Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 63 "part two, Chapter 19"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from ulster3
Hello, Barbara.
So, surgery was not to be avoided. Poor Anna. The injuries are so many! It's just great that you've been publishing the SAFE site and the Domestic Violence Hotline at the end of each chapter. This entire write (from the beginning)has been an important social commentary, and well researched.
Warmly, Rebecca
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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Hello, Barbara.
So, surgery was not to be avoided. Poor Anna. The injuries are so many! It's just great that you've been publishing the SAFE site and the Domestic Violence Hotline at the end of each chapter. This entire write (from the beginning)has been an important social commentary, and well researched.
Warmly, Rebecca
Comment Written 22-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, barbara, you did a great job writing this chapter where anna is rescued from bobby but now has to heal from her injuries and troy is thinking he could have done more to protect her.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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this is very well written, barbara, you did a great job writing this chapter where anna is rescued from bobby but now has to heal from her injuries and troy is thinking he could have done more to protect her.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from AprilShower
It doesn't sound good for Anna. She has taken a horrible amount of abuse. I can't imagine what would cause him to treat her like this. He would have to be completely insane. Will this woman survive this nightmare? If she does, she might be permanently damaged. This is a very sad situation.
April
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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It doesn't sound good for Anna. She has taken a horrible amount of abuse. I can't imagine what would cause him to treat her like this. He would have to be completely insane. Will this woman survive this nightmare? If she does, she might be permanently damaged. This is a very sad situation.
April
Comment Written 22-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome, Barbara. :o) April
Comment from ScarletClearwater
Another well paced and exciting chapter. The tension is good and the length of the post left me wanting more. Great job with this piece.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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Another well paced and exciting chapter. The tension is good and the length of the post left me wanting more. Great job with this piece.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from N.K. Wagner
I'm a little confused by the medical stuff, barbara. A spleen in like a gall bladder but for blood instead of bile. If it's ruptured it allows blood to fill the abdominal cavity. It has to be removed. Never heard of partially removing one - it's not something one needs to live.
You have a couple of short paragraphs with the EMTs and calling home that are unnecessary. Paul can say he called home while he's talking to Troy in the waiting room. Going from the house directly to the hospital would pick up the action a little.
All in all, a good segment. :) nancy
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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I'm a little confused by the medical stuff, barbara. A spleen in like a gall bladder but for blood instead of bile. If it's ruptured it allows blood to fill the abdominal cavity. It has to be removed. Never heard of partially removing one - it's not something one needs to live.
You have a couple of short paragraphs with the EMTs and calling home that are unnecessary. Paul can say he called home while he's talking to Troy in the waiting room. Going from the house directly to the hospital would pick up the action a little.
All in all, a good segment. :) nancy
Comment Written 22-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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Thank you for your kind review. I will check out those areas.
Comment from missy98writer
Barbara,
Chapter sixty-three is magnificently written, my talented friend. Poor Anna is fighting for her life with a vast array of injuries sustained from her bastard ex-s beat fest. I'm glad Boobie got it right between the eyes.
I'll be right back to finish my review. I need to use the bed pan. I immensely enjoy your strong narrative voice and excellent detailed writing. I'd recommend your chapter 63 to other reviewers to ready. Thank you for entertaining me with your exciting chapter. Poor Troy is worried because he loves Anna. I hope you have Anna survive her life threatening injuries due to spouse abuse that escalated. You rock, my friend. Wonderful day to you..
Melissa.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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Barbara,
Chapter sixty-three is magnificently written, my talented friend. Poor Anna is fighting for her life with a vast array of injuries sustained from her bastard ex-s beat fest. I'm glad Boobie got it right between the eyes.
I'll be right back to finish my review. I need to use the bed pan. I immensely enjoy your strong narrative voice and excellent detailed writing. I'd recommend your chapter 63 to other reviewers to ready. Thank you for entertaining me with your exciting chapter. Poor Troy is worried because he loves Anna. I hope you have Anna survive her life threatening injuries due to spouse abuse that escalated. You rock, my friend. Wonderful day to you..
Melissa.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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Thank you Melissa for your kind review and support.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Barbara,
This is another sit on the edge of my seat chapters. Bobby hurt Anna so bad that it will be a miracle if she survives. There are a lot of reasons why we need a spleen so I hope the doctors don't have to remove all of it. Poor Troy is beside himself but there is nothing he can do but wait. I know it will be next weekend before you post another chapter and I am already needing it right now! Well done....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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Hi Barbara,
This is another sit on the edge of my seat chapters. Bobby hurt Anna so bad that it will be a miracle if she survives. There are a lot of reasons why we need a spleen so I hope the doctors don't have to remove all of it. Poor Troy is beside himself but there is nothing he can do but wait. I know it will be next weekend before you post another chapter and I am already needing it right now! Well done....blessings, chey
Comment Written 22-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and insight.
Comment from whispersofthesoul
Hiya,
this is another excellent chapter, a very sad chapter and a sad book that you depict excellently. you approach the abuse both from the angle of the perperter and victim in a realistic manner which i believable and realistic without going over the top. the road to recovery is a long one that many people dont reach the end of it often has some effect on them for the rest of their lives.
good job xx
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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Hiya,
this is another excellent chapter, a very sad chapter and a sad book that you depict excellently. you approach the abuse both from the angle of the perperter and victim in a realistic manner which i believable and realistic without going over the top. the road to recovery is a long one that many people dont reach the end of it often has some effect on them for the rest of their lives.
good job xx
Comment Written 22-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and insight.
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Barbara ....
From your description of the horrific injuries sustained by Anna at the hands of her brutal husband, Bobby, I would say that you have good first-hand knowledge of such things from a medical point of view. Perhaps you have been a Nurse.
There are just a few small changes to recommend ...
* You have - Three of the SWAT team members busted through the front door. I suggest ... burst through ....
* You have - the patient filled room... I suggest -
the patient-filled room ...
* You have - Watching you pace is wearing me out ... I suggest - Watching you pace up and down is wearing me out ..
Again - thank you for sharing this tense and interesting story with us. Generally speaking, it is well written.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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Hullo Barbara ....
From your description of the horrific injuries sustained by Anna at the hands of her brutal husband, Bobby, I would say that you have good first-hand knowledge of such things from a medical point of view. Perhaps you have been a Nurse.
There are just a few small changes to recommend ...
* You have - Three of the SWAT team members busted through the front door. I suggest ... burst through ....
* You have - the patient filled room... I suggest -
the patient-filled room ...
* You have - Watching you pace is wearing me out ... I suggest - Watching you pace up and down is wearing me out ..
Again - thank you for sharing this tense and interesting story with us. Generally speaking, it is well written.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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Thank you for your suggestions. I will check out those areas.
Comment from Janie King
At least she's alive but now I have another WEEK to get through..trauma city...would it do any good if I prayed for her????? I found myself praying for a situation on a soap opera when I was in 10th grade..that was when I stopped watching soap operas. Have a great week. God bless.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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At least she's alive but now I have another WEEK to get through..trauma city...would it do any good if I prayed for her????? I found myself praying for a situation on a soap opera when I was in 10th grade..that was when I stopped watching soap operas. Have a great week. God bless.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2012
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It probably wouldn't do any good to pray for Anna, but you can pray that I finish this novel soon. Also, one of the ladies on my first grade team father died this morning. He had been sick for awhile. She's taking it very hard. She's a daddy's girl, which I understand, so am I. Anyway, her name is Amy.
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I do pray you're not going to let her die...I will pray you can finish the book soon and I will keep Amy in prayer..I was a daddy's girl too..I'm praying for you too. God bless.
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Thank you.