My Babies
free verse love poem65 total reviews
Comment from JW
Your poem is well written and very truthful.
Isn't it amazing how quickly kids grow up? It seems like yesterday that mine were pre-schoolers playing at the local playground. Yet, in reality, that was several decades ago.
Thanks for sharing this. JW
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2016
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Your poem is well written and very truthful.
Isn't it amazing how quickly kids grow up? It seems like yesterday that mine were pre-schoolers playing at the local playground. Yet, in reality, that was several decades ago.
Thanks for sharing this. JW
Comment Written 18-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2016
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Time does fly. Thanks so much:)
Comment from LIJ Red
The most hardboiled and pessimistic soul tends to fall silent and dredge
up hope for the race and the future when in the presence of his grandchildren. Excellent free verse.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2016
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The most hardboiled and pessimistic soul tends to fall silent and dredge
up hope for the race and the future when in the presence of his grandchildren. Excellent free verse.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2016
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Thanks so much my friend:)
Comment from krys123
Hello Teresa;
-is very well written free verse poetic form touched my heart sincerely as you watched your babies grow into fine loving adults and to go on to get married and have babies themselves. But you always remember their little hands and their tiny feet what you once held them dearly.
-The sincerity in your imagery was very distinctly clear and definitively expressive and vividly descriptive throughout your poem.
-The picture was just gorgeously chosen and very reflectively appropriate, supportive and relative to the conceptual theme of your writing.
-Good luck in the contest and may the good Lord always be with you.
Alex
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2016
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Hello Teresa;
-is very well written free verse poetic form touched my heart sincerely as you watched your babies grow into fine loving adults and to go on to get married and have babies themselves. But you always remember their little hands and their tiny feet what you once held them dearly.
-The sincerity in your imagery was very distinctly clear and definitively expressive and vividly descriptive throughout your poem.
-The picture was just gorgeously chosen and very reflectively appropriate, supportive and relative to the conceptual theme of your writing.
-Good luck in the contest and may the good Lord always be with you.
Alex
Comment Written 18-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2016
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Thank you Alex for the most awesome review!!
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Your considerably welcome Teresa.
Alex
Comment from Slythytove2
The repetition of the first verse at the end worked especially well this time. Here it illustrates the circular cycle of life as we know it. In a world where less is more, I might have kept the first two lines of the last stanza and added the last line to make a three line closing, but that's just me. A nice poem of Motherly love.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2016
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The repetition of the first verse at the end worked especially well this time. Here it illustrates the circular cycle of life as we know it. In a world where less is more, I might have kept the first two lines of the last stanza and added the last line to make a three line closing, but that's just me. A nice poem of Motherly love.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2016
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Thanks for the great review and suggestion:)
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you're welcome.
Comment from MizKat
Oh what a beautiful poem you've written about your twin grandsons. They sure were cute at 7 months old. I'm sure they've stayed cute too when they are almost 6 years old. Thanks for sharing this. It's a great poem with a wonderful picture.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2016
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Oh what a beautiful poem you've written about your twin grandsons. They sure were cute at 7 months old. I'm sure they've stayed cute too when they are almost 6 years old. Thanks for sharing this. It's a great poem with a wonderful picture.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2016
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They are still adorable and I still have trouble telling them apart sometimes:) Thank you my friend for the wonderful review.
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You're very welcome my friend. You always write things very well and I enjoy reading them.
Comment from Bollie
This is a really good poem that has a really nice storyline that flows effortlessly. How it describes the repetitive nature of life is very profound. From raising your own kids to watching your grandchildren grow up. This is a really good poem. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2016
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This is a really good poem that has a really nice storyline that flows effortlessly. How it describes the repetitive nature of life is very profound. From raising your own kids to watching your grandchildren grow up. This is a really good poem. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2016
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Thank you Bollie:)
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Your very welcome.
Have a wonderful day.
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Your very welcome.
Have a wonderful day.
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Your very welcome.
Have a wonderful day.
Comment from Pantygynt
A different sort of love poem from the usual or perhaps I should say poetry about a different sort of love. And very effective it is too at describing the age old cycle imitated in this poem by the repetition of the first stanza as the last.
A nice match of form to content.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2016
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A different sort of love poem from the usual or perhaps I should say poetry about a different sort of love. And very effective it is too at describing the age old cycle imitated in this poem by the repetition of the first stanza as the last.
A nice match of form to content.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2016
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Thank gynt. Yes, I thought perhaps a different type of love would work.
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It works well and we need to be reminded that there is indeed more than just one kind. The Greeks got that bit right.
Comment from Nika2016
It is the sweetest poem...ages and stages of their lives...
I am raising my third set...so it has never stopped...smile.
Right now, I have teens who came to me three years ago...as pre-teens.
Your poem reveals a sense of family and an abiding love..
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2016
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It is the sweetest poem...ages and stages of their lives...
I am raising my third set...so it has never stopped...smile.
Right now, I have teens who came to me three years ago...as pre-teens.
Your poem reveals a sense of family and an abiding love..
Comment Written 18-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2016
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Wow - third set of kids to raise - that is quite a feat. Thanks for the great review:)
Comment from barbara.wilkey
My oldest turned 38 yesterday and it caused me to reflect on where time went. I have no clue, but it went. I have 5 grandchildren, the youngest is 4. Thank you sharing your wonderful poem of how time flies.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2016
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My oldest turned 38 yesterday and it caused me to reflect on where time went. I have no clue, but it went. I have 5 grandchildren, the youngest is 4. Thank you sharing your wonderful poem of how time flies.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2016
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Thanks so much:)
Comment from William Ross
Excellent, this is very nicely done in a free verse, and great entry on the love poem prompt. Well done reads great nice rhythm and flow. good luck on this and have a good day
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2016
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Excellent, this is very nicely done in a free verse, and great entry on the love poem prompt. Well done reads great nice rhythm and flow. good luck on this and have a good day
Comment Written 18-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2016
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Thank you so much for the sixer Bill:)
