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Comment from amada
This phrase grabbed me, dear writer "In the shadows, two banditos slurped cheap wine and dreamt of their own Garden of Eden." What a concept and fresh idea! I wish you the best in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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This phrase grabbed me, dear writer "In the shadows, two banditos slurped cheap wine and dreamt of their own Garden of Eden." What a concept and fresh idea! I wish you the best in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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Amada.
Thanks you so much for the generous comments and your gracious support. Smiles, Carol
Comment from harleyangelbrat
Your story is very well written. It is descriptive and interesting. It is sad, of course, but follows the guidelines of the contest well. I enjoyed reading your story very much. I pray you do well in the contest. Best wishes in winning. Excellent read! God bless you.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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Your story is very well written. It is descriptive and interesting. It is sad, of course, but follows the guidelines of the contest well. I enjoyed reading your story very much. I pray you do well in the contest. Best wishes in winning. Excellent read! God bless you.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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harleyangelbrat,
Thank you so much for your generous comments and outstanding best wishes. I value your support. Smiles, Carol
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You are very welcome. I hope you have a blessed day. Marilyn
Comment from IndianaIrish
Very good portrayal of violence, Carol. Her luscious garden destroyed so completely ... and forever. Best of luck in this always fun contest.
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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Very good portrayal of violence, Carol. Her luscious garden destroyed so completely ... and forever. Best of luck in this always fun contest.
Indy :>)
Comment Written 22-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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Karyn,
As you know, limiting my words is a struggle so I;m glad that this one came across well. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Janine Ellis-Fynn
This is a haunting and powerful piece of writing. It is so sad and traumatic and I was very relieved that it in effect had a happy ending in the end. Abuse against women is terrible and your writing would be fitting for a campaign poster. Well written.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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This is a haunting and powerful piece of writing. It is so sad and traumatic and I was very relieved that it in effect had a happy ending in the end. Abuse against women is terrible and your writing would be fitting for a campaign poster. Well written.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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Janine,
Thank you so much for the kind comments and the encouragement. I appreciate it very much. Smiles, CArol
Comment from adewpearl
This story certainly illustrates the power and tragedy of violence - how often it shatters the dreams and lives of the innocent, who learn all too suddenly that life is not nearly as lovely as they envision it. The way you contrast her idea of paradise and their idea of the garden of Eden is most effective. Brooke
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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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This story certainly illustrates the power and tragedy of violence - how often it shatters the dreams and lives of the innocent, who learn all too suddenly that life is not nearly as lovely as they envision it. The way you contrast her idea of paradise and their idea of the garden of Eden is most effective. Brooke
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Comment Written 22-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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Brooke,
Thank you for wonderful review. Writing in so few words, I always fear my thoughts don't come across as clearly as I would like...Glad to know you could see the clash of her garden and theirs. Smiles, Carol
Comment from dmjones
I'm so glad this ended with angels welcoming her home. Really well done and for such a small piece of fiction it invokes a lot of emotions.
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reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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I'm so glad this ended with angels welcoming her home. Really well done and for such a small piece of fiction it invokes a lot of emotions.
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Comment Written 22-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2010
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Donna,
Writing in so few words tests my desire to paint a bigger picture...Glad you were able to see the struggle. Smiles, Carol