The Promise
A show of devotion43 total reviews
Comment from misscookie
Oh how I love this cute story. It's nice how love can blooms sweet at the age even though it's puppy love.
But to them it's real specially since they have a ring.
Thank you for this delightful story.
Cookie.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2015
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Oh how I love this cute story. It's nice how love can blooms sweet at the age even though it's puppy love.
But to them it's real specially since they have a ring.
Thank you for this delightful story.
Cookie.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2015
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Thank you very much, miss cookie. Always appreciayed.
John
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You're very welcome.
Until next time, good night.
Cookie
Comment from kiwijenny
This is adorable...
My daughter 'married' a little boy called Cosy when she was 5
This is so sweet and trusting. I loved it..I wish I had a six to give
God bless I especially loved the kiss and the wiping it off quickly
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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2015
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This is adorable...
My daughter 'married' a little boy called Cosy when she was 5
This is so sweet and trusting. I loved it..I wish I had a six to give
God bless I especially loved the kiss and the wiping it off quickly
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Comment Written 22-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2015
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Kiwi, thank you so very much. John
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
This is terrific. Your dialogue is natural and the characters "feel" real. My only thought is at the start you have Tommy as the clear viewpoint character. You have internal thought. But that goes away as the story progresses. I would suggest you keep that viewpoint character tighter throughout the story. Terrific job. This was very enjoyable.
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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2015
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This is terrific. Your dialogue is natural and the characters "feel" real. My only thought is at the start you have Tommy as the clear viewpoint character. You have internal thought. But that goes away as the story progresses. I would suggest you keep that viewpoint character tighter throughout the story. Terrific job. This was very enjoyable.
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Comment Written 22-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2015
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ML,
Great review.
Thank you very much.
John
