Along the Jericho Road
Viewing comments for Chapter 50 "Sunkothai Moon, Part II"Murder Mystery
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Comment from c_lucas
Only a fool with pushed a head strong woman. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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Only a fool with pushed a head strong woman. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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Charlie, thank you so much for your continued support and generosity. :0) Bev
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You're welcome, Bev. Charlie
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Great as always. Glad to see another chapter. I saw no errors and felt it very well done as usual. =} Looking forward to the next chapter. I hope you have a wonderful Christmas. Rox
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Great as always. Glad to see another chapter. I saw no errors and felt it very well done as usual. =} Looking forward to the next chapter. I hope you have a wonderful Christmas. Rox
Comment Written 10-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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Hiya, Rox. Good to hear from you. I really appreciate your words of encouragement and generosity. Hope you have a wonderful Christmas, too. How's you children's series going?
Hugs, Bev
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I have 2 books in print now and am doing some book signings. One is at my work place tomorrow. They are so good and helpful about letting me do a signing. I'm not getting rich, but didn't expect too, but am happy to see what sells and get feedback. I also gave about 90 to a homeless ministry. That did my heart good to know some little homeless boys and girls will get a new book for Christmas.
Comment from CR Delport
I'm still trying to figure out what is the deal between Dred and Jana. Are they just colleagues or where there something more at one time or another. This is another solid chapter that is very well written and makes for an excellent read.
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I'm still trying to figure out what is the deal between Dred and Jana. Are they just colleagues or where there something more at one time or another. This is another solid chapter that is very well written and makes for an excellent read.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much, Christie. I'm glad the relationship came across as conflicted because it very much is. Thanks for the great insights and encouragement. Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from SDTracyHarper
Without regards to previous chapters, I found your story interesting. I do have some minor suggestions you may wish to consider. i.e.; Change "our fault - to - our faults" and "enough for you get here - to - enough for you to get here." another suggestion is to read your work out loud or have someone else read it to you. I use this method to point out missing words or story flow I would overlook with reading alone. Nice work.
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Without regards to previous chapters, I found your story interesting. I do have some minor suggestions you may wish to consider. i.e.; Change "our fault - to - our faults" and "enough for you get here - to - enough for you to get here." another suggestion is to read your work out loud or have someone else read it to you. I use this method to point out missing words or story flow I would overlook with reading alone. Nice work.
Comment Written 10-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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Thanks for your suggestions and fine review. I appreciate it.
Comment from lancellot
Well done. I can't believe I missed this book. I love the message in within also. When Jana is taught that true strength actually comes from facing the things you fear and overcoming, I said that is what all our young people need to be learning.
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Well done. I can't believe I missed this book. I love the message in within also. When Jana is taught that true strength actually comes from facing the things you fear and overcoming, I said that is what all our young people need to be learning.
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Comment Written 10-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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Thank you so much, Lancellot. I'm honored by your gracious and generous review. Glad you stopped by! Warm regards, Bev
Comment from barkingdog
This is a perfect post, Bev. Their dialogue and body language is fantastic. Dred thigh touching here for domination; her moving away.(for one)
I loved your opening with young Jana and her Uncle. Death changes us inside. Yes.
I needed to run through the case again and your brought Father Brian forward as a suspect.
Maybe these two CAN work together as two cops with good instincts and solve this one.
Did the killer harm Jena's grandmother?
Good way to leave us wondering. You!
Oh, when Dred dabs the corners of his mouth, that seemed kind of feminine. He's definitely not the prim sort from the way he's going after the hot number at the bar.
(Wiped might be better.)
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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This is a perfect post, Bev. Their dialogue and body language is fantastic. Dred thigh touching here for domination; her moving away.(for one)
I loved your opening with young Jana and her Uncle. Death changes us inside. Yes.
I needed to run through the case again and your brought Father Brian forward as a suspect.
Maybe these two CAN work together as two cops with good instincts and solve this one.
Did the killer harm Jena's grandmother?
Good way to leave us wondering. You!
Oh, when Dred dabs the corners of his mouth, that seemed kind of feminine. He's definitely not the prim sort from the way he's going after the hot number at the bar.
(Wiped might be better.)
Comment Written 10-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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Hi, Ellen. Thank you so very much for this great review. I wondered if the opening might confuse more than help, so I'm glad that, so far, its been received well. And you get it: professionals put aside their feelings all the time in order to get a job done. Both Jana and Dred want to solve this killer and take the killer out. Thanks for stating that so well!
As always, I'm honored when a writer I admire gives me such a great review. I was thinking the dabbing might show that Dred is a bit more up-town than the usual in that part of Minnesota. But, yes, it might come off as feminine.
Hugs, Bev
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Using a napkin instead of his sleeve IS uptown in Pinebluff. LOL
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Ha, point well made, Ellen. xxx
Comment from B. Diehl
This took me a loooooonnnng time to read, it was worth it. I would suggest maybe trying to condense it a little, although I can't particularly point to anything that seems unnecessary. Overall, great writing!
-B<3
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This took me a loooooonnnng time to read, it was worth it. I would suggest maybe trying to condense it a little, although I can't particularly point to anything that seems unnecessary. Overall, great writing!
-B<3
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Comment Written 10-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2013
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Thanks for hanging in there and finishing the chapter. It's quite long compared to my usual posts. I appreciate the support.
