Beneath the Tranquil Sheen
Be a swan.86 total reviews
Comment from vpdesignsxo
Your poem effectively captures the beauty, grace, and hidden struggles of this swan. The language, contemplative tone, and questions create an engaging piece. This poem takes us into the complexities of life and the power of persistence.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2023
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Your poem effectively captures the beauty, grace, and hidden struggles of this swan. The language, contemplative tone, and questions create an engaging piece. This poem takes us into the complexities of life and the power of persistence.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much, Victoria, for your review and feedback!
Xo
Jessica
Comment from Ben Colder
Beautiful. Nothing like the gracefulness of a swan. She glides like a gentle breeze on top of the water. You did well with this poem. It sings a special song.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2023
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Beautiful. Nothing like the gracefulness of a swan. She glides like a gentle breeze on top of the water. You did well with this poem. It sings a special song.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much for your kind-worded review and feedback!
Xo
Jessica
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Beneath the Tranquil Sheen, makes me wonder if we should change the old saying "Like water off a duck's back" to that of a swan. This bird is the symbol of the unfazed outer appearance perhaps covering a worn and weary soul. Nice verse.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2023
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This poem, Beneath the Tranquil Sheen, makes me wonder if we should change the old saying "Like water off a duck's back" to that of a swan. This bird is the symbol of the unfazed outer appearance perhaps covering a worn and weary soul. Nice verse.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much, Bill! I appreciate your review and feedback!
Xo
Jessica
Comment from nomi338
Excellent reminder. What at first glance may seem calm in demeanor, one has no idea of the turmoil that a person may be undergoing out of the sight of onlookers. Judge not, and make no mistakes. Until or unless you know for sure, never underestimate another man's struggles.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2023
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Excellent reminder. What at first glance may seem calm in demeanor, one has no idea of the turmoil that a person may be undergoing out of the sight of onlookers. Judge not, and make no mistakes. Until or unless you know for sure, never underestimate another man's struggles.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2023
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Here, here! Thank you so much for your valued review and feedback!
Xo
Jessica
Comment from karenina
Wow. This is lovely! One read-through was not enough! Subtle alliteration, word-painting of the highest degree, a profound message within... Your ABAB rhymes are spot on and your 8/6/8/6 syllable count works perfectly as I read this aloud. Bravo. I owe you a six! (Yes, I'm out already!)
Karenina
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2023
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Wow. This is lovely! One read-through was not enough! Subtle alliteration, word-painting of the highest degree, a profound message within... Your ABAB rhymes are spot on and your 8/6/8/6 syllable count works perfectly as I read this aloud. Bravo. I owe you a six! (Yes, I'm out already!)
Karenina
Comment Written 07-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much, your words are better than any six! Truly, I'm honored by your kind review and perceptive feedback, Karenina. You made my day!
Xo
Jess
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How nice of you to say that!
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a beautifully written poem. It has a great flow and rhyme. Very cleverly put together. Beautiful photo to compliment your words as well. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2023
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This is a beautifully written poem. It has a great flow and rhyme. Very cleverly put together. Beautiful photo to compliment your words as well. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much, Joanne!! I am so grateful for your kind review and stars.
Xoxo
Jessica
Comment from Paul McFarland
Very nicely done, Jessica. It amazes me how some animals mate for life. In that respect, they are superior to humans in my mind's eye. We have no swans in my area. We have geese.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2023
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Very nicely done, Jessica. It amazes me how some animals mate for life. In that respect, they are superior to humans in my mind's eye. We have no swans in my area. We have geese.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much, Paul! I truly appreciate that. I couldn't agree more.
Xo
Jessica
Comment from jake cosmos aller
nice mediation on life observing a lonely swan swimming in a lake looking for her late mate, thinking about love, life and missed opportunities as she swims the lake
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2023
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nice mediation on life observing a lonely swan swimming in a lake looking for her late mate, thinking about love, life and missed opportunities as she swims the lake
Comment Written 07-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much, Jake! I truly appreciate that.
Xo
Jessica
Comment from Nowae20
This is really beautiful. Love the word play. Truly if we all were as strong and stead fast in our convictions as the swan.you are talented Hope to see more of your work
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2023
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This is really beautiful. Love the word play. Truly if we all were as strong and stead fast in our convictions as the swan.you are talented Hope to see more of your work
Comment Written 07-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much! I truly appreciate that. Your kind words and review mean the world.:)
Xo
Jessica
Comment from MissMerri
I loved this poem. Not only is it beautifully written and displayed, but it carries a beautiful message. The abab rhyme pattern is meticulously carried out and the rhymes are original and always meaningful. It is a simply lovely example of what poetry should be. Well done Jessica! I know this will do well in the contest. MM
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2023
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I loved this poem. Not only is it beautifully written and displayed, but it carries a beautiful message. The abab rhyme pattern is meticulously carried out and the rhymes are original and always meaningful. It is a simply lovely example of what poetry should be. Well done Jessica! I know this will do well in the contest. MM
Comment Written 07-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2023
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Your kind words have left me feeling deeply honored. Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review my poem. Your opinion carries great weight!
Xo
Jessica.
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SO delighted to see this wonderful poem took first prize! Congratulations to you!
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Thank you, that truly means the world to me! I am beyond grateful for your supportive words! Xoxo