poem. Its power is as much in what is unsaid and merely suggested as in the haunting beauty of your descriptions. A six if I had one.
Just one errant apostrophe, in it's In the fourth stanza.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
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Evocative imagery and superb pacing make this a memorable and deeply moving poem. Its power is as much in what is unsaid and merely suggested as in the haunting beauty of your descriptions. A six if I had one.
Just one errant apostrophe, in it's In the fourth stanza.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
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Hey, thank you for reading, all the stars, and your help with my punctuation! Had some expert help with this, but didn't catch that it's.
Cheers, irish
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Sometimes fewer words work better such as 4th line para 3 reads "near us where we stayed that night? It reads smoother with me without the "near us." Next, how would you feel if you changed "I see" to The icy stream seen still tumbles? Just a tweak here and there is what it needs. How many times do you re and re-read the lines as you pen them? For me, I can finish a piece and return the next day and make changes constantly.
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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
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Sometimes fewer words work better such as 4th line para 3 reads "near us where we stayed that night? It reads smoother with me without the "near us." Next, how would you feel if you changed "I see" to The icy stream seen still tumbles? Just a tweak here and there is what it needs. How many times do you re and re-read the lines as you pen them? For me, I can finish a piece and return the next day and make changes constantly.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
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Hi, Tom, Thanks for reading, and your help with the phrasing. I re-read this many times, changed the phrasing, then sent it to an expert poet for help. With two stanzas omitted and several rhythm changes, I tweaked a little and posted.
irish
Comment from Thatguypk
This is one of the most beautiful poems I've read on this site. It absolutely overflows with loving memories and sincerity. You say "or is it true, you're really gone?" Well, the answer to that is clearly No. That person you loved is evidently with you always, in thoughts, in your heart and soul. The body is but a vessel, but the spirit, the essence of a loved one never disappears. This all came to me from your words and your beautiful description of your experience together in the forest. Beautifully written. Thank you for sharing.
PK
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
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This is one of the most beautiful poems I've read on this site. It absolutely overflows with loving memories and sincerity. You say "or is it true, you're really gone?" Well, the answer to that is clearly No. That person you loved is evidently with you always, in thoughts, in your heart and soul. The body is but a vessel, but the spirit, the essence of a loved one never disappears. This all came to me from your words and your beautiful description of your experience together in the forest. Beautifully written. Thank you for sharing.
PK
Comment Written 09-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2022
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Wow, great to hear from you, PK! Thank you for reading, all the stars, I am humbled! I appreciate your insight here, this was hard to write.
I loved this girl, but we parted ways after high school. I heard about her brief affairs occasionally, but we never connected again after that summer romance. I was overseas in the US Navy when my Mom wrote that this beautiful, sensitive young girl had taken her own life. I feel as long as I honor her memory, she will be with me, in my heart.
Cheers to you, my friend!
irish
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Such a very sad story, Irish. Thank you for sharing. Cheers to you too. PK
