Tantalizing Eyes
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Comment from Begin Again
Barbara,
I'm gladPeggy finally got what lshe had coming to her and that Steven and Leya are working things out. Or at least I hope they are...It's probably about time for something else to happen...Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
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Barbara,
I'm gladPeggy finally got what lshe had coming to her and that Steven and Leya are working things out. Or at least I hope they are...It's probably about time for something else to happen...Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 15-May-2010
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
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Things have been a little too peaceful for too long. Thank you for your kind review and friendship.
Comment from RazberryBullet
Yes, let that be the last of Peggy!
make-ups are fantastic." LOL!!! ...I've forgiven you for that and for drawing straws to see who was going to have to marry me." "We're making progress. ;p
Well done!
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
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Yes, let that be the last of Peggy!
make-ups are fantastic." LOL!!! ...I've forgiven you for that and for drawing straws to see who was going to have to marry me." "We're making progress. ;p
Well done!
Comment Written 15-May-2010
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I appreciate your support.
Comment from maggieJo
Thirty three pages left - hmm. A lot can happen in that length of pages! Ha!
They are going to make it. Trust comes with a lot of understanding and believing. Sorry about your throat problems. Hope you heal quicklllyl.
mj
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
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Thirty three pages left - hmm. A lot can happen in that length of pages! Ha!
They are going to make it. Trust comes with a lot of understanding and believing. Sorry about your throat problems. Hope you heal quicklllyl.
mj
Comment Written 15-May-2010
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I appreciate hearing from you.
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Your so very welcome.
mj
Comment from Belinda
It is really complicated,especially because Peggy always comes at the 'right' moment to intrude and ruin whatever peace that comes between them. But I see progress. You write very well...
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
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It is really complicated,especially because Peggy always comes at the 'right' moment to intrude and ruin whatever peace that comes between them. But I see progress. You write very well...
Comment Written 15-May-2010
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
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Thank you for your support and kind review.
Comment from dportwood
barbara.wilkey,
Well written declarations of love in these tender conversations, but there is still and element of mistrust leaving the author opportunity to shift the plot. Well done.
I saw no spag.
Duane
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
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barbara.wilkey,
Well written declarations of love in these tender conversations, but there is still and element of mistrust leaving the author opportunity to shift the plot. Well done.
I saw no spag.
Duane
Comment Written 15-May-2010
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
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Thank you for your kind words and continued support.
Comment from K. L. Bauman
Good chapter, though I havn't read the rest of the book, so some things were a little confusing to me. I only noticed one spag--"I knew you was special." Unless that's just how your main character talks? Should be "were". Other than that, great work! :)
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
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Good chapter, though I havn't read the rest of the book, so some things were a little confusing to me. I only noticed one spag--"I knew you was special." Unless that's just how your main character talks? Should be "were". Other than that, great work! :)
Comment Written 15-May-2010
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
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Thank you for catching the error. I have corrected it. Thank you for your review.
Comment from fictionwriter
It's good to see that Leya and Steven are getting things straightened out. Peggy is really a sick woman. You'd think she'd realize that she's lost. Great job.
"I know I married you under less than perfect circumstances, but when we made love I made you not only my wife, but I invited you to be my lover, my best friend, and my life partner."(I feel that there's a comma missing in this sentence, then I looked at all the commas and feel it would be better broken up. Maybe; I know I married you under less than perfect circumstances. However, when we make love, I made you not only my wife, but my lover and best friend. You're my life partner in every way.)
I didn't eat before because I was so upset(.) I wasn't hungry and I didn't have a lot of money."
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
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It's good to see that Leya and Steven are getting things straightened out. Peggy is really a sick woman. You'd think she'd realize that she's lost. Great job.
"I know I married you under less than perfect circumstances, but when we made love I made you not only my wife, but I invited you to be my lover, my best friend, and my life partner."(I feel that there's a comma missing in this sentence, then I looked at all the commas and feel it would be better broken up. Maybe; I know I married you under less than perfect circumstances. However, when we make love, I made you not only my wife, but my lover and best friend. You're my life partner in every way.)
I didn't eat before because I was so upset(.) I wasn't hungry and I didn't have a lot of money."
Comment Written 15-May-2010
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
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Thank you for your eagle eye. I have made the corrections.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is another excellent chapter from you that leaves me hungering for more. can't wait to see what other turmoil you put them through. wonderful reading material. i look for your name every time i'm on the website
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
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this is another excellent chapter from you that leaves me hungering for more. can't wait to see what other turmoil you put them through. wonderful reading material. i look for your name every time i'm on the website
Comment Written 15-May-2010
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
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Thank you for your support and review. I appreciate both.
Comment from missy98writer
Barbara,
I was delighted to see a PM in my box. Another wonderful chapter to 'Tantalizing Eyes.' Peggy is such a bitch I can't believe she jumped bail to harass Steven and try to break up him and Leya. I'm glad they carted her off to jail hopefully for good. I'm happy Leya and Steven are trying to work out their marriage. Talk about a rock start to wedded bliss. Excellent dialogue, great drama and good descriptive writing. I look forward to your next chapter. Wonderful job, we need to get you published. Your friend. . .Melissa!
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
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Barbara,
I was delighted to see a PM in my box. Another wonderful chapter to 'Tantalizing Eyes.' Peggy is such a bitch I can't believe she jumped bail to harass Steven and try to break up him and Leya. I'm glad they carted her off to jail hopefully for good. I'm happy Leya and Steven are trying to work out their marriage. Talk about a rock start to wedded bliss. Excellent dialogue, great drama and good descriptive writing. I look forward to your next chapter. Wonderful job, we need to get you published. Your friend. . .Melissa!
Comment Written 15-May-2010
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
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Thank you for your wonderful review. I always enjoy hearing from you.
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How's your knee doing? Are you glad school is about over for the upcommng summer?
Melissa.
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There are 14 days of school left. I have my ankle surgery scheduled for June 10th. I am not looking forward to being confined to bedrest for at least 6 weeks. I'm going to use my school laptop to keep up my writing.
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I look forward to some poems from your pen and more chapters. I've been on a writing frinzy with my flower poetry and some spiritual pomes I need to post.
Melissa.
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My next manuscript is ready to start posting when this one is finished.
Comment from Shirley McLain
i do like this story. It always leaves me wanting more at the end. The action kept it going. Your characters remain strong. I did not see any spag.
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
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i do like this story. It always leaves me wanting more at the end. The action kept it going. Your characters remain strong. I did not see any spag.
Comment Written 15-May-2010
reply by the author on 15-May-2010
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Thank you for your kind review.