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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
What a lovely picture, every child want to be like Superman, and why not, indeed. He is some.ne children and grown-ups alike can look up too. Well done in writing this poem, it was lovely. xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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What a lovely picture, every child want to be like Superman, and why not, indeed. He is some.ne children and grown-ups alike can look up too. Well done in writing this poem, it was lovely. xsx Sandra
Comment Written 02-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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The concept at least is good now to make all ingredients for proper stir. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed views.
Comment from candyfink
Yes, that's description of a hero, a person who is strong to say no all evils and be kind to others............... thank you for sharing this message...........
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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Yes, that's description of a hero, a person who is strong to say no all evils and be kind to others............... thank you for sharing this message...........
Comment Written 02-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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Pits removed has made this a smoother read. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating statement.
Comment from djeckert
A lot of interesting ideas presented, with some wisdon and a very unique delivery.Told from an intersting perspective . God Blesses you and yours
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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A lot of interesting ideas presented, with some wisdon and a very unique delivery.Told from an intersting perspective . God Blesses you and yours
Comment Written 02-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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Revisions are under way members are moulding this work to grammatical coherency. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed captivating considerations.
Comment from create4christ
Your picture shows an adorable little boy playing at being superman. It fits with your poem about superman. Your poem is very descriptive, which is great. There are a lot of grammar mistakes which seems it may be an accent thing...the hes and hims that are not needed or are in incorrect places...eg. "fast stripped clothes him", "he daily job". They don't work and they make your poem hard to read.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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Your picture shows an adorable little boy playing at being superman. It fits with your poem about superman. Your poem is very descriptive, which is great. There are a lot of grammar mistakes which seems it may be an accent thing...the hes and hims that are not needed or are in incorrect places...eg. "fast stripped clothes him", "he daily job". They don't work and they make your poem hard to read.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2016
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Appreciate your thoughts all statements true and revisions have been taken. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating comments.
Comment from c_lucas
I don't know if your grammatical mistakes were planned, or jut poor penmanship. There are too many to point out individually. Definely need a rewrite.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2016
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I don't know if your grammatical mistakes were planned, or jut poor penmanship. There are too many to point out individually. Definely need a rewrite.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2016
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Revision have been taken and hope pits, at least some be removed. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating statement.
Comment from padumachitta
hi...superman..do you know the song by the Bare Naked LAdies? ...try to find it..
anywa, good this,
feels true, and childlike(not childish)...a huge difference..
but how did he chnage so fast?...
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2016
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hi...superman..do you know the song by the Bare Naked LAdies? ...try to find it..
anywa, good this,
feels true, and childlike(not childish)...a huge difference..
but how did he chnage so fast?...
Comment Written 02-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2016
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Yeah all the things you said and some glad this write awoken your spirit: fly on. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed thoughts.
Comment from Liberty Justice
Five stars. An excellent hero for a child. Photo of child with superman outfit is so cute. Poet writes about superman not being ordinary man. Talks about this hero as though he is invincible. Nice flow with rhythm. View mine, also. Thanks! Good luck! liberty justice
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2016
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Five stars. An excellent hero for a child. Photo of child with superman outfit is so cute. Poet writes about superman not being ordinary man. Talks about this hero as though he is invincible. Nice flow with rhythm. View mine, also. Thanks! Good luck! liberty justice
Comment Written 02-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2016
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Wonderful thoughts glad this write touched your feelings. Thanking you for generous rate and encouraging statements.
Comment from Nan Beeson
I found your story about our hero to be quite profound in its simplicity. It intrigued me--Especially where you state,
"No one suspected him, behind those specs, he's seen humble; gentle and mild manner stuff."
What a wonderful way of describing a real hero. Thank you for sharing it. I particularly enjoyed the in-depth meaning of your poem.
If you're seeking heroes, a hero, you to fully to relate, remember Kent; his hidden him: unknown secret state.
Kent wasn't like us, he was kind to others, a perfect man; no mortal, just loyal: him Superman.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2016
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I found your story about our hero to be quite profound in its simplicity. It intrigued me--Especially where you state,
"No one suspected him, behind those specs, he's seen humble; gentle and mild manner stuff."
What a wonderful way of describing a real hero. Thank you for sharing it. I particularly enjoyed the in-depth meaning of your poem.
If you're seeking heroes, a hero, you to fully to relate, remember Kent; his hidden him: unknown secret state.
Kent wasn't like us, he was kind to others, a perfect man; no mortal, just loyal: him Superman.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2016
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Yeah surprise numbers of received reviews most for me. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed thoughts.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Marykelly
The message I get from this poem is that the qualities and characteristics of Clark Kent really are what make him Superman and in addition he has physical powers to accomplish his goals. The contrast between the quiet man behind the glasses and the Superman remind us not to be too judgmental Even if we can't assume the physical characteristics of Superman we can strive to be our best.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2016
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The message I get from this poem is that the qualities and characteristics of Clark Kent really are what make him Superman and in addition he has physical powers to accomplish his goals. The contrast between the quiet man behind the glasses and the Superman remind us not to be too judgmental Even if we can't assume the physical characteristics of Superman we can strive to be our best.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2016
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Well spoken and message intents fully understood by reader glad you found interests. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed thoughts.
Comment from LIJ Red
A quote from the old Lois and Clark TV series, by Clark: "Superman is something I do. Clark is who I am." I think the pidgin English of preschooler works fine. Excellent.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2016
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A quote from the old Lois and Clark TV series, by Clark: "Superman is something I do. Clark is who I am." I think the pidgin English of preschooler works fine. Excellent.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2016
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Did see young Superman enjoyed a few movies. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed thoughts.