Chasing the Elusive Dream
Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "Help for the Brokenhearted"A southern couple's journey in the 60's,70's & 80'
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Comment from WRITER1
For most of us we have had our share of bad relationships and we all lived though it. Today the younger generations hearts seem to get broken quicker. It is also dangerous today because of their tempers. This was a good story and I hope most will learn from it.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2009
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For most of us we have had our share of bad relationships and we all lived though it. Today the younger generations hearts seem to get broken quicker. It is also dangerous today because of their tempers. This was a good story and I hope most will learn from it.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2009
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Thank you for the review and the nice comments. It is true they do seem to get broken more often and some people don't have any control over their tempers. At least, when my son lost his, he punched the wall and not a person.
Beth
Comment from Kellytr
BethShelby
A great story which I can relate to in many ways, being the mother of three girls and three boys. It is absolutely necessary to develop a strong sense of humor to carry us through the heartbreak years, which as you point out, never really end.
Just a couple of minor things.
In the first paragraph, replace 'if' with 'is'.
In the second paragraph, replace 'prospective' with 'perspective', and maybe add an 'a' before 'turtle'. Also, replace 'advise' with 'advice'
I hope I'm not giving you confusing advice, since I am Australian and we do spell some things differently.
I really love the paragraph about the girls - it's an absolute classic! Cheers, Kelly
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2009
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BethShelby
A great story which I can relate to in many ways, being the mother of three girls and three boys. It is absolutely necessary to develop a strong sense of humor to carry us through the heartbreak years, which as you point out, never really end.
Just a couple of minor things.
In the first paragraph, replace 'if' with 'is'.
In the second paragraph, replace 'prospective' with 'perspective', and maybe add an 'a' before 'turtle'. Also, replace 'advise' with 'advice'
I hope I'm not giving you confusing advice, since I am Australian and we do spell some things differently.
I really love the paragraph about the girls - it's an absolute classic! Cheers, Kelly
Comment Written 04-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2009
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Thanks Kelly for the review and nice compliments. I appreciate you finding the spags but they had already been corrected while you reading it.
Beth
Comment from missy98writer
BethShelby,
I loved your humorous and great advise as a mother. Your writing is wonderful and descriptive.
"I'm the mother of four children, all of which have had their hearts shattered so many times they look like pieces of a jigsaw puzzle. Nevertheless, their Humpty-Dