saffron sunset rays
poem 5/7/550 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well written 5-7-5 poem on a beautiful sunset. Excellent colors that only the Master can provide so perfectly. Everything seem to be better in Spring.
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A very well written 5-7-5 poem on a beautiful sunset. Excellent colors that only the Master can provide so perfectly. Everything seem to be better in Spring.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016
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Thanks for reading and the critique -yes Spring changes everything ! Zanya
Comment from DonandVicki
Saffron sky's remind me of India. A very beautiful sunset and a poem that frames that beauty. You have written a very moving poem.
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Saffron sky's remind me of India. A very beautiful sunset and a poem that frames that beauty. You have written a very moving poem.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2016
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Thank you indeed for the critique Zanya
Comment from Sambangi
Zanya,
Perfect match between photo and words. Beautiful alliterationscenery in line 1 and 3. Flow is quite good. Wish you all the best
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016
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Zanya,
Perfect match between photo and words. Beautiful alliterationscenery in line 1 and 3. Flow is quite good. Wish you all the best
Comment Written 17-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016
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Thanks for reading and the critique Zanya
Comment from krys123
Cheers Zanya;
- your 5/7/5 syllabic format is very prophetic in its statement about life and the beauty of a sunset. I love the term saffron and it is very picturesque and full of imagery is your writing that is exquisitely expressive and vividly and demonstratively descriptive throughout the piece.
-pictures very appropriate and relative to the concept and theme of your writing
- good luck in the contest and may the good Lord be with you always my friend.
Alex
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016
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Cheers Zanya;
- your 5/7/5 syllabic format is very prophetic in its statement about life and the beauty of a sunset. I love the term saffron and it is very picturesque and full of imagery is your writing that is exquisitely expressive and vividly and demonstratively descriptive throughout the piece.
-pictures very appropriate and relative to the concept and theme of your writing
- good luck in the contest and may the good Lord be with you always my friend.
Alex
Comment Written 17-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016
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Thank you for reading and the critique Zanya
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Deb you are very welcome my friend.
Alex
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Zanya; sorry I called you Deb I didn't mean your real name. I was confused at the time.
Alex
Comment from BruceMiller
I am quite a fan of these 5-7-5 poetic offerings. I am always fascinated by how much can be said with so few words. Very nicely done.
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I am quite a fan of these 5-7-5 poetic offerings. I am always fascinated by how much can be said with so few words. Very nicely done.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2016
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Thanks for reading and the critique Zanya
Comment from kathleenspalding
Very nice 5 - 7 - 5 paints a vivid mental picture using very few words. Flows well. Excellent choice of artwork. Don't know if you intended to capitalize spring, as it was not necessary (except as the beginning of a sentence. If so, would you want to capitalize saffron?), but it's OK as is since it's a poem.... (I never know with poems!) Good luck in the contest!
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Very nice 5 - 7 - 5 paints a vivid mental picture using very few words. Flows well. Excellent choice of artwork. Don't know if you intended to capitalize spring, as it was not necessary (except as the beginning of a sentence. If so, would you want to capitalize saffron?), but it's OK as is since it's a poem.... (I never know with poems!) Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 17-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016
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Thanks for reading and for the critique yes sometimes it is indeed difficult to tell re capitals !! Zanya
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You're welcome
Comment from royowen
An excellent entry in this 5/7/5 poetry contest, some great descriptive alliteration plus the artwork make this a great entry, love the wording, it's a gem, well done, good luck. Blessings, Roy
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An excellent entry in this 5/7/5 poetry contest, some great descriptive alliteration plus the artwork make this a great entry, love the wording, it's a gem, well done, good luck. Blessings, Roy
Comment Written 17-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016
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Delighted to see this little poem described as a 'gem' makes my heart sing !!! Thank you for reading and the critique Zanya
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Most welcome
Comment from robyn corum
Zanya,
This is a 'colorful' and color-filled write! I enjoyed it very much and think it should do well in the contest. I'm sending you luck -- there, catch it! *smile*
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Zanya,
This is a 'colorful' and color-filled write! I enjoyed it very much and think it should do well in the contest. I'm sending you luck -- there, catch it! *smile*
Comment Written 17-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016
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Thanks for reading and for the 'luck' managed to rub shoulders with the winners !!! Zanya
Comment from RodG
Lovely pairing of photo and poem
Your poem, especially your references to color, shadows and artist's palette, creates a vivid picture and suggests a serene mood.
"Emblazon" is a strong verb well-chosen.
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Lovely pairing of photo and poem
Your poem, especially your references to color, shadows and artist's palette, creates a vivid picture and suggests a serene mood.
"Emblazon" is a strong verb well-chosen.
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Comment Written 17-Mar-2016
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Thanks for reading and the interesting critique Zanya
Comment from foxangie123
This is such a pretty piece as picture and nature that touches ones soul. It is so very lovely from top to bottom. An excellent entry.
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This is such a pretty piece as picture and nature that touches ones soul. It is so very lovely from top to bottom. An excellent entry.
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Comment Written 17-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2016
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Thanks for a great and encouraging review Zanya
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You deserved it..