Comment from jadapenn

Excellent

Would you believe I'm still awake in S Africa and caught this on bonus. Very nice chapter full of exciting action and suspense. The inner conflict eats away at Leya. About time she admitted she loves the guy Steven. And him - the hunk needs a good girl. Your interaction and descriptions are good. I felt I was there - nerves and all. This Peggy is just like my Lily. They need to be shot at dawn with no breakfast. lol. Well done. luv jada

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2010

Thank you, girl friend. What are you doing up at this hour. Don't you have work tomorrow. Peggy's badness will get worse.

reply by jadapenn on 03-Jan-2010

Well as I see it, checking up on you! haha. You guys all have fun while I'm sleeping. It's not good here. When I'm awake then you're asleep and Oz and NZ are working. I sit all day with no-one to chat to. Then you wake up and I have to get to bed to work in the morning. Not fair.

Comment from NightWriter

Excellent

Call for back-up? Sounds like things are intensifying. "Chapter 7; part 2" is another captivating and well written chapter.

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2010

Thank you for your review. It will get more intense.

Comment from missy98writer

Exceptional

Barbara,
This chapter is a masterpiece. I was glued to the screen with your action and great writing. The dialogue, descriptive achene and flow are perfection. This chapter is six stars in my opinion. I read it twice. I hope Steven is okay. I have a feeling Peggy ratted Leya out to her family. That witch will stop at nothing to get Steve. Are you going to leave us hanging until next weekend? I'm dying to know what happens. Why did Steven call for back-up.
Melissa.

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2010

Unfortunately, I have too. By the time I get home from work I only get reviewing done, between dinner, dishes, family responsibilty. I amazed me how men come home from work and read the newspaper. Thank you for your kind review and 6 stars. I appreciate them so much.

reply by missy98writer on 03-Jan-2010

I can't wait to read the next chapter. What do you teach? Is it grade school?
Melissa.

reply by the author on 03-Jan-2010

First grade. My class is made up entirely of the youngest first graders. Children that won't be seven until this summer. I am not smart enough to teach anything higher.

reply by missy98writer on 03-Jan-2010

I bet you are smarter than you think. Your chapter was brilliant. Anyone gives you lower than a five is wrong in my opinion.
Melissa.

reply by the author on 03-Jan-2010

I can almost bet empir66 will give a 4, she never gives me higher than a 4. She says I don't go into enough detail.

reply by missy98writer on 03-Jan-2010

Yes, she does the same thing to most of us writers who post chapters. Some reviewers don't believe in fives or sixes, its against their Religion,
Melissa.

reply by the author on 03-Jan-2010

I got a 4 because Leya left her room in a T-shirt and panties with a house full of men. I would to if I was awaken in the middle of the night to the sounds of gunfire.

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

This is very well written with some very good humor in it. I like the way the men treated Peggy. It seems Leya is gaining some support. Very good attack sequest. Keep up the good work.

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 Comment Written 03-Jan-2010

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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2010

Thank you for the review. I appreciate your continued support.

reply by c_lucas on 03-Jan-2010

You're welcome, Barbara. Charlie