Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

This is a really great story. I'm glad that Doug, after his initial reaction, stepped up and is helping out. He has put aside his personal feelings for his mother and is doing the right thing.

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017

Hi Thomas; thank you so much for your thoughtful review. My hubby has helped me with the story line, and insisted that Doug should step up. We outlined the rest of the story together and I think it has a good plot. I hope you will continue to come along for the wild ride,

~patty~

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written chapter. I was wondering about the check increasing to 100, anyway it is never a pleasant task to do arrangements for a funeral, when their is bad feelings, it makes it even more awkward.

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017

Hi Sandra; thank you so much for stopping by to read and review. I'm glad you found this next part interesting. I hope you will continue to come along on this ride,

~patty~

Comment from Lindagail Hall

Excellent

I loved reading this, your write brings to mind how families carry grudges the worst time is always at a funeral. I took note that you even described the dail tone, not many would have thought about that one point. I think it is a strong write that holds the readers attention. Good job.

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017

Thank you so much for the thoughtful and concise review! I'm glad you're enjoying the series, and I hope you will continue along for the ride as Kathy and Doug attend the memorial service - there are plenty more surprises in store!
~patty~

reply by Lindagail Hall on 06-Jun-2017

Can't wait. Sure you will finish your task by Friday.

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

the length of this one is just fine. I have read others that were longer. It kept my attention and him dealing with the family was expected and I agree. Bring on the security. Very well done

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017

Hi Barb; thank you so much for the encouraging review of this piece. I wanted to convey the information in a concise manner, but didn't want to harp on the details too much.

I'm glad you liked the touch about the security - I thought it would definitely be needed.
~patty~

Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Exceptional

This is really sad when you think about it, Patty - to be estranged from his family - and you can understand the strangeness of his mother asking you to do all the arranging, which she must have known would cause trouble in itself.... but what can a person do, but carry the arrangements out --- and there's sure to be trouble if a lot of drink is consumed at the time of the funeral - I'm interested to see what happens.

Margaret

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017

Hi Margaret; thank you so much for reading and reviewing. Though this is a fictional piece, I can almost see it happening in my husband's family. (I don't think my mother-in-law would ever send me such a big check though!)

Thank you for your thorough and concise review. I'm glad you are enjoying the story line, and I hope the next parts will continue to hold your interest,
~patty~
PS: thank you for all the SHINY stars! I so appreciate the EXCEPTIONAL rating.

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Patty,

Not too long at all. The lines/story flowed well. Everything fit. I enjoyed reading it to find out more info about the crazy family. The dialogue was perfect, too.

Suggestions:

Should he [she] call him and ask him

She and him were the best of [She and he or They]

Looking forward to the next chapter. Jan



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 Comment Written 06-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017

Hi Jan; thank you so much for your thoughtful review. I appreciate you pointing out the nits; I went back and made the changes.

I hope the next parts will continue to hold your interest.

~patty~