Out On a Limb For Love
No Time For Reasoning51 total reviews
Comment from kathleenspalding
Yikes! Quite an intense story packed into one hundred words. I don't see anything that needs to be corrected. Thank you for writing and sharing. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Yikes! Quite an intense story packed into one hundred words. I don't see anything that needs to be corrected. Thank you for writing and sharing. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 14-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Many thanks, Kathleen. 51 words. I wish I had a hundred words. I'm so happy you enjoyed reading this.
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You're welcome. Sorry, I assumed one hundred. Fifty one is even more impressive!
Comment from Rasmine
Good fiction that is so short. :P Don't you just love writing those? I tried, it was fun, but I gave up.
I wish you all the luck in the contest!
Happy Easter.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Good fiction that is so short. :P Don't you just love writing those? I tried, it was fun, but I gave up.
I wish you all the luck in the contest!
Happy Easter.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Thank you, Rasmine. You are kind.
Comment from Tessa Kay
Looks like daddy won't come around, but use a round instead.
Lots of story in just a few words. Flash fiction looks so easy, because it is short, but I bet it is anything but. Great job, Jay.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Looks like daddy won't come around, but use a round instead.
Lots of story in just a few words. Flash fiction looks so easy, because it is short, but I bet it is anything but. Great job, Jay.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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I could have written a 5000 story with more ease, Tessa. Thanks for your kindness.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
I guess that's one way of looking at it. He must be a Presbyterian. A very good contest entry. Contests are hard to win. I'm in two now that are being voted on. In one I'm in first place the other I'm in last.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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I guess that's one way of looking at it. He must be a Presbyterian. A very good contest entry. Contests are hard to win. I'm in two now that are being voted on. In one I'm in first place the other I'm in last.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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You're talking about the member vote. That would be the only kind where you can see where you are in the process. Anyway, good luck with them. Thanks for your kindness, Thomas.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I don't think this is going to have a happy ending. I enjoyed reading your contest entry. You said so much in such a few short sentences. I wish you the best of luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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I don't think this is going to have a happy ending. I enjoyed reading your contest entry. You said so much in such a few short sentences. I wish you the best of luck with the contest.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Barbara, thank you for your kind words, and the well wishes for the contest.
Comment from Sasha
You have done a superb job with this entry. Strong story in 51 well chosen words. This could be the basis for a great script too. Terrific entry for this contest and I sincerely wish you all the best.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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You have done a superb job with this entry. Strong story in 51 well chosen words. This could be the basis for a great script too. Terrific entry for this contest and I sincerely wish you all the best.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Thank you, Sasha. I'm thrilled you enjoyed reading it.
Comment from Mustang Patty
What a great piece of dribble fiction! With just a few words, you've set the scene and filled the reader's mind with vivid images. I wonder if he got away, and if they were married OR... Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest,
~patty~
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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What a great piece of dribble fiction! With just a few words, you've set the scene and filled the reader's mind with vivid images. I wonder if he got away, and if they were married OR... Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest,
~patty~
Comment Written 14-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Thank you, Patty. I'm so happy you enjoyed reading this. You covered most all the possibilities.
Comment from Sis Cat
Wow, Jay, what a dynamic piece of flash fiction told in a few words. I see an interracial couple trying to elope. Suzie is pregnant with the black teen's baby. He muses: They'll come around. We'd laughed about it. Once it's born, they'll accept me.
Suzie has her bags packed and is straddling a limb by the window. This is when all hell breaks loose:
She's waving me away. No! I lean. Her daddy's shotgun rams my chest.
"Law pertects the homeowner 'gainst trespassin', niggah. And God--He fergives the Christian."
Oh, well, this is great writing. Thank you for sharing. I wish you success in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Wow, Jay, what a dynamic piece of flash fiction told in a few words. I see an interracial couple trying to elope. Suzie is pregnant with the black teen's baby. He muses: They'll come around. We'd laughed about it. Once it's born, they'll accept me.
Suzie has her bags packed and is straddling a limb by the window. This is when all hell breaks loose:
She's waving me away. No! I lean. Her daddy's shotgun rams my chest.
"Law pertects the homeowner 'gainst trespassin', niggah. And God--He fergives the Christian."
Oh, well, this is great writing. Thank you for sharing. I wish you success in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Thank you, Andre. It's not easy to write anything in 50 words. I'm thrilled you enjoyed it.
Comment from F. Wehr3
Wow! Jay, that's heavy. I had an entry for the dribble competition, but I think I'll just save my money, lol. Very well done, my friend. Best of luck in the contest.
Take care,
Russell
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Wow! Jay, that's heavy. I had an entry for the dribble competition, but I think I'll just save my money, lol. Very well done, my friend. Best of luck in the contest.
Take care,
Russell
Comment Written 14-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Ohhhhh, Russell. Enter yours. You never know what the judges will enjoy.
Comment from emptypage
Oh, harsh.
Really well written. I like it. There goes my entry! LOL.
I wish I could say such things are firmly ensconced in the past. Alas, it is not so.
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reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Oh, harsh.
Really well written. I like it. There goes my entry! LOL.
I wish I could say such things are firmly ensconced in the past. Alas, it is not so.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
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Comment Written 14-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2017
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Thank you, emptypage. I'm thrilled to see you enjoyed it.
Jay