All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Ode to Me!"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from AprilShower
That's the way I felt when I stepped on the scale after Christmas. I'd had eaten cookies and candy and really enjoyed myself and when I stepped on the scales, I notice I had lost weight. The doctor found out why no matter how hard I tried, I could not lose weight. I don't hurt as much as I did before and my memory has improved. It funny how much difference one little gland can make in a person's life when it stops working. I love your verse and I identify with it, Visionary. Good luck in the contest!
April
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2013
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That's the way I felt when I stepped on the scale after Christmas. I'd had eaten cookies and candy and really enjoyed myself and when I stepped on the scales, I notice I had lost weight. The doctor found out why no matter how hard I tried, I could not lose weight. I don't hurt as much as I did before and my memory has improved. It funny how much difference one little gland can make in a person's life when it stops working. I love your verse and I identify with it, Visionary. Good luck in the contest!
April
Comment Written 23-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2013
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Aaaah, a fellow avoirdupois checker! Isn't it wonderful when you feel you DESERVE to be fat - but you AREN'T? You feel like you've won the lottery or something! Bless you for enjoying, April, and a special apprecation for your lovely six - it made my night! :)Sharyn
Comment from mermaids
I like your use of words, the unique structure of the poem and the good feeling your poem brings about. I love how you mention Earl Gray tea, sparrows and your Wal-mart watch. I am tempted to write a poem with this sense of freedom.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2013
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I like your use of words, the unique structure of the poem and the good feeling your poem brings about. I love how you mention Earl Gray tea, sparrows and your Wal-mart watch. I am tempted to write a poem with this sense of freedom.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2013
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Well I say - GO FOR IT mermaids! Blessings, Sharyn
Comment from eowyn0003
I guess I find an ode to ones self a little egotistical. Your attempt to rhyme doesn't work for me. It just seems odd and off to me. Poets.com, says this about the ode:
"Ode" comes from the Greek aeidein, meaning to sing or chant, and belongs to the long and varied tradition of lyric poetry. Originally accompanied by music and dance, and later reserved by the Romantic poets to convey their strongest sentiments, the ode can be generalized as a formal address to an event, a person, or a thing not present.
Since you are always present with yourself, I don't know if this could be considered a true ode. Sorry.
Lura
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reply by the author on 23-Jan-2013
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I guess I find an ode to ones self a little egotistical. Your attempt to rhyme doesn't work for me. It just seems odd and off to me. Poets.com, says this about the ode:
"Ode" comes from the Greek aeidein, meaning to sing or chant, and belongs to the long and varied tradition of lyric poetry. Originally accompanied by music and dance, and later reserved by the Romantic poets to convey their strongest sentiments, the ode can be generalized as a formal address to an event, a person, or a thing not present.
Since you are always present with yourself, I don't know if this could be considered a true ode. Sorry.
Lura
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Comment Written 23-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2013
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Believe it or not, Lura, we have progressed since the days of ancient Greece my girl. Kindly do me the honor of reading "Ode to Myself" by America's greatest poet, Walt Whitman. THEN by all means, tell me it's egotistical. And I perform this piece - so musically, dear Lura, I can assure you it works just fine.
Comment from ~Dovey
This is fun, footloose (or at least barefoot), and fancy free. It skipped right along like a child in a garden. Excellent job on the internal rhymes and choice word placements. The concept is inspired and I am sure this will do well. Good luck!
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2013
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This is fun, footloose (or at least barefoot), and fancy free. It skipped right along like a child in a garden. Excellent job on the internal rhymes and choice word placements. The concept is inspired and I am sure this will do well. Good luck!
Comment Written 23-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2013
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Thank you so much Dovey - it was a gorgeous afternoon! :)Sharyn
Comment from isurp
I totally love this poem! Everything from laughing nose to twinkling winks to hiccupping ticks hit all the right notes for me. Delightful!
Thanks for sharing this and making me smile. Write on! - Steve
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2013
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I totally love this poem! Everything from laughing nose to twinkling winks to hiccupping ticks hit all the right notes for me. Delightful!
Thanks for sharing this and making me smile. Write on! - Steve
Comment Written 23-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2013
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Bless you Steve - I'm so happy to make you smile too! :)Sharyn
Comment from Bina1
And what a celebration it was! Thank you for sharing, I needed a bit of a delightful nudge today! It just makes you want to explode with joy!
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2013
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And what a celebration it was! Thank you for sharing, I needed a bit of a delightful nudge today! It just makes you want to explode with joy!
Comment Written 23-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2013
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Go for it!! thx so much, Bina - :)Sharyn
Comment from Righteous Riter
It's not much I can say but you made it happen. you dazzled me with your words. The structure is beautiful. The rhyming was out of this world. What I mean is that you dropped it here, there and everywhere. This is a classic piece to me. The way you ended it was perfect. Good job.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2013
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It's not much I can say but you made it happen. you dazzled me with your words. The structure is beautiful. The rhyming was out of this world. What I mean is that you dropped it here, there and everywhere. This is a classic piece to me. The way you ended it was perfect. Good job.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2013
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So much appreciated, RR! Love it when hit one out and people "get" it. Blessings, Sharyn
Comment from Kingsland
Celebrating oneself this day we are. This was a very interesting piece of poetic artistry. It adds up to one more day in the life for relieving strife. I enjoyed reading this well delivered piece of poetic artistry... John
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2013
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Celebrating oneself this day we are. This was a very interesting piece of poetic artistry. It adds up to one more day in the life for relieving strife. I enjoyed reading this well delivered piece of poetic artistry... John
Comment Written 23-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2013
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Thank you, John! :)Sharyn
Comment from Curt Mongold
I was just beginning too ask the question of that "one off" thing until I read your notes. Alright then! I love the way you celebrate yourself in this descriptive and imaginative piece, it simply exudes posiitive energy.
Well done,
Curt
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2013
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I was just beginning too ask the question of that "one off" thing until I read your notes. Alright then! I love the way you celebrate yourself in this descriptive and imaginative piece, it simply exudes posiitive energy.
Well done,
Curt
Comment Written 23-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2013
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yes, some English/Aussie/English does need explaining to American ears, doesn't it? Thx Curt! :)Sharyn
Comment from J. Dark
I love this Sharyn. You are definitely a one-off and this fun, witty and colourfully descriptive Ode is very 'you'. I loved the fact you described god as him or her and I can relate to your delight in the simple things in life (especially the scales bit). I hope you place high in competition as this poem is just like you: fantastic, lively, interesting and vibrant!
Kindest of fond regards
Julie :-)
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2013
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I love this Sharyn. You are definitely a one-off and this fun, witty and colourfully descriptive Ode is very 'you'. I loved the fact you described god as him or her and I can relate to your delight in the simple things in life (especially the scales bit). I hope you place high in competition as this poem is just like you: fantastic, lively, interesting and vibrant!
Kindest of fond regards
Julie :-)
Comment Written 23-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2013
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So glad you enjoyed this one, Julie! :)))