Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

Well, that was just one lovely, tender, romantic ending after the poor girl's rather hilarious encounter with the bees - not that it was hilarious for her! LOL Great descriptive detail that allowed me to visualize the whole scene without even needing video cameras rolling :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 13-Feb-2010

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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2010

Brooke,

Can you imagine the television station as they viewed the footage? Wouldn't be a dry eye in the place...laughing at her misfortune. Smiles, Carol

Comment from bayoupoet

Excellent

As always this is perfect. You have written a story of interest and excitement. You told this story in less than five hundred words. You amaze me! Good luck in the Contest!
sandra

 Comment Written 13-Feb-2010

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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2010

Sandra,

Thanks for the wonderful review. There just might be a smidgen of truth somewhere in this story..LOL Smiles, Carol

Comment from Kingsland

Excellent

It seem she put herself through hell for nothing, as the night was in the plans for her all along. I liked the way you wrote this piece as it has really good imagery. I could see the events taking place as I read this short story. This was just an excellent piece to have read and written a review for... John

 Comment Written 13-Feb-2010

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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2010

John,

thanks so much for reading and enjoying. I appreciate your generous comments. CArol

Comment from Kashif Ali Abbas

Excellent

I am your huge fan and will be owing to not only your awesome writing style but whenever i read any of your stuff i get a chance to learn. God bless you!

Coming to the story, usual begin again style, shocking first line "oooops" lol.

Great ending sentence in flashes they kissed.

Truly a winner!

100 starer!

 Comment Written 13-Feb-2010

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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2010

Kashif,

Thank you for your most generous reply and for enjoying my story. I really appreciate it. Smiles, Carol

reply by Kashif Ali Abbas on 13-Feb-2010

Nah! carol pleasure was mine to read and review
God bless you

keep smiling

K

Comment from melyuki

Excellent

ah such a cute valentine story and so unprivate in the outcome.. so typically you. full of surpirses miss carol sis... loved the underlying message here sis. makes you think twice about life and what makes us all tick.. very well worded and presented.. hugs to you miss valentine of the day... luv from me xxxxxxxxx

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 Comment Written 13-Feb-2010

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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2010

Sis,

Would you believe that there was a smidgen of truth to this story a long long time ago...LOL Only a smidgen mind you! Smiles, Carol