Loud and Proud
Ya Gotta make a little NOISE sometimes!60 total reviews
Comment from koolaid228
I enjoyed reading your poem, you seemed to have a wonderful family life all the family difficulties and fun as well especially to hear you talk about the children and grands, thanks for sharing. koolaid228
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I enjoyed reading your poem, you seemed to have a wonderful family life all the family difficulties and fun as well especially to hear you talk about the children and grands, thanks for sharing. koolaid228
Comment Written 30-Apr-2016
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I want to express my heartfelt appreciation to you for not only reading ?Loud and Proud?, but also for taking the time to review it. We all know that our time is limited and everyone on FanStory covets our reviews. Most of our fellow FanStoryans are like me, in that they have never been published or paid for writing anything. No one in my family is a big fan of poetry and so I get my correction and adulation from you! The five beautiful stars that you have bestowed upon me enhance the viability of this piece. We need each other and I appreciate you very much. May God bless you!
Comment from Janet Foor
Sounds like a wonderful life. You have much to be loud and proud about. Very nice rhyme and near rhyme. Good use of alliteration with little like lemon. Well done and good luck in the bio contest.
Blessings
Janet
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Sounds like a wonderful life. You have much to be loud and proud about. Very nice rhyme and near rhyme. Good use of alliteration with little like lemon. Well done and good luck in the bio contest.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 30-Apr-2016
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I want to express my heartfelt appreciation to you for not only reading ?Loud and Proud?, but also for taking the time to review it. We all know that our time is limited and everyone on FanStory covets our reviews. Most of our fellow FanStoryans are like me, in that they have never been published or paid for writing anything. No one in my family is a big fan of poetry and so I get my correction and adulation from you! The five beautiful stars that you have bestowed upon me enhance the viability of this piece. We need each other and I appreciate you very much. May God bless you!
Comment from Liberty Justice
Congrats! Just voted now you're second place 3 votes. You need one more vote to tie for.1st. Good luck! After contest tell me who you are. Let's be fans. Check me out also. This sweet innocent poem flows with a story childhood to adulthood. Rhymes musical bouncy with moral not to be so loud. Very loving. liberty justice
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Congrats! Just voted now you're second place 3 votes. You need one more vote to tie for.1st. Good luck! After contest tell me who you are. Let's be fans. Check me out also. This sweet innocent poem flows with a story childhood to adulthood. Rhymes musical bouncy with moral not to be so loud. Very loving. liberty justice
Comment Written 30-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2016
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I want to express my heartfelt appreciation to you for not only reading ?Loud and Proud?, but also for taking the time to review it. We all know that our time is limited and everyone on FanStory covets our reviews. Most of our fellow FanStoryans are like me, in that they have never been published or paid for writing anything. No one in my family is a big fan of poetry and so I get my correction and adulation from you! The five beautiful stars that you have bestowed upon me enhance the viability of this piece. We need each other and I appreciate you very much. May God bless you!
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You're very welcome dear
fan story pen pal friend. My
family doesn't understand my
poetry too much either.
Check out my recent writings
now. Thanks liberty justice
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Thanks again,
Embrace the Love from above!
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Comment from YoungRiter42
A great poem. Your really invited me into your life and took me on a journey. I like the consistent writing in this poem. It is a great poem to give someone hope about becoming and parent and realizing that you have to break some eggs before you get an omelet.
All in all, I enjoyed this poem
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A great poem. Your really invited me into your life and took me on a journey. I like the consistent writing in this poem. It is a great poem to give someone hope about becoming and parent and realizing that you have to break some eggs before you get an omelet.
All in all, I enjoyed this poem
Comment Written 30-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2016
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I want to express my heartfelt appreciation to you for not only reading ?Loud and Proud?, but also for taking the time to review it. We all know that our time is limited and everyone on FanStory covets our reviews. Most of our fellow FanStoryans are like me, in that they have never been published or paid for writing anything. No one in my family is a big fan of poetry and so I get my correction and adulation from you! The five beautiful stars that you have bestowed upon me enhance the viability of this piece. We need each other and I appreciate you very much. May God bless you! Him
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No problem. I like reading to get better and hear other peoples voices. Please continue to write.
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Thanks again,
Embrace the Love from above!
Comment from arline21
I like your title..."Loud and Proud..." It seems through your words that raising your voice from time to time has not done any harm...sometimes it can help keep us sane...
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I like your title..."Loud and Proud..." It seems through your words that raising your voice from time to time has not done any harm...sometimes it can help keep us sane...
Comment Written 30-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2016
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I want to express my heartfelt appreciation to you for not only reading ?Loud and Proud?, but also for taking the time to review it. We all know that our time is limited and everyone on FanStory covets our reviews. Most of our fellow FanStoryans are like me, in that they have never been published or paid for writing anything. No one in my family is a big fan of poetry and so I get my correction and adulation from you! The five beautiful stars that you have bestowed upon me enhance the viability of this piece. We need each other and I appreciate you very much. May God bless you! Him
Comment from jusylee72
You have indeed led a wonderful life full of reality and fun. Starting with your first mistaken marriage and growing into who you are now. I love that you are a loud Grandpa, one day they will miss your laugh. Make sure they have a copy of this poem. They will treasure it.
