Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "I leave this Note "A book of Poetry & Writing
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Comment from angelface2
How sad is this message! Very well written. It sounds just like something a soldier would write in WWI. I find it heartbreaking. Wish wars didn't have to be fought! Miss Sally
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2014
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How sad is this message! Very well written. It sounds just like something a soldier would write in WWI. I find it heartbreaking. Wish wars didn't have to be fought! Miss Sally
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
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thank you Miss Sally
Comment from Bobby Jo
I love this, we fight for what? Why? It makes no sense, as a mother of a teenaged son, my tears cry out to all around, who send their loved ones to the ground.
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I love this, we fight for what? Why? It makes no sense, as a mother of a teenaged son, my tears cry out to all around, who send their loved ones to the ground.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
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thank you for this
Comment from Caressa_08
A virtual six with a photograph from a war past...Because war & really any conflict, which there are so many, these days, or is it because everything is on camera broadcasted to the world so easily, unlike WW1, that possibly could of been avoided?...All that leads to so many deaths, affect families, who still feel so much sorrow for their loved ones who fought dying for what their country deemed the right thing to do?...Though, to protect ones country, or those who feel that an injustice has been...or drafted, war is likely to still bring much unending sorrows & terrible memories..
Caressa
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A virtual six with a photograph from a war past...Because war & really any conflict, which there are so many, these days, or is it because everything is on camera broadcasted to the world so easily, unlike WW1, that possibly could of been avoided?...All that leads to so many deaths, affect families, who still feel so much sorrow for their loved ones who fought dying for what their country deemed the right thing to do?...Though, to protect ones country, or those who feel that an injustice has been...or drafted, war is likely to still bring much unending sorrows & terrible memories..
Caressa
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
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thank you for this
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
The tone of this is quite pensive, accentuated by the repeated, nuanced references to the grayness of the day. And I am particularly touched by the phrase, "shrapnel killed the brave all day." The poem brings WWI up close and personal. Wonderful writing. Best regards, Jeanie Mercer
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The tone of this is quite pensive, accentuated by the repeated, nuanced references to the grayness of the day. And I am particularly touched by the phrase, "shrapnel killed the brave all day." The poem brings WWI up close and personal. Wonderful writing. Best regards, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
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thank you for this
Gary
Comment from Raphael Montonaro
A Six Banfer for this protest poem. Great writing. Great form and content. Some great lines in here also. A poem from a master craftsman! Deepwater does it again!
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A Six Banfer for this protest poem. Great writing. Great form and content. Some great lines in here also. A poem from a master craftsman! Deepwater does it again!
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
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thank you for this Gary
Comment from mjac777
A very thoughtful write on WW1 and the senseless horrors of war.
It was very creative of you to pen exactly the same verse for both British and German soldiers.
And a meaningful ending - both notes got home - to both mothers -
My son is in the army and each day I worry and pray so this poem is especially relevant.
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A very thoughtful write on WW1 and the senseless horrors of war.
It was very creative of you to pen exactly the same verse for both British and German soldiers.
And a meaningful ending - both notes got home - to both mothers -
My son is in the army and each day I worry and pray so this poem is especially relevant.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
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thank you for this
Comment from Green Lake Girl
You've illustrated with your words the absolute futility of war. It's the same story for everyone involved, just slight twists like the Kaiser vs. the King. Young lives are mowed down no matter the war, no matter the cause. Great job portraying the reality.
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You've illustrated with your words the absolute futility of war. It's the same story for everyone involved, just slight twists like the Kaiser vs. the King. Young lives are mowed down no matter the war, no matter the cause. Great job portraying the reality.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
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thank you for this
Comment from Chrisluca
Very sad but painfully true. lot of letters got sent home without the person that penned them. I enjoyed your poem. The flow is comfortable and its words are strangely peaceful even though you are talking of war and pending death. Nicely done, thank you for sharing your work.
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Very sad but painfully true. lot of letters got sent home without the person that penned them. I enjoyed your poem. The flow is comfortable and its words are strangely peaceful even though you are talking of war and pending death. Nicely done, thank you for sharing your work.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
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thank you Chrisluca
Comment from Eternal Muse
What a magnificent creation! You represent the whole epoch with your poem.
The repeating lines work perfectly with German Lines and British Lines. And then in No Man's Land this is powerful:
Mothers around the world do cry and pray, for soldiers their sons, who fight away.
Shells exploded in glares of gray, as shrapnel killed the brave all day,
A letter did state both died this way, upon the fields so wet and gray.
Fantastic artistic presentation - a very impressive work.
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What a magnificent creation! You represent the whole epoch with your poem.
The repeating lines work perfectly with German Lines and British Lines. And then in No Man's Land this is powerful:
Mothers around the world do cry and pray, for soldiers their sons, who fight away.
Shells exploded in glares of gray, as shrapnel killed the brave all day,
A letter did state both died this way, upon the fields so wet and gray.
Fantastic artistic presentation - a very impressive work.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
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thank you yeltel for this review and the six you gave
Gary
Comment from Janeyjane
Excellent poem that shows so many young boys lives that were lost. Probably many of them didn't even understand what they were dying for.
They will always be remembered.
'with all the dead lie all around' , was it on purpose it was phrased this way?
thanks for sharing
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Excellent poem that shows so many young boys lives that were lost. Probably many of them didn't even understand what they were dying for.
They will always be remembered.
'with all the dead lie all around' , was it on purpose it was phrased this way?
thanks for sharing
Comment Written 19-Aug-2014
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welcome
