All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 43 "We, the Peaceful Watchers"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from justatuna
This was another great write. Reading your poetry is always a pleasure and a learning experience. I saw your alliteration throughout. It's something I'm trying to work on. Excellent write. Always one of my favorite writers.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2012
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This was another great write. Reading your poetry is always a pleasure and a learning experience. I saw your alliteration throughout. It's something I'm trying to work on. Excellent write. Always one of my favorite writers.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2012
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and again my dear! :)
Comment from Meena Jawahrani
You create a powerful imagery with your words.
Excellent combination of nature's elements and human emotions.
Deserves all the recognition received.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2012
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You create a powerful imagery with your words.
Excellent combination of nature's elements and human emotions.
Deserves all the recognition received.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2012
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thanks Meena - glad you enjoyed it! :) Sharyn
Comment from G.B. Smith
Aloha Sharyn
Sweetie, this is superb. I am an incurable romantic, and am a push over for a good romantic poem, and this surely is one. Nicely crafted
Bear
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2012
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Aloha Sharyn
Sweetie, this is superb. I am an incurable romantic, and am a push over for a good romantic poem, and this surely is one. Nicely crafted
Bear
Comment Written 25-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2012
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aaah there you are Bear ... takes one to know one, hmm? bless you, as always!
Sharyn :)
Comment from Thatguypk
This is a very beautiful piece of verse. Wonderfully descriptive of the force of the waves, passionate in the accounting of the thrill of the ride. I love the idea of the peaceful watchers, recalling the thrill of life's challenges.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2012
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This is a very beautiful piece of verse. Wonderfully descriptive of the force of the waves, passionate in the accounting of the thrill of the ride. I love the idea of the peaceful watchers, recalling the thrill of life's challenges.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2012
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thank you so much for your lovely review!
Best wishes
Sharyn
Comment from artemis53
Oh, Sharyn. I truly love this. My brother was stationed in Hawaii and so was my youngest. They both enjoyed the surfing. "to carve those curls of power without fear," means a lot to me. "We, the peaceful watchers, feel the joy of time when life was wild as ocean wave, and every breath had possibilities." You really can't get much better than that ;) Definitely worth a six!
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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Oh, Sharyn. I truly love this. My brother was stationed in Hawaii and so was my youngest. They both enjoyed the surfing. "to carve those curls of power without fear," means a lot to me. "We, the peaceful watchers, feel the joy of time when life was wild as ocean wave, and every breath had possibilities." You really can't get much better than that ;) Definitely worth a six!
Comment Written 25-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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YAH!!!! Diane, thank you SOOOO much! Bless you for loving this piece, because I love it too! :) Sharyn
Comment from Frank Atwood
How we live life has much to do with how much we love truth. Both are compatable while also not compatable. When the two meet, that's old age and wisdom comes upon us to not only teach, but slow us down to prepare us for a life we can only imagine, while in the silence of ourselves, we are comforted by it, and hold on to it, to the end.
Very good and very deep in more ways than you may even know. Worth a six in my book. Then again, no ones reads my books. God bless
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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How we live life has much to do with how much we love truth. Both are compatable while also not compatable. When the two meet, that's old age and wisdom comes upon us to not only teach, but slow us down to prepare us for a life we can only imagine, while in the silence of ourselves, we are comforted by it, and hold on to it, to the end.
Very good and very deep in more ways than you may even know. Worth a six in my book. Then again, no ones reads my books. God bless
Comment Written 25-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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double blessings, my dear! :)Sharyn
Comment from nancyjam
This is a beautifully descriptive poem. You
capture the thrill seekers - the surfers challenging
the waves, with wonderful imagery.
I love the ending, the "peaceful watchers" wanting
their life to be like that - full of excitement and daring and adventure.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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This is a beautifully descriptive poem. You
capture the thrill seekers - the surfers challenging
the waves, with wonderful imagery.
I love the ending, the "peaceful watchers" wanting
their life to be like that - full of excitement and daring and adventure.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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thx Nancy!
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
This is very well written and descriptive about surfing it reads very well through out and is a strong poem I enjoyed this beautiful presentation well done regards Jill
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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This is very well written and descriptive about surfing it reads very well through out and is a strong poem I enjoyed this beautiful presentation well done regards Jill
Comment Written 25-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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Thanks Jill!
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Sharyn,
The blank verse is written in the same style as the English sonnet with no rhyme or near rhyme. You do have some near rhymes but don't know if one could call this a blank verse. But having said that this is beautiful. You have good verbs and adjectives that add to the charm of this piece. You have described surfing perfectly. Well done and good luck in the contest.....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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Hi Sharyn,
The blank verse is written in the same style as the English sonnet with no rhyme or near rhyme. You do have some near rhymes but don't know if one could call this a blank verse. But having said that this is beautiful. You have good verbs and adjectives that add to the charm of this piece. You have described surfing perfectly. Well done and good luck in the contest.....blessings, chey
Comment Written 25-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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Actually I checked and rhyme is fine just so long as it's not recurring or in any kind of regular pattern, Chey. :) Sharyn
Comment from Ralph Miller
Love it! And could see the scene all the way through. Used to surf a bit. When we visited all the famous big wave sites over there, t'was flat calm. The other side of the coin. Need those swells coming all the way from The Alutions or somewhere.
Ralph
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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Love it! And could see the scene all the way through. Used to surf a bit. When we visited all the famous big wave sites over there, t'was flat calm. The other side of the coin. Need those swells coming all the way from The Alutions or somewhere.
Ralph
Comment Written 25-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2012
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hey thx Ralph! it was our first big winter swell and it was spectacular on the weekend - early in the season, too. You wouldn't want to be out there (or I wouldn't want to be - I'd get flattened and end up dead or with my nose buried in the sand somewhere, feet sticking up) :) Sharyn
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Ha! What a sight.