The Edge of Reality
How it feels to be near death89 total reviews
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Dklrdmcches
A good description of what could be the onset of a heart attack! Good flow to the words, the imagery is powerful and compelling.
Well done.
Patrick
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012
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Hi Dklrdmcches
A good description of what could be the onset of a heart attack! Good flow to the words, the imagery is powerful and compelling.
Well done.
Patrick
Comment Written 09-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012
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Thank you so very much for the kind review...dark lord
Comment from peggles
I enjoyed your dark poem
I thought it was interesting and entertaining
It is very original extremely vivid and very moving
your poem tells a very good story
I liked it a lot
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012
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I enjoyed your dark poem
I thought it was interesting and entertaining
It is very original extremely vivid and very moving
your poem tells a very good story
I liked it a lot
Comment Written 09-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012
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Thank you so very much for the kind review...dark lord
Comment from trinalynnes
I like the imagery used such as " electric currents crossing streams within my being." I also like how the last stanza ties back into the first one regarding the warning signs. Your poem could be taken in several different contexts. The dark one could be illness, heart attack, loss of love or the "devil" trying to get you to succumb to an evil. Did you have one in mind when you wrote it? This is well written because it allows the reader to decide this for himself.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012
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I like the imagery used such as " electric currents crossing streams within my being." I also like how the last stanza ties back into the first one regarding the warning signs. Your poem could be taken in several different contexts. The dark one could be illness, heart attack, loss of love or the "devil" trying to get you to succumb to an evil. Did you have one in mind when you wrote it? This is well written because it allows the reader to decide this for himself.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012
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Thank you so very much for such a kind review...dark lord
Comment from PoesyPoet
Tip-toeing on the verge of insanity. Now, that's poetry! I've been there, I think, many times. I like the tone of your poem and your words were mesmerizing. Well done. PP
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012
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Tip-toeing on the verge of insanity. Now, that's poetry! I've been there, I think, many times. I like the tone of your poem and your words were mesmerizing. Well done. PP
Comment Written 09-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012
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thank you so very much for such a kind review...dark lord
Comment from Piggies Grandma
Your poem is cleverly written and very well thought out Dklrdmcches. I enjoyed reading it but I felt sorry for the poor person, near death and in so much pain. You made me feel like I was there watching.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012
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Your poem is cleverly written and very well thought out Dklrdmcches. I enjoyed reading it but I felt sorry for the poor person, near death and in so much pain. You made me feel like I was there watching.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012
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thank you so very much for such a kind review...dark lord
Comment from LadyCosgrove
Well, that's one way to go... I wonder how many of us will follow this path? A good few I should think.
An interesting topic and not at all gloomy. Well done for making it so readable.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012
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Well, that's one way to go... I wonder how many of us will follow this path? A good few I should think.
An interesting topic and not at all gloomy. Well done for making it so readable.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012
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Thank you so very much for the kind review...dark lord
Comment from jadapenn
Hi Dark Lord, a poem so morbid and dark it pierces through the heart. How can a soul get so far down into the abyss of no return. I could feel the angst and sense of surrender in this poem.
I enjoyed the read. Well illustrated. This is not biographical, is it? Hope not. luv jada
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012
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Hi Dark Lord, a poem so morbid and dark it pierces through the heart. How can a soul get so far down into the abyss of no return. I could feel the angst and sense of surrender in this poem.
I enjoyed the read. Well illustrated. This is not biographical, is it? Hope not. luv jada
Comment Written 09-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012
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WOW!!! Thank you so very much for the stars, it is greatly appreciated. Yes, this story is about me...dark lord
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You're a dark child? Not a light child like me? Ugh no friend. There is so much to live for. Here's a big hug for you. :) luv jada
Comment from TammyGail
I enjoyed your dark poem Dklrdmcches, heartfelt and personal or at least that's what I got from it. Loved your color scheme and imagery. Thanks for sharing it was a pleasure.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012
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I enjoyed your dark poem Dklrdmcches, heartfelt and personal or at least that's what I got from it. Loved your color scheme and imagery. Thanks for sharing it was a pleasure.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012
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Thank you once again for the continued support of my writing...dark lord
Comment from Ceallach
First I want to say I am sorry, But I could read your poem - the first stanza is all I could get through. The back ground colour was killing my eyes - that colour red, on my screen it is bright almost florescent and my eyes couldn't see the words. If maybe you could change that I would like very much to read your work. I am one who clings to the darker side and live in the minor chords of life - so this poem intrigues me. Again I am sorry. C~
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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012
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First I want to say I am sorry, But I could read your poem - the first stanza is all I could get through. The back ground colour was killing my eyes - that colour red, on my screen it is bright almost florescent and my eyes couldn't see the words. If maybe you could change that I would like very much to read your work. I am one who clings to the darker side and live in the minor chords of life - so this poem intrigues me. Again I am sorry. C~
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012
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Thank you for stopping by...dark lord
Comment from Aveindha
Deep and dark. it is very well worded, you have expressed yourself in a powerful way here. I am more partial to happy hopeful, romantic poem...haha but this is very well done
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012
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Deep and dark. it is very well worded, you have expressed yourself in a powerful way here. I am more partial to happy hopeful, romantic poem...haha but this is very well done
Comment Written 09-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2012
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Thank you so very much for the kind review...dark lord
