Puddles
A Nove Otto poem for the contest66 total reviews
Comment from Hitcher
I have read a couple of these now mate and I must say...I like yours!! I will have to give one a go at some point... I enjoy new forms. I'm too busy at present though, off to Vietnam for a vacation with my family in under two weeks :)) Awesome poem, exceptional use of the form, made me smile! Good luck!!
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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I have read a couple of these now mate and I must say...I like yours!! I will have to give one a go at some point... I enjoy new forms. I'm too busy at present though, off to Vietnam for a vacation with my family in under two weeks :)) Awesome poem, exceptional use of the form, made me smile! Good luck!!
Comment Written 07-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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I've decided to attack my inbox of reviews back-to-front today, for I never quite seem to get to the bottom of it! Apologies for not having responded to this for well over a week, which is not a reflection on the value i place on it! I appreciate your review of my poem, "Puddles" and your very kind comments and the six stars. Thank you! Best wishes for your trip to Vietnam. Bon voyage! Tony
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Perfect Nove Otto Poem contest entry. Perfectly done and reminds me of why puddles and feet go hand in hand.lol |NIcelyi done
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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Perfect Nove Otto Poem contest entry. Perfectly done and reminds me of why puddles and feet go hand in hand.lol |NIcelyi done
Comment Written 07-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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I've decided to attack my inbox of reviews back-to-front today, for I never quite seem to get to the bottom of it! Apologies for not having responded to this for well over a week, which is not a reflection on the value i place on it! I appreciate your review of my poem, "Puddles" and your very kind comments. Thank you! All the best, Tony
Comment from June Sargent
A wonderful observation on childlike Innocence, something we could all use more of to make life something to be enjoyed rather than endured. Fine example of a nove otto as well
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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A wonderful observation on childlike Innocence, something we could all use more of to make life something to be enjoyed rather than endured. Fine example of a nove otto as well
Comment Written 06-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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I've decided to attack my inbox of reviews back-to-front today, for I never quite seem to get to the bottom of it! Apologies for not having responded to this for well over a week, which is not a reflection on the value i place on it! I appreciate your review of my poem, "Puddles" and your very kind comments. Thank you! All the best, Tony
Comment from rama devi
Hello, my friend. Excellent form--rhyming and timing. Excellent phonetics (as usual from you). excellent exploration of the theme and imagery.
A few minor suggestions:
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reflections of the trees and sky,(no ,)
and how the clouds go flying by.
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For children(,) this is not pretence;
UK spelling? In US is is pretense.
Fun line:
They jump right in! Both feet go splat!
Perfect closing line:
When life's a game, it makes more sense.
Great presentation!
Good luck in the contest.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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Hello, my friend. Excellent form--rhyming and timing. Excellent phonetics (as usual from you). excellent exploration of the theme and imagery.
A few minor suggestions:
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reflections of the trees and sky,(no ,)
and how the clouds go flying by.
*
For children(,) this is not pretence;
UK spelling? In US is is pretense.
Fun line:
They jump right in! Both feet go splat!
Perfect closing line:
When life's a game, it makes more sense.
Great presentation!
Good luck in the contest.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 06-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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I've decided to attack my inbox of reviews back-to-front today, for I never quite seem to get to the bottom of it! Apologies for not having responded to this for well over a week, which is not a reflection on the value i place on it! I appreciate your review of my poem, "Puddles" and your constructive comments. I have now incorporated your suggestions! Thank you! All the best, Tony
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Thanks for your kind reply. Happ to help. Totally understand about reply delays. FS is a vortex!
Best, rd
Comment from lyenochka
Love the way you present childlike joy and innocence and boldness! As adults we may just observe the reflections on the puddles and changes in the environment but children learn by experiencing life with abandon. Such a perfect example to write about to show your message in this well structured nove otto.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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Love the way you present childlike joy and innocence and boldness! As adults we may just observe the reflections on the puddles and changes in the environment but children learn by experiencing life with abandon. Such a perfect example to write about to show your message in this well structured nove otto.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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I've decided to attack my inbox of reviews back-to-front today, for I never quite seem to get to the bottom of it! Apologies for not having responded to this for well over a week, which is not a reflection on the value i place on it! I appreciate your review of my poem, "Puddles" and your very kind comments. Thank you! All the best, Tony
Comment from jenintorre
I am not familiar with this type of poem format but I thought you did an excellent job. Very good writing and well chosen pic. Good luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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I am not familiar with this type of poem format but I thought you did an excellent job. Very good writing and well chosen pic. Good luck in the competition.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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I've decided to attack my inbox of reviews back-to-front today, for I never quite seem to get to the bottom of it! Apologies for not having responded to this for well over a week, which is not a reflection on the value i place on it! I appreciate your review of my poem, "Puddles".. Thank you! All the best, Tony
Comment from Kerry Foley
A very pretty Nove Otto, on the innocence of children playing in puddles, without a care in the world. I wish I was a kid still jumping in puddles, lol ~Kerry
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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A very pretty Nove Otto, on the innocence of children playing in puddles, without a care in the world. I wish I was a kid still jumping in puddles, lol ~Kerry
Comment Written 06-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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I've decided to attack my inbox of reviews back-to-front today, for I never quite seem to get to the bottom of it! Apologies for not having responded to this for well over a week, which is not a reflection on the value i place on it! I appreciate your review of my poem, "Puddles". Thank you! All the best, Tony
Comment from Halfree
Started up the stairs and thought I should check the computer before calling it a day. Noticed you posting, checked it out and found your delightful poem. Thought the last two lines were a great closing. The last line, very thought provoking. Thanks,,,a good way to end my day.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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Started up the stairs and thought I should check the computer before calling it a day. Noticed you posting, checked it out and found your delightful poem. Thought the last two lines were a great closing. The last line, very thought provoking. Thanks,,,a good way to end my day.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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I've decided to attack my inbox of reviews back-to-front today, for I never quite seem to get to the bottom of it! Apologies for not having responded to this for well over a week, which is not a reflection on the value i place on it! I appreciate your review of my poem, "Puddles" and your very kind comments. Thank you! All the best, Tony
Comment from JW
Thanks for sharing this poem. It's message is very true. I also love the picture you used. It's cute.
Sigh.
If we as adults could look at things through child's eyes, how much more wonderful life would be. JW
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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Thanks for sharing this poem. It's message is very true. I also love the picture you used. It's cute.
Sigh.
If we as adults could look at things through child's eyes, how much more wonderful life would be. JW
Comment Written 06-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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I've decided to attack my inbox of reviews back-to-front today, for I never quite seem to get to the bottom of it! Apologies for not having responded to this for well over a week, which is not a reflection on the value i place on it! I appreciate your review of my poem, "Puddles". Thank you! All the best, Tony
Comment from country ranch writer
Mud puddles I think we're made especially for kids they can spend hours entertaining themselves and never get into too much trouble. Muddy maybe but totally happy.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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Mud puddles I think we're made especially for kids they can spend hours entertaining themselves and never get into too much trouble. Muddy maybe but totally happy.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2017
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2017
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I've decided to attack my inbox of reviews back-to-front today, for I never quite seem to get to the bottom of it! Apologies for not having responded to this for well over a week, which is not a reflection on the value i place on it! I appreciate your review of my poem, "Puddles". Thank you! All the best, Tony
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Been out net all week so don't feel bad we had a hurricane shake it up a bit down here where I am at so we were quite soggy but damn lucky.
