Heart Cafted Poems - 2020
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Comment from roof35
This is a well written poem and I am sure it is from the heart. I agree with most of it. I do mention one typo just so you can fix it. You say, "so no can learn," I suspect you meant to say, "so no one can learn.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020
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This is a well written poem and I am sure it is from the heart. I agree with most of it. I do mention one typo just so you can fix it. You say, "so no can learn," I suspect you meant to say, "so no one can learn.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020
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Oops,
good catch my friend.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about America that seems to go down the drain because of a few crazy people who hates their own country and what it stands for.
The Etheree is not according to the format
The numbers in the description stands for syllables not words.
Eg line 1 America has four syllables not one
Line 3 has four syllables instead of 3
You should check each line to correct the syllable count.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020
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A very well-written poem about America that seems to go down the drain because of a few crazy people who hates their own country and what it stands for.
The Etheree is not according to the format
The numbers in the description stands for syllables not words.
Eg line 1 America has four syllables not one
Line 3 has four syllables instead of 3
You should check each line to correct the syllable count.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2020
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Thanks 🙏 I didn?t intend to copy Ehteree
in the comments just number count. Thanks however
Comment from Louise Michelle
I know you're needing this outlet to express your deep emotions, but the problem with our country now is that people are trying to take sides of the issues, instead of opening up their hearts and minds to seeing both sides. Compromise has become a dirty word in our heated political climate. The U.S. will survive - we always do. Hopefully, we'll come through all of this a stronger and better nation that lives up to the values it proclaims it loves. Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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I know you're needing this outlet to express your deep emotions, but the problem with our country now is that people are trying to take sides of the issues, instead of opening up their hearts and minds to seeing both sides. Compromise has become a dirty word in our heated political climate. The U.S. will survive - we always do. Hopefully, we'll come through all of this a stronger and better nation that lives up to the values it proclaims it loves. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 24-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Lou, I agree,
We have come so far, and have so far to yet to go, sadly our history and over 200 other countries can't erase slavery from its history and there is always going to be 1 or 2% on all sides who will never "get it" but that doesn't mean bad behavior should not be put in check!
Comment from Bobby Cunningham
This is a very clever and profound poem. The photo accompanying this is absolutely perfect. The last lines are wonderful. Do you think America stand together may be ok? It certainly isn't needed as the poem is excellent as is. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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This is a very clever and profound poem. The photo accompanying this is absolutely perfect. The last lines are wonderful. Do you think America stand together may be ok? It certainly isn't needed as the poem is excellent as is. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Bobby and Millie,
We have come so far, and have so far to yet to go, sadly our history and over 200 other countries can't erase slavery from its history and there is always going to be 1 or 2% on all sides who will never "get it" but that doesn't mean bad behavior should not be put in check!
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
It took me a long time to distinguish each word because it was too hard to read. Kinda like black on black. Great message and I hope people dont find reason to get rid of it
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reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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It took me a long time to distinguish each word because it was too hard to read. Kinda like black on black. Great message and I hope people dont find reason to get rid of it
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Comment Written 24-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2020
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Barb, thanks I changed the background sorry it was to hard
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Much better for these old eyes
