ABC Super Hero
superhero fun49 total reviews
Comment from ravenblack
zapped to dust in outer space...hulk smash! I was a big marvel/d.c. fan growing up. thanks for the memories and for tackling the entire alphabet.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2013
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zapped to dust in outer space...hulk smash! I was a big marvel/d.c. fan growing up. thanks for the memories and for tackling the entire alphabet.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2013
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Thank you ravenblack for the Hulk memory. I appreciate the generous review.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Wow! I REALLY wish I had a 6 to give you. This is the best poem of this type that I've read. You have skillfully-crafted this poem--using letters the best possible ways, even including meter and rhyme scheme. No point sounds forced. Great
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2013
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Wow! I REALLY wish I had a 6 to give you. This is the best poem of this type that I've read. You have skillfully-crafted this poem--using letters the best possible ways, even including meter and rhyme scheme. No point sounds forced. Great
Comment Written 28-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2013
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Thank you for the high praise Janice. I appreciate the review, including various elements of the poem. A six is always nice, but a great review is even better. Thank you.
Comment from adewpearl
Your poem is in good abcderian format
solid use of rhyming couplets
good alliteration in various lines like beware bad and deeds of doom
kids pretend to be like superheroes - that line sounds more like a poem describing the way children behave than a line in a poem FOR children
typo - rescurers are on the way
typo - villians
Good detail in capturing the essence of super heroes, but I would work on making this sound like it's a poem FOR children
Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2013
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Your poem is in good abcderian format
solid use of rhyming couplets
good alliteration in various lines like beware bad and deeds of doom
kids pretend to be like superheroes - that line sounds more like a poem describing the way children behave than a line in a poem FOR children
typo - rescurers are on the way
typo - villians
Good detail in capturing the essence of super heroes, but I would work on making this sound like it's a poem FOR children
Brooke :-)
Comment Written 28-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2013
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Thanks Brooke, I appreciate the detailed feedback. I have corrected the typos. I'll have to work on the other part. I appreciate the generous stars.
Comment from MM lives on :)
w.j.debi what a sweet poem :) Loved your imagery and love that this is a children's poem. It was creative and ever playful. Best of luck in the contest it was a pleasure..
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2013
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w.j.debi what a sweet poem :) Loved your imagery and love that this is a children's poem. It was creative and ever playful. Best of luck in the contest it was a pleasure..
Comment Written 28-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2013
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Thanks Christopher for your gracious comments and a generous review. I appreciate it.
Comment from angelface2
Nice. I like the idea of ABC and it rhymes as well. A nice poem for children, to be sure. Your T sentence... the should be they(?) I think. Miss Sally
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2013
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Nice. I like the idea of ABC and it rhymes as well. A nice poem for children, to be sure. Your T sentence... the should be they(?) I think. Miss Sally
Comment Written 26-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2013
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Thank you Angelface2 for your generous review and for pointing out the typo. I have changed it. I appreciate it.
Comment from RYME4U
This is very well written. The rhyming ABC verses are great. They are coherent and meaningful. The way you have presented this is well done. Great job!
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2013
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This is very well written. The rhyming ABC verses are great. They are coherent and meaningful. The way you have presented this is well done. Great job!
Comment Written 26-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2013
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Thank you for your kind comments and generous stars. I appreciate it.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was excellent! It read beautifully, no jerking of the words, and a great children's poem of super heroes. Gook luck in the contest! xsx
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2013
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That was excellent! It read beautifully, no jerking of the words, and a great children's poem of super heroes. Gook luck in the contest! xsx
Comment Written 26-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2013
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Thank you for the encouraging and kind comments. I appreciate the generous review.
Comment from intotheblue
Ha ha ha. Great write. ABC, Super Heroes and a language easily read and understood - can there be a better poem for a child? Wonderful. Well done :D Steve.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2013
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Ha ha ha. Great write. ABC, Super Heroes and a language easily read and understood - can there be a better poem for a child? Wonderful. Well done :D Steve.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2013
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Thank you for the generous review and encouraging comments. I appreciate it.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
A wonderful array of expressive images that children I think would align with easily.
Nice rhythm and rhyme which helps this story poem stay smooth in both reading and delivery.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2013
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A wonderful array of expressive images that children I think would align with easily.
Nice rhythm and rhyme which helps this story poem stay smooth in both reading and delivery.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2013
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Thank you Maureen for the gracious and encouraging comments. I appreciate the generous review .