Aluminum Splinters
Six sentence story44 total reviews
Comment from Fridayauthor
This is a nice,short story with a theme I remember very well.
A couple picky points...
The improbable hit
The most improbable hit
who literally play the league minimum,
who literally play the league minimum age,
Nice posting!
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2015
This is a nice,short story with a theme I remember very well.
A couple picky points...
The improbable hit
The most improbable hit
who literally play the league minimum,
who literally play the league minimum age,
Nice posting!
Comment Written 05-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2015
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Thank you Friday. Actually it's innings factor I referred to with the minimum comment. I did make a correction to that and added 'most improbable'.
Thank you for those. I hope you enjoyed the short little story. John
Comment from chasennov
Six sentence story "Aluminum Splinters" So be it then. Its about time its hit the news. Your delivery was quite fine and I enjoyed the descriptive action . Well done.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2015
Six sentence story "Aluminum Splinters" So be it then. Its about time its hit the news. Your delivery was quite fine and I enjoyed the descriptive action . Well done.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2015
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Thank you chase. I appreciate your time and review. John
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You are most welcome, John.
Comment from Linda England Bonam
Loved your short, but sweet, reminder that baseball season has arrived! It has been a long winter and this is welcome news! (Although looking out my window I still see eight inches of snow....at least I know Spring is near!!!)
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reply by the author on 05-Mar-2015
Loved your short, but sweet, reminder that baseball season has arrived! It has been a long winter and this is welcome news! (Although looking out my window I still see eight inches of snow....at least I know Spring is near!!!)
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Comment Written 05-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2015
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Same here, we are in the middle of a storm, 6-9 expected. I just had to do a little baseball...
Thanks for reading and sharing. John
Comment from Sloegin
Congratulations on giving some credence to the bench kids. Most parents don't know nor understand everyone can't be on the first team.
Your story put forth a good message, one that all parents of Little Leaguers should read.
I enjoyed your choice of words and you kept it easy to read and understand.
Keep writing.
Sloegin
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reply by the author on 05-Mar-2015
Congratulations on giving some credence to the bench kids. Most parents don't know nor understand everyone can't be on the first team.
Your story put forth a good message, one that all parents of Little Leaguers should read.
I enjoyed your choice of words and you kept it easy to read and understand.
Keep writing.
Sloegin
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Comment Written 05-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2015
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Thanks s heap sloegin, I do appreciate your coming by to read and share. John