The Window
Can Darkness Expunge the Light?90 total reviews
Comment from Hitcher
This is a quality little cinquian poem for the contest friend, thought provoking indeed but is is the Latched the door 'that is the reveal' he/she witnessed a crime from their window and did nothing(their fall), just locked themselves in their home for safety. I LIKE !!! Good luck
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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This is a quality little cinquian poem for the contest friend, thought provoking indeed but is is the Latched the door 'that is the reveal' he/she witnessed a crime from their window and did nothing(their fall), just locked themselves in their home for safety. I LIKE !!! Good luck
Comment Written 10-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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Hitcher, bless you for zeroing in on the meaning of the poem. Thank you for reading to that depth, for your kind words and generous rating.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Someone watching from a window[2nd floor or higher] saw a crime & did nothing to intervene [call 911?]. That person 'fell' in their eyes because they realized they should have done something to help [because they may need help the next time & no one comes to help them].
Good job on a few lines to make a great statement. thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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Someone watching from a window[2nd floor or higher] saw a crime & did nothing to intervene [call 911?]. That person 'fell' in their eyes because they realized they should have done something to help [because they may need help the next time & no one comes to help them].
Good job on a few lines to make a great statement. thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 10-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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Oh, Jan, thanks for taking the time to read this to such depth and apply your moral incisiveness as well. Bless you, Jan.
Comment from royowen
You're a master of the masterly paradox Jay, I like the way you narrowed down the ambiguous to the definite article. An excellent short form entry in this contest, you certainly understand the poetic, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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You're a master of the masterly paradox Jay, I like the way you narrowed down the ambiguous to the definite article. An excellent short form entry in this contest, you certainly understand the poetic, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 10-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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We gotta stop meeting like this, Roy. My ego can't take any more puffing up. Well, we'll say yours is the last. Thank you so very much reading this, for been so kind and generous with your words and your rating. Blessings, friend.
Jay
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Your good my friend, I know your heart can handle it, heheh, well done
Comment from write hand blue
Hi Jay. My interpretation of this is of a man who fell from a window. The shock was too much for him and he went into denial. It took him some time to come back to his senses. Drawing the curtains and latching the door is imaginary (his defence mechanism). I would guess that he awoke lying outside and under the window.
Thought provoking, a good entry for the Cinquain Poetry contest. Best of luck...
~Mel~
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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Hi Jay. My interpretation of this is of a man who fell from a window. The shock was too much for him and he went into denial. It took him some time to come back to his senses. Drawing the curtains and latching the door is imaginary (his defence mechanism). I would guess that he awoke lying outside and under the window.
Thought provoking, a good entry for the Cinquain Poetry contest. Best of luck...
~Mel~
Comment Written 10-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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I don't know that my intended meaning is any better than yours. Both make some kind of crazy sense. I pictured my persona standing before an open window. Below, on the street, the victim is injured (killed? who knows?). But he falls. What should my persona do? He closes the blinds and latches the door. What is the effect of that?
Mel, you are always right there with your intelligence cranked up and not ashamed to offer interpretation. Thank you so much for being there for me.
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Jay, it was my pleasure (that is what friends are for)... ~Mel~
Comment from Nikki-Nicole
After reading 'The Window', I find that it meets the requirements of the contest and makes a good entry.
Great artwork. The image shown supports the poem. The background selected goes well with the art and color of font chosen.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Thanks for sharing your Cinquain.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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After reading 'The Window', I find that it meets the requirements of the contest and makes a good entry.
Great artwork. The image shown supports the poem. The background selected goes well with the art and color of font chosen.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Thanks for sharing your Cinquain.
Good luck with your future writing.
-Nicole-
Comment Written 10-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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Thank you, Nicole. I'm glad you enjoyed the architecture of the poem. I appreciate your well-wishes.
Comment from Rasmine
I like your poem; I don't understand it, but I still like it. He fell out the window and you grieved. Then you realize it was you who fell -- you were a ghost?
Good luck in the contest, Jay.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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I like your poem; I don't understand it, but I still like it. He fell out the window and you grieved. Then you realize it was you who fell -- you were a ghost?
Good luck in the contest, Jay.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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Here is my intent: "I" am standing at the window. I see someone below on the street "fall" as a victim of a crime. That's the premise of what happened (and because of the requirements of the form, could only be implied), but the importance happened with the closing of the blinds and latching of the door.
Thanks for wishing me well, Rasmine.
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YW, :)
Comment from catch22
Is it a mirrored window? You watched your own fall? Help, I'm dying to know the riddle answer. Good use of the form to give a dramatic scene. Best to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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Is it a mirrored window? You watched your own fall? Help, I'm dying to know the riddle answer. Good use of the form to give a dramatic scene. Best to you in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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Here is what I envisioned: Standing before an open window and seeing a victim being shot and falling, down below on the street. I would leave the rest to you. Thank you so much to reading it to a point of frustration, for trying to crack it. If you read any of the other reviews, you'd know interpretations flew all over the place. Thanks for your well wishes
Comment from Aiona
:( Awwwwwwwwww..... very descriptive, even though it's so short. I can picture, what? Not sure, but it tells a story of how we view others and judge them, and yet ourselves are no better than they are. Or are we? When I was in Berkeley, I used to give change to someone called the Pennyman. He followed me home once, which freaked me out! I had to duck into an alley and pretend to go a different way to go home. This guy tracked me down when I moved to Illinois. Creepy guy. So I don't give out spare change anymore.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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:( Awwwwwwwwww..... very descriptive, even though it's so short. I can picture, what? Not sure, but it tells a story of how we view others and judge them, and yet ourselves are no better than they are. Or are we? When I was in Berkeley, I used to give change to someone called the Pennyman. He followed me home once, which freaked me out! I had to duck into an alley and pretend to go a different way to go home. This guy tracked me down when I moved to Illinois. Creepy guy. So I don't give out spare change anymore.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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Thank you so much, Aiona, for sharing your thoughts on this poem and telling me a fascinating story about the Pennyman. That would be creepy!
Comment from nancy_e_davis
To close yourself off from someone who needs a helping hand is not the right thing to do. "Never look down on someone unless you are helping them up." This poem speaks volumes in just a few words. Well done my friend. Nancy
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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To close yourself off from someone who needs a helping hand is not the right thing to do. "Never look down on someone unless you are helping them up." This poem speaks volumes in just a few words. Well done my friend. Nancy
Comment Written 10-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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Thank you, Nancy. Your interpretation took the poem to a fascinating moral inroad. I had envisioned standing before an open window, witnessing a person on the street below being shot and falling. The poetic form precluded my explaining more, so I left it open-ended. I can't tell you how appreciative I am to receive a six from you. It's humbling.
Comment from kathleenspalding
I rarely give six stars to short works (because they're too easy), but this awesome cinquain poem packs so much meaning and emotion and truth into so few words that it deserves it. Outstanding!
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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I rarely give six stars to short works (because they're too easy), but this awesome cinquain poem packs so much meaning and emotion and truth into so few words that it deserves it. Outstanding!
Comment Written 10-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2017
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Bless you, Kathleen, not just for the six stars, but the inspiring words.
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You're welcome
