Little Billy
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Comment from Valkarie
This is a little on the chilling side I think, but its a good piece with a powerful dialogue which gets the reader thinking about your words. Visual and concise with intriguing descriptions this piece pulls you into the words which are so enigmatic poignant.
A well structured piece of writing.
Valkarie...
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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This is a little on the chilling side I think, but its a good piece with a powerful dialogue which gets the reader thinking about your words. Visual and concise with intriguing descriptions this piece pulls you into the words which are so enigmatic poignant.
A well structured piece of writing.
Valkarie...
Comment Written 08-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Thank you.
Comment from CodyJack
It does not matter if i believe in what you have written or not. You wrote a good poem with goof rhythm and flow and something to make many think upon and that is all that counts. Cody
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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It does not matter if i believe in what you have written or not. You wrote a good poem with goof rhythm and flow and something to make many think upon and that is all that counts. Cody
Comment Written 08-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Thanks Cody. I admit it contraversal at best. Thank you for taking the time to review it.
Comment from marcii
This is a new type of poem to me but what I have read you have written it well.
Your poem flows well throughout and is structured good.
If there are gods the why wouldn't their be the devil.
Marcii
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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This is a new type of poem to me but what I have read you have written it well.
Your poem flows well throughout and is structured good.
If there are gods the why wouldn't their be the devil.
Marcii
Comment Written 07-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Thank you and hopefully we will reduce our dependency on oil.
Comment from Charlene0513
To keimosobie,
A rather morbid poem addressing the rank of oil we have in which to live.
Descriptive and quite imaginative.
Charlene
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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To keimosobie,
A rather morbid poem addressing the rank of oil we have in which to live.
Descriptive and quite imaginative.
Charlene
Comment Written 07-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Thanks. I don't expect it to be popular but it's something we should all think about.
Comment from chita
You have great artwork and your arthor notes are superb--you have a good flow with your poem and rhyme well--you ask many questions pertaining to oil and this form of poetry you have delivered a powerful message what will we do when we run out of oil--and I don't think that anyone ever really "think" about running out of oil--you did a superb job.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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You have great artwork and your arthor notes are superb--you have a good flow with your poem and rhyme well--you ask many questions pertaining to oil and this form of poetry you have delivered a powerful message what will we do when we run out of oil--and I don't think that anyone ever really "think" about running out of oil--you did a superb job.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Thank you for that awesome review. I worked hard on it and it's nice to be rewarded.
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You did a wonderful job!!!!
Comment from Jetco
Use vegetable oil? Who is little Billy? Did Jesus say lay down our lives? Since this was released by accident I will not give it low stars but 5. This world may be better off when we do run out of oil. Go electric.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Use vegetable oil? Who is little Billy? Did Jesus say lay down our lives? Since this was released by accident I will not give it low stars but 5. This world may be better off when we do run out of oil. Go electric.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Lets hope we reduce our dependencies on oil by then. I am little Billy or at least I was before I was adopted and changed my name at 7. Thank you for the kind review and not killing me.
Comment from Sharon Lee
A Villanelle, Kudos for using the form. It's not an easy one to make work, I think you have done a great job here. Oil, man I think we are so over it, but then again we can't do without it. Good theme, strong enough to get you home with this one.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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A Villanelle, Kudos for using the form. It's not an easy one to make work, I think you have done a great job here. Oil, man I think we are so over it, but then again we can't do without it. Good theme, strong enough to get you home with this one.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2010
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Thank you sharon. I wasn't so sure. We will have to wait and see.
Thanks for the review.
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my pleasure
Comment from Sarah_Goldwell
This is an excellent poem. It is well written well edited and the rhyme and flow are good. The words are cleverly chosen and make for a very enjoyable read
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2010
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This is an excellent poem. It is well written well edited and the rhyme and flow are good. The words are cleverly chosen and make for a very enjoyable read
Comment Written 06-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2010
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Thank you but im still editing it. I released it by accident but I appriciate the stars.
Comment from Kelly Shackelford
When we run out of oil, we are in very bog trouble for certain! Great topic. There was a NIT with nife should be knife. Thank you for sharing it with us
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reply by the author on 06-Sep-2010
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When we run out of oil, we are in very bog trouble for certain! Great topic. There was a NIT with nife should be knife. Thank you for sharing it with us
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Comment Written 06-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2010
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this wasnt meant to be reviewd yet it was released by accident could you add a star so it dosent effect it.