Comment from Sanku

Excellent

This is incredibly sweet, acknowledging the faith one has in his spouse.the metaphorical picture is brilliant too. Is marriage really a tightrope walk?.The Bridegroom waits- so the persona is a female? anyway it is the same for both .I liked the third stanza the best, the rope being so special canot come from any erthy things.I am sorry I am out of sixes.******.

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015

Sanku, thanks for the lovely review and the virtual six stars. This is one of those poems where it seems different readers pick different parts as their favourite lines. I too liked the slender thread that grew to become an unbreakable rope.

Steve

reply by Sanku on 06-Jun-2015

It struck me only later ,the title 'bridegroom waits' -nuns are supposed to be the brides of jesus aren't they? then ,it could be their first step.(my imagination running too far and wide?)

reply by Sanku on 06-Jun-2015

It struck me only later ,the title 'bridegroom waits' -nuns are supposed to be the brides of jesus aren't they? then ,it could be their first step.(my imagination running too far and wide?)

Comment from TOMORAL

Excellent

A lovely and fitting entry into the faith contest. I, being a Christian, related it to be faith in God, but your alternate title is fitting also. Very well written and expressed. Thanks for sharing. Best of luck!

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015

Thanks for the kind words.

Steve

Comment from judester

Excellent

Ah faith. I think this is a wonderfully romantic poem.The power of love that can push us to new heights. Faith, like the wind, cannot be seen, but we feel it's power. I enjoyed this poem and liked the image of faith being a slender thread though entwined with love patience trust and hope, unbreakable and strong, cheers judester

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015

Thanks, judy!

Steve

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is an excellent write, kiwisteveh, you did an excellent job writing this sonnet about having the faith to step forward when needed and take a risk without having a safety net. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015

Thanks for the kind words.

Steve

Comment from Ekim777

Excellent

Faith, belief, promise, hope are all pie in the sky to me so why the hesitant first step? Is not God in his heaven and all is right with the world. By the end of the second verse we have not advanced much further along the rainbow of belief. It all sounds very much like wishful thinking. The final couplet rescues the poem. -Ekim,777

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015

Do you not hesitate before a step when there is risk involved? Does it not take some element of faith to even function in this modern world?

I am very non-religious myself, but I wanted to leave this open enough that those who do believe could find their own meaning in it. However, you won't find any capitalised pronouns in the poem!

Steve

Comment from Ben Colder

Excellent

I think the photo really enhances your strong wording. A step of faith is all it wakes. Muster seed faith, if you will. God does honor all faith. Best to you in the contest.

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015

Thanks, Ben.

Steve

Comment from flamingstar

Exceptional

Gosh, that has to be one of the best sonnets I've ever read. You absolutely nailed the definition of faith!! Another $100 coming your way...

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015

Thanks for the positive review and confident prediction - it would be about time - I have been on the podium six or seven times this year but no $100 yet!

Steve

reply by flamingstar on 06-Jun-2015

I'd be very surprised if you didn't take it this time - unless, of course, you come in second behind me...

reply by flamingstar on 07-Jun-2015

Okay...according to my oracle cards, I take second place which leaves you with first!

Comment from JourneyHolm

Excellent

I thought this was an excellent poem about faith and God. The lines, "A thousand craftsmen toiling through the night / could never manufacture such a rope" were brilliant in my opinion. Great analogy. It worked very well. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015

Thanks for the thoughtful review.

Steve

Comment from CD Richards

Excellent

So nice to see someone thinking outside of the square on the topic of "faith", and the metaphor of the tightrope walker is a brilliant choice. I wish I had a six left to give. Rhyme and flow - beautiful; use of imagery - sensational; fantastic work.

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015

Thanks so much for the enthusiastic review and the virtual six stars.

Steve

Comment from w.j.debi

Exceptional

You have excellent imagery and sensory detail. Good assonance in "flocking, mocking". I can visualize and hear those "screeching gulls of doubt". Excellent turn in line nine. Another strong visual in "the slender thread of faith shines bright" and all the things entwined in it. Excellent ending couplet .

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015

Thanks for the thoughtful review. I have another poem somewhere about the 'Doubtgulls' - must have that particular image ingrained...

Steve