Little Billy
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Love's casualty"memiors from my life experiences.
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Comment from rosah
this is such a heartbreaking poem, of feeling totally alone, and afraid, for nothing that you did, but from what was done to you, thank you for sharing, blessings.
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this is such a heartbreaking poem, of feeling totally alone, and afraid, for nothing that you did, but from what was done to you, thank you for sharing, blessings.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2010
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thanks
Comment from AnnaLinda
Poet,
I think only you could write such a strong
naani poem about your most devastating
abandonment. In just 22 syllables you have
conveyed the terror and pain of that
situation you lived through.
'without provocation' is a very strong ending
and is like a satori.
Linda
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Poet,
I think only you could write such a strong
naani poem about your most devastating
abandonment. In just 22 syllables you have
conveyed the terror and pain of that
situation you lived through.
'without provocation' is a very strong ending
and is like a satori.
Linda
Comment Written 12-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2010
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thank you
Comment from Fireshadow
This Naani poem is very powerful and poignant, especially after reading your author's notes. I think it will be a strong contender in this contest. Good luck ! Amarillys
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This Naani poem is very powerful and poignant, especially after reading your author's notes. I think it will be a strong contender in this contest. Good luck ! Amarillys
Comment Written 12-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2010
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thank you I hope so.
Comment from AlvinTEthington
This is a superb naani. It covers a universal theme--war--and deals with human relationships--love. The syllabic count is within the boundaries and well distributed. I like the abab rhyme scheme, which is difficult to integrate into a poem this short. Fine work.
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This is a superb naani. It covers a universal theme--war--and deals with human relationships--love. The syllabic count is within the boundaries and well distributed. I like the abab rhyme scheme, which is difficult to integrate into a poem this short. Fine work.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2010
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thank you, you are to kind.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Minglement
Oh, your heartbreak and loss so pervades every word of this poignant entry for the naani contest. My heart breaks for you, so young with so much to deal with. I hope you have overcome this double tragedy. Well written. Good luck in the contest.
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Oh, your heartbreak and loss so pervades every word of this poignant entry for the naani contest. My heart breaks for you, so young with so much to deal with. I hope you have overcome this double tragedy. Well written. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2010
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thank you
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You're welcome. M
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written with good form, good flow, good meter, a wonderful naani with a lot of meaning, the author notes added to the devastation, i wish you the best of luck in the contest
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this is very well written with good form, good flow, good meter, a wonderful naani with a lot of meaning, the author notes added to the devastation, i wish you the best of luck in the contest
Comment Written 12-Sep-2010
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Thanks.
Comment from LoveLifeKnight
although not everyone has had your tragic experience, almost everyone can relate to your words and the message of your poem. thank you for sharing your story and good luck in the contest!
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although not everyone has had your tragic experience, almost everyone can relate to your words and the message of your poem. thank you for sharing your story and good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 12-Sep-2010
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2010
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thank you yes it hits us all sooner or later. some sooner.
Comment from MizKat
A nicely written poem, even in it's sadness. It's difficult for a child, or anyone for that matter, to understand a situation like this. Best wishes in the contest. Kat
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A nicely written poem, even in it's sadness. It's difficult for a child, or anyone for that matter, to understand a situation like this. Best wishes in the contest. Kat
Comment Written 12-Sep-2010
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thank you.
Comment from RKagan
This poem is very touching. I can feel the honesty in every line. You suffered greatly and at such a young age that it must have been devestating. I hope that life is good for you now. God Bless you.
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This poem is very touching. I can feel the honesty in every line. You suffered greatly and at such a young age that it must have been devestating. I hope that life is good for you now. God Bless you.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2010
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thank you.
Comment from despiser
Wow! That's pretty tragic. Powerful words for powerful emotions. Like it or not, life's scars define who we are by how we deal with them. Each of us do that in their own unique way that suits us best. Great work.
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Wow! That's pretty tragic. Powerful words for powerful emotions. Like it or not, life's scars define who we are by how we deal with them. Each of us do that in their own unique way that suits us best. Great work.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2010
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Thanks