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You have indeed led a wonderful life full of reality and fun. Starting with your first mistaken marriage and growing into who you are now. I love that you are a loud Grandpa, one day they will miss your laugh. Make sure they have a copy of this poem. They will treasure it.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2016
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I want to express my heartfelt appreciation to you for not only reading ?Loud and Proud?, but also for taking the time to review it. We all know that our time is limited and everyone on FanStory covets our reviews. Most of our fellow FanStoryans are like me, in that they have never been published or paid for writing anything. No one in my family is a big fan of poetry and so I get my correction and adulation from you! The five beautiful stars that you have bestowed upon me enhance the viability of this piece. We need each other and I appreciate you very much. May God bless you!
Comment from Domino 2
Despite life's set-backs, that all of us have, you have acquired loving generations of family, and it seems you're very content and happy, so you must have done a lot right.
Very well expressed, though I found it largely a 'jumpy' read, due to lack of poetic meter which elevates rhymed/structured poetry to a new level, IMO.
Good luck and best wishes, Ray.
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Despite life's set-backs, that all of us have, you have acquired loving generations of family, and it seems you're very content and happy, so you must have done a lot right.
Very well expressed, though I found it largely a 'jumpy' read, due to lack of poetic meter which elevates rhymed/structured poetry to a new level, IMO.
Good luck and best wishes, Ray.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2016
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I want to express my heartfelt appreciation to you for not only reading ?Loud and Proud?, but also for taking the time to review it. We all know that our time is limited and everyone on FanStory covets our reviews. Most of our fellow FanStoryans are like me, in that they have never been published or paid for writing anything. No one in my family is a big fan of poetry and so I get my correction and adulation from you! The five beautiful stars that you have bestowed upon me enhance the viability of this piece. We need each other and I appreciate you very much.
I know what you?re saying about jumpy. I told my wife that it sounded contrived. I don?t know the language of poetry, so I don?t know what meter is exactly. I do know that when I would write a poem that flowed and put it on fan story, I would be flagged by poets for syllable counts, which I never knew was an issue till I got here.
May God bless you!
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Thanks for your extremely kind, thoughtful and gracious reply.
No way would I classify your poem as 'contrived', as I found it very real and moving.
A large number of members either don't understand or appreciate meter, and they will comment purely on the theme and how they relate to it. Most are also very kind in their reviews, though I suspect many are generic, lazy and of nit much help.
I respectfully suggest you 'Google', 'Poetic meter', where there are loads of tips, and the 'art' is easily mastered in a short time and becomes natural when writing, though of course a little extra effort is required, though it's well worth it, IMO as it gives the writer extra satisfaction when achieved.
Best wishes, Ray.
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Thank you so much again,
Embrace the Love from above!
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All I get 'from above' is pigeon shit in my eye. ;-)
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I'm sorry to hear that, I will pray that your skies will be blue and good things will fall upon you from above.
Comment from nancyrabbrose
You have a very sweet poem. I understand about the "loud". Clever. One thing I might wish to correct a bit: the last line of the poem. It seemed to be an abrupt statement that the grandkids think you are loud. I thought you had learned not to scream when the kids were adolescents. I might be wrong. It is a good poem.
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You have a very sweet poem. I understand about the "loud". Clever. One thing I might wish to correct a bit: the last line of the poem. It seemed to be an abrupt statement that the grandkids think you are loud. I thought you had learned not to scream when the kids were adolescents. I might be wrong. It is a good poem.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2016
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I want to express my heartfelt appreciation to you for not only reading ?Loud and Proud?, but also for taking the time to review it. We all know that our time is limited and everyone on FanStory covets our reviews. Most of our fellow FanStoryans are like me, in that they have never been published or paid for writing anything. No one in my family is a big fan of poetry and so I get my correction and adulation from you! The five beautiful stars that you have bestowed upon me enhance the viability of this piece. We need each other and I appreciate you very much. Now when my Grand kids say I am to loud I am speaking louder because of my hearing Loss. May God bless you!
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thank you for explaining the volume of your voice aspect. If you haven't I suggest that you explain to the grandkids why you speak loudly. They will understand.
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They also say Gramps, You can't hear. LOL
Embrace the Love from above!
Comment from Ben Colder
Lol. Ear plugs causes the loud voices sometimes. Kids say, Grumps wears them in both ears. I find nothing wrong with this poem. Makes sense to me.
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Lol. Ear plugs causes the loud voices sometimes. Kids say, Grumps wears them in both ears. I find nothing wrong with this poem. Makes sense to me.
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Comment Written 30-Apr-2016
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I want to express my heartfelt appreciation to you for not only reading ?Loud and Proud?, but also for taking the time to review it. We all know that our time is limited and everyone on FanStory covets our reviews. Most of our fellow FanStoryans are like me, in that they have never been published or paid for writing anything. No one in my family is a big fan of poetry and so I get my correction and adulation from you! The five beautiful stars that you have bestowed upon me enhance the viability of this piece. We need each other and I appreciate you very much. May God bless you!
Comment from foxangie123
What a great write. You just took this contest by the reigns in my opinion. Great picture too. Lovely family and outstanding fabulous writing. See you at voting.
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What a great write. You just took this contest by the reigns in my opinion. Great picture too. Lovely family and outstanding fabulous writing. See you at voting.
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Comment Written 30-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2016
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I want to express my heartfelt appreciation to you for not only reading ?Loud and Proud?, but also for taking the time to review it. We all know that our time is limited and everyone on FanStory covets our reviews. Most of our fellow FanStoryans are like me, in that they have never been published or paid for writing anything. No one in my family is a big fan of poetry and so I get my adulation from you! The five beautiful stars that you have bestowed upon me enhance the viability of this piece. We need each other and I appreciate you very much. May God bless you!
