Autumn Picture Show
5-7-5 contest entry62 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 poem watching Autumn unfolds from the first until the last leave that falls it is an amazing picture show. Each season of Autumn is different although the same things happen.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2018
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A very well-written 5-7-5 poem watching Autumn unfolds from the first until the last leave that falls it is an amazing picture show. Each season of Autumn is different although the same things happen.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2018
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Thank you Sandra...I am so glad you like it...
Comment from Dean Kuch
This is a very well composed 5-7-5 poem with the exception that you've failed to use capitalization, Linda.
5-7-5 poetry would look something like this using your own words:
Amazed by the show,
a cinema of autumn
as the last leaf falls.
While haiku poetry frowns on the use of capitalization except for proper nouns, 5-7-5 poetry requires it.
Haiku poetry MUST pertain to nature and man's relationship to it, while 5-7-5 poetry can be about any topic the poet chooses.
Seasons, such as winter, spring, summer and fall, do not require capitalization because they are generic nouns. Some people may confuse these words as being proper nouns and try to capitalize them using that rule of capitalization.
Still, not many people seem to care about these things here. If I were judging this as a 5-7-5 I would require you make changes or it would be disqualified.
I'm not docking you any stars because I'm sure you'll make the necessary revisions.
Check out the link below then decide for yourself:
Why No 5-7-5?
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2018
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This is a very well composed 5-7-5 poem with the exception that you've failed to use capitalization, Linda.
5-7-5 poetry would look something like this using your own words:
Amazed by the show,
a cinema of autumn
as the last leaf falls.
While haiku poetry frowns on the use of capitalization except for proper nouns, 5-7-5 poetry requires it.
Haiku poetry MUST pertain to nature and man's relationship to it, while 5-7-5 poetry can be about any topic the poet chooses.
Seasons, such as winter, spring, summer and fall, do not require capitalization because they are generic nouns. Some people may confuse these words as being proper nouns and try to capitalize them using that rule of capitalization.
Still, not many people seem to care about these things here. If I were judging this as a 5-7-5 I would require you make changes or it would be disqualified.
I'm not docking you any stars because I'm sure you'll make the necessary revisions.
Check out the link below then decide for yourself:
Why No 5-7-5?
Comment Written 18-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2018
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HI Dean, I didn't use capitalization on anything but Autumn...and that is because it is the name of the season...thank you my sweet friend for a wonderful review...love Linda xxoo
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I realize that.
But 5-7-5 requires that you capitalize and punctuate normally.
Comment from Joy Graham
Dear Mystery Poet,
You have a lovely picture and message combination for this contest. I love your description of, "cinerama". That's a lovely way to describe it.
I counted eight syllables in line two when there should only be seven:
- "a - cin - a - ram - a - of - Au - tumn"
You might want to change that since this is a contest entry.
Sincerely Joy xx
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2018
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Dear Mystery Poet,
You have a lovely picture and message combination for this contest. I love your description of, "cinerama". That's a lovely way to describe it.
I counted eight syllables in line two when there should only be seven:
- "a - cin - a - ram - a - of - Au - tumn"
You might want to change that since this is a contest entry.
Sincerely Joy xx
Comment Written 18-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2018
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HI Joy, I had it spelled on paper right...thank you...posted late last night...thank you for the help...
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You could just say, "cinarama of Autumn". I really like cinarama. It's a terrific word.
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello!
Your 5/7/5 offering is creative. "Cinerama" applies well to your poem and the artwork used to highlight it. However, your second line contains 8 syllables, not seven. Easy fix: remove that article "a!"
Best wishes,
diane
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2018
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Hello!
Your 5/7/5 offering is creative. "Cinerama" applies well to your poem and the artwork used to highlight it. However, your second line contains 8 syllables, not seven. Easy fix: remove that article "a!"
Best wishes,
diane
Comment Written 18-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2018
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thank you Diane...had it right on paper...LOL...thank you for the help...
Comment from June Sargent
Lovely tribute to the beauty of autumn. Though it signals the end of summer, autumn has a charm all her own. As the last leaf falls, it signals the beginning of winter. And that has a beauty of its own - unless it's below zero like it has been here in New England recently! Well done.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2018
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Lovely tribute to the beauty of autumn. Though it signals the end of summer, autumn has a charm all her own. As the last leaf falls, it signals the beginning of winter. And that has a beauty of its own - unless it's below zero like it has been here in New England recently! Well done.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2018
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HI June, it is cold here as well...thank you for a wonderful review...
Comment from James H. Oldfield
Lovely imagery, and a faultless write.
Nothing I could suggest to change, and excellent 5/7/5 as it stands.
Best of luck in the contest.
Take care.
-James
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2018
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Lovely imagery, and a faultless write.
Nothing I could suggest to change, and excellent 5/7/5 as it stands.
Best of luck in the contest.
Take care.
-James
Comment Written 18-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2018
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Hi James, I am so glad you like it...thank you for the great review...
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is lovely and oh my it is a show isn't it and your appreciation in these few words says it all, a beautiful picture and this season is not my favourite, but the colours are usually breath-taking, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2018
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This is lovely and oh my it is a show isn't it and your appreciation in these few words says it all, a beautiful picture and this season is not my favourite, but the colours are usually breath-taking, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 18-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2018
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Hi Dolly, I love autumn as well...but winter comes in first...thank you for a wonderful review...I am so glad you like it...
Comment from Trudi Perkins
Great job ,love the picture and the whole color scheme. That's my favorite time of year. We take the boat up and down the river to see the fall colors on the this.Good luck in the contest, well written.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2018
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Great job ,love the picture and the whole color scheme. That's my favorite time of year. We take the boat up and down the river to see the fall colors on the this.Good luck in the contest, well written.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2018
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Hi Trudi, I do love Autumn...but Winter comes in first...LOL...thank you so much for a wonderful review...I am so glad you like it...
Comment from Gulbahar Sidhu
Hello from India
Nature's bounties are a spectacle often overlooked by us. Your poem conveys this message quite beautifully. A well written poem in a genre which is difficult by all standards.
Congratulations.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2018
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Hello from India
Nature's bounties are a spectacle often overlooked by us. Your poem conveys this message quite beautifully. A well written poem in a genre which is difficult by all standards.
Congratulations.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2018
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thank you so much for a great review...so glad you like it...
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the 5-7-5 Poetry writing prompt.
Well said, well written, and good match for your picture.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the 5-7-5 Poetry writing prompt.
Well said, well written, and good match for your picture.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 18-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2018
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Hi Sharon, thank you for a great review...so glad you like it...