CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from Paradox Tremors
Another great write my friend. Well written and thought out piece of poetry--talk about having talent. A simple message, if we continue to hang our head low, nothing good will come our way. Swim against the tide and find the happiness each of us deserves. Thanks for sharing this with us.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2009
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Another great write my friend. Well written and thought out piece of poetry--talk about having talent. A simple message, if we continue to hang our head low, nothing good will come our way. Swim against the tide and find the happiness each of us deserves. Thanks for sharing this with us.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2009
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Paradox, thank you so much for your "exceptional" review of this poem. Means so much. And I am so honored by your very kind compliments. From my heart...Sue
Comment from mermaids
I can relate to this, I grew up in a family that often was negative and I believe in the power of positive thinking. This is a great poem about this particular subject and choosing not to follow the negativity.
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I can relate to this, I grew up in a family that often was negative and I believe in the power of positive thinking. This is a great poem about this particular subject and choosing not to follow the negativity.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2009
Comment from steevie
the syllables form family, either way, work well in your poem.
Family, with syllables of two or three, let be ... LOL
I enjoyed your poem (you've written poems that read a tiny bit smoother, but I still enjoyed this one just the same)
take care
steve
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the syllables form family, either way, work well in your poem.
Family, with syllables of two or three, let be ... LOL
I enjoyed your poem (you've written poems that read a tiny bit smoother, but I still enjoyed this one just the same)
take care
steve
Comment Written 16-Feb-2009
Comment from Kingsland
I really liked the poem, but I didn't quite connect with the title of it. But be that as it may, the poem is what counts here and that is written well with good free flowing thoughts... John
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I really liked the poem, but I didn't quite connect with the title of it. But be that as it may, the poem is what counts here and that is written well with good free flowing thoughts... John
Comment Written 16-Feb-2009
Comment from Arkine
There are those that find incredible strength when you would think that none should exist. I, myself, have found recently that things just keep going down hill. I tried very hard not to let it get to me, but lately, the little joy that I seem to find is mostly from reading things on line. Isn't that sad? Well, I suppose I found something that has once again sparked my interest, with the weather starting to change I'll find that I can get some things done, that I've been yearning to do. Hopefully, I can get them done right the first time! ~L~ Great poem, helps to remind some of us that we need to keep our heads up. ;)
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There are those that find incredible strength when you would think that none should exist. I, myself, have found recently that things just keep going down hill. I tried very hard not to let it get to me, but lately, the little joy that I seem to find is mostly from reading things on line. Isn't that sad? Well, I suppose I found something that has once again sparked my interest, with the weather starting to change I'll find that I can get some things done, that I've been yearning to do. Hopefully, I can get them done right the first time! ~L~ Great poem, helps to remind some of us that we need to keep our heads up. ;)
Comment Written 16-Feb-2009
Comment from GregoryC
My old fashion way of shortening a word is to write it as a contraction - "fam'ly", for instance. No need to expalin. Otherwise an excellent sonnet. It works.
You describe how we live in a world where nobody is perfect. Everyone has defining faults. Here's to appreciating how to avoid 'self-pity,' hence 'self-inflicted wounds.' These subtle distinctions expose a critical concept in the world with the most problematic set of questions focusing on how to handle right and wrong.
The answer? "We have the strength to swim against the tide / And flee from other's ways; not ours to bide"
Nice solution. Well done.
Gregory
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My old fashion way of shortening a word is to write it as a contraction - "fam'ly", for instance. No need to expalin. Otherwise an excellent sonnet. It works.
You describe how we live in a world where nobody is perfect. Everyone has defining faults. Here's to appreciating how to avoid 'self-pity,' hence 'self-inflicted wounds.' These subtle distinctions expose a critical concept in the world with the most problematic set of questions focusing on how to handle right and wrong.
The answer? "We have the strength to swim against the tide / And flee from other's ways; not ours to bide"
Nice solution. Well done.
Gregory
Comment Written 16-Feb-2009
Comment from ulster3
Hi Sixteex.
This is really a quite exceptional sonnet. I especially like:
We have the strength to swim against the tide
And flee from other's ways; not ours to bide
I think you deserve to win this. Fondly, rebecca
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Hi Sixteex.
This is really a quite exceptional sonnet. I especially like:
We have the strength to swim against the tide
And flee from other's ways; not ours to bide
I think you deserve to win this. Fondly, rebecca
Comment Written 16-Feb-2009
Comment from skye
Families definately give both strength and weakness, good and bad, high and low.
Your last lines are memorable.
Very well crafted, with great artwork to accent your thoughts.
I liked this very much.
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Families definately give both strength and weakness, good and bad, high and low.
Your last lines are memorable.
Very well crafted, with great artwork to accent your thoughts.
I liked this very much.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2009
Comment from SteveI
Please do not confuse self-pity with the tiredness that comes from lifes losses and burdens and responsibilities. I like your poem and I like your heads-up method of living. But be not too quick to judge grief and disappointment form self pity.
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Please do not confuse self-pity with the tiredness that comes from lifes losses and burdens and responsibilities. I like your poem and I like your heads-up method of living. But be not too quick to judge grief and disappointment form self pity.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2009
Comment from justmade
I think this is excellent for this contest Sue.
It definitely captured the essence.
I like the thought and how you presented it, well done.
Much love,
Justmade.
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I think this is excellent for this contest Sue.
It definitely captured the essence.
I like the thought and how you presented it, well done.
Much love,
Justmade.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2009