Run Your Own Race
Winning isn't always the most important thing...107 total reviews
Comment from skye
Rhymed poems seem to flow so smoothly, and yours flows right to the excellent finish. Love the positive message, the great art, and the terrific rhymes.
Excellent.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
Rhymed poems seem to flow so smoothly, and yours flows right to the excellent finish. Love the positive message, the great art, and the terrific rhymes.
Excellent.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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Thanks so much, skye. I truly appreciate your opinions, as well as the kind review and most generous rating.
Comment from JavaJunkie
This was a enjoyable read.
Love the flow and positive message. The cadence/rhythm works nicely for a pleasing read.
Very Nicely done:)
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
This was a enjoyable read.
Love the flow and positive message. The cadence/rhythm works nicely for a pleasing read.
Very Nicely done:)
Comment Written 19-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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Thanks so much, JavaJunkie, I am very happy you enjoyed it. I appreciate your review, and the exceptional rating as well.
Comment from OLA THOMAS
I like you thoughtful theme. The finishing a race in good time is always good, sometimes win or lose. The race of life is so funny and tedious that running it carefully well, without stumble is more desirous than craving for a win 'at all cost'
ola thomas
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
I like you thoughtful theme. The finishing a race in good time is always good, sometimes win or lose. The race of life is so funny and tedious that running it carefully well, without stumble is more desirous than craving for a win 'at all cost'
ola thomas
Comment Written 19-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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You're exactly right, OLA, and thank you for your outstanding review, my friend!
Comment from forestport12
I like that phrase, "Search for the light that's hidden there." One of my favorites but as a whole I treasure this as I'm at a crossroads trying to build more time for future writing. I've been swamped with so much work day and night, and this is the perfect timing for this poem. This was no accident and neither are you. Sorry I missed the Crypt story deadline. I started to write it and couldn't get er done. Stan
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
I like that phrase, "Search for the light that's hidden there." One of my favorites but as a whole I treasure this as I'm at a crossroads trying to build more time for future writing. I've been swamped with so much work day and night, and this is the perfect timing for this poem. This was no accident and neither are you. Sorry I missed the Crypt story deadline. I started to write it and couldn't get er done. Stan
Comment Written 19-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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Thanks so much for the wonderful review, Stan. I really appreciate it! And maybe you can get your story in the next time I post the contest. I will be pretty soon, so keep an eye out for it, LOL...
Comment from DALLAS01
A great reminder, Dean of what it should be all about. Rhyme, rhythm and word choices are impressive. Meter may be a little off in the following stanza:
Do not reward reason with doubt,
(do not) maybe change to 1 syllable (with) maybe to a 2 syllable word.
that's not what life should be about,
just lead friends to the starting line,
work together, and you'll be fine.
maybe (together work)
*It may be just my sense of rhythm ?
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
A great reminder, Dean of what it should be all about. Rhyme, rhythm and word choices are impressive. Meter may be a little off in the following stanza:
Do not reward reason with doubt,
(do not) maybe change to 1 syllable (with) maybe to a 2 syllable word.
that's not what life should be about,
just lead friends to the starting line,
work together, and you'll be fine.
maybe (together work)
*It may be just my sense of rhythm ?
Comment Written 19-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2014
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Thanks very much, DALLAS, and I'm very glad you liked the poem and the underlying message behind it. I'll take another look at that line you mentioned.
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Comment from SolomonStone
I totally agree!! Being born with certain things one may not appreciate as another who gained the same through trial, error, and strife....nice work!! I enjoyed your work and happily await more....once again great job and ty!!
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
I totally agree!! Being born with certain things one may not appreciate as another who gained the same through trial, error, and strife....nice work!! I enjoyed your work and happily await more....once again great job and ty!!
Comment Written 19-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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Thanks so much for the wonderful review, Solomon. I really appreciate it!
Comment from Eric1
Hey Deano my friend, I am so loving the wisdom and philosophy you have poured into this perfectly formed formula one poem,it reminds me of the 'Hare and the Tortoise' great rhyming and proximate rhyming, good rhythm and a smooth flow all make for a first class finish.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
Hey Deano my friend, I am so loving the wisdom and philosophy you have poured into this perfectly formed formula one poem,it reminds me of the 'Hare and the Tortoise' great rhyming and proximate rhyming, good rhythm and a smooth flow all make for a first class finish.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Thanks you very much, Eric/ I'm really happy that you liked it.
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You're welcome Dean, great poem!
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for this wonderful life's primer in these rhythmic, rhymed couplets in quatrains. Your "race/path/starting line" metaphors are superb. Here's to a great race! I'm only sorry the site mandates it's too soon to award another six. Many cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
Thank you for this wonderful life's primer in these rhythmic, rhymed couplets in quatrains. Your "race/path/starting line" metaphors are superb. Here's to a great race! I'm only sorry the site mandates it's too soon to award another six. Many cheers- Joan
Comment Written 19-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Thanks, Joan, an no sixes necessary my friend. I'm just happy you enjoyed it, and that is enough for me.
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I like your attitude. Smiles- Joan
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Well, join the minority, LOL...
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I rather doubt that, but humility becomes you. -J
Comment from gazzagodbod
wow all that racing i may have to lay down you tired me out my friend great piece though and wise words indeed xxgazzagodbodxx
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
wow all that racing i may have to lay down you tired me out my friend great piece though and wise words indeed xxgazzagodbodxx
Comment Written 19-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2014
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Thanks so much for the wonderful review, gaza. I really appreciate it!
Comment from JeanneHP
Once again Dean, a perfectly worded and rhymed poem with a great message. Now I feel much better about all those contests I entered and didn't win. :-)
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
Once again Dean, a perfectly worded and rhymed poem with a great message. Now I feel much better about all those contests I entered and didn't win. :-)
Comment Written 19-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2014
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Ha ha, well, that makes me very happy, JeanneHP. Anytime you can brighten the day of someone else is a good day in my book! Thanks so much for the exceptional rating as well. I really appreciate it!