THE TRINING Book Three
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "The All-Nighter"JOURNEY INTO REDEMPTION
43 total reviews
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Jay,
A superb chapter here.
My heart galloped into my palm and fingers - so simple, yet so effective.
Excellent description at Axtilla's introduction.
The end scenes are so well and tenderly written.
Excellent stuff
G
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2016
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Hi Jay,
A superb chapter here.
My heart galloped into my palm and fingers - so simple, yet so effective.
Excellent description at Axtilla's introduction.
The end scenes are so well and tenderly written.
Excellent stuff
G
Comment Written 10-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2016
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We'll see how tenderly when the springs start dancin'. LOL, thanks, G, for the six stars. I didn't want to end it right there, but if I went any further into "possible" love making I might not know when to stop it. Again, thanks.
Comment from c_lucas
This is playing out as a game between to lovers trying to increase the need for each other. Your post is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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This is playing out as a game between to lovers trying to increase the need for each other. Your post is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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WOWWWWWW! I got a six from Charlie! Thank you, my friend. This is an honor!
Comment from JTStone
That was timing Jay, I was outta sixes, but it's after midnight back east, so I got one for ya.
You left off at the high point of curiosity. I'm wondering if Pondria is overconfident.
I love the way the story is always busy. The nap he so desperately wanted eluded him for the day. The anxiety he felt all day appears to be matched by Axtilla, but I can't help but feel you have a surprise still. I know that the ceiling over the bed has those ornately carved animal figures that Pondria used to see when the room was still dark.
Something is going to happen. Not what you have us believing at the moment.
Jimmy
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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That was timing Jay, I was outta sixes, but it's after midnight back east, so I got one for ya.
You left off at the high point of curiosity. I'm wondering if Pondria is overconfident.
I love the way the story is always busy. The nap he so desperately wanted eluded him for the day. The anxiety he felt all day appears to be matched by Axtilla, but I can't help but feel you have a surprise still. I know that the ceiling over the bed has those ornately carved animal figures that Pondria used to see when the room was still dark.
Something is going to happen. Not what you have us believing at the moment.
Jimmy
Comment Written 10-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2016
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Hey, Jimmy. Or maybe I just don't know how to write a love scene. I keep stalling. I wish I could have something as tender as Pongo's sheltering his dead wife from the gun shots. That's writing, friend. Thanks for the six stars.