Tantalizing Eyes
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Comment from Isaiah Ramesses
I missed a few chapters in the past three weeks--i'm sure. But it comes together very well, Barbara. I enjoyed your book, and wish you the best of luck in publishing this. (Holds up wine glass) to the best sellers list...
Good job.
Isaiah Ramesses
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2010
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I missed a few chapters in the past three weeks--i'm sure. But it comes together very well, Barbara. I enjoyed your book, and wish you the best of luck in publishing this. (Holds up wine glass) to the best sellers list...
Good job.
Isaiah Ramesses
Comment Written 09-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from ladybird
A very satisfactory ending to a well written story. Well done. The whole story was a very enjoyable read.
Oh, and good luck with your surgery.
"You're (a) young and cocky. Should 'a' be here? Or is an end word missing?
"I want ( ) solve this peacefully." to
"I'm fine, but Carlos isn't doing (to) well." too?
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2010
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A very satisfactory ending to a well written story. Well done. The whole story was a very enjoyable read.
Oh, and good luck with your surgery.
"You're (a) young and cocky. Should 'a' be here? Or is an end word missing?
"I want ( ) solve this peacefully." to
"I'm fine, but Carlos isn't doing (to) well." too?
Comment Written 09-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I have made the corrections.
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Your welcome, and good luck with your book.
Comment from jadapenn
Miss Barbara, I hope I still catch you before you go into hospital. All the best there, my girlfriend. Oh la la, and here you come to the end of an action packed novel that went out with a big bang. Well done. Now for all the editing. I think you did a magnificent job - so take a bow as David would have said. It was an interesting novel after Matt and Dani.
You go girl! much luv jada
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2010
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Miss Barbara, I hope I still catch you before you go into hospital. All the best there, my girlfriend. Oh la la, and here you come to the end of an action packed novel that went out with a big bang. Well done. Now for all the editing. I think you did a magnificent job - so take a bow as David would have said. It was an interesting novel after Matt and Dani.
You go girl! much luv jada
Comment Written 09-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2010
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Thank you for the kind review and the 6's. I appreciate your support. I will be back as soon as I can.
Comment from lchrsh
What a romantic ending to your book! You do a great job once again of keeping the reader's attention. You may want to check a couple small errors - "You're a young and cocky." "Carlos isn't doing to (too) well." Run-on: ". . . you're paid to be snipers, do your jobs." All in all, you did a wonderful job!
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2010
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What a romantic ending to your book! You do a great job once again of keeping the reader's attention. You may want to check a couple small errors - "You're a young and cocky." "Carlos isn't doing to (too) well." Run-on: ". . . you're paid to be snipers, do your jobs." All in all, you did a wonderful job!
Comment Written 09-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and I made the corrections.
Comment from Juliette Chamberlain
You finished the story beautifully, with leya rescued and Steven and her reunited.
Things did get a bit hairy for a while but all the bad guys are taken care of now, without loos of life to the task force.
Well done, and best wishes for your surgery.
Juliette
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2010
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You finished the story beautifully, with leya rescued and Steven and her reunited.
Things did get a bit hairy for a while but all the bad guys are taken care of now, without loos of life to the task force.
Well done, and best wishes for your surgery.
Juliette
Comment Written 09-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and continued support.
Comment from Mary Faucheux
Great job. here are the only two things I found.
Mary
"You're (a) young and cocky.
"I want (to) solve this peacefully."
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2010
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Great job. here are the only two things I found.
Mary
"You're (a) young and cocky.
"I want (to) solve this peacefully."
Comment Written 09-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2010
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I have made the corrections. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from dmjones
A good exciting ending and an entertaining read. Good luck with the surgery.
A couple things to check:
"I want (to)solve this peacefully."
Michael spoke through is (his) headset.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2010
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A good exciting ending and an entertaining read. Good luck with the surgery.
A couple things to check:
"I want (to)solve this peacefully."
Michael spoke through is (his) headset.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2010
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I am on those mistakes. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from lola29
Barbara, you a superb action writer. I wanted so much for Steven and Leya to be all right, and your ending couldn't be any better. Now, I want to buy your book. Bravo!
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2010
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Barbara, you a superb action writer. I wanted so much for Steven and Leya to be all right, and your ending couldn't be any better. Now, I want to buy your book. Bravo!
Comment Written 09-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and continued support.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
A great chapter, Barbara -
holding the interest
throughout --- oh,
I do like a happy ending.
cabin and she stared at it(,) repeating the prayer Steven would soon enter
Good luck with your surgery, my friend.
Margaret.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2010
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A great chapter, Barbara -
holding the interest
throughout --- oh,
I do like a happy ending.
cabin and she stared at it(,) repeating the prayer Steven would soon enter
Good luck with your surgery, my friend.
Margaret.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2010
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Thank you for your kind review and support. I also appreciate the well wishes.
Comment from JimLee
You did just fine. The suspense is there, realistic scenes of the shootout and release of Leya were believable.
The only thing I found suspect was the cocky attitude of Michael. Guys that do that sort of thing are more disciplined than that.
Good Writing!
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2010
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You did just fine. The suspense is there, realistic scenes of the shootout and release of Leya were believable.
The only thing I found suspect was the cocky attitude of Michael. Guys that do that sort of thing are more disciplined than that.
Good Writing!
Comment Written 09-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2010
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I have actually met one that was very cocky. This is patterned after him. His name was actually Michael. Thank you for your kind review.
