Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

What a fun rhyming story in a poem. I enjoyed reading it. Your rhymes are great, there's good flow, the details read well, nothing seems forced, and I got a good laugh. This reminded me of 'The Cremation of Sam McGee.'
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021

Thanks for the review. Sam McGee is one of my favorites.

Comment from Carlos' girl

Exceptional

Woah. This is no.doubt the Best rhyming poem I've ever read on this site, period. You are really talented. This should be published. Amazing. Love it. It is really really good

 Comment Written 13-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021

Thank you for the six stars, but more importantly for your kind words.

reply by Carlos' girl on 13-Sep-2021

Most welcome

Comment from Zoë Ricard

Excellent

What a fun poem! I love the use of gin as embalming fluid - it tied in so nicely! It would be my fervent hope that my wake would be such a blast! Well written - very lyrical and flowing.
Good luck in the contest!

Zoë x

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 Comment Written 13-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021

Thank you for the review. I'm sure that Patrick was well pleased with the gin.

Comment from Eunice Amero

Excellent

LoL this was funny but if someone dead came back alive l would leave dust. There would be a door where there never was one. You did a good job with this poem. Thank you for sharing.

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 Comment Written 13-Sep-2021

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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021

Thanks for the review. You haven't heard the last of Patrick.

reply by Eunice Amero on 13-Sep-2021

You are more than welcome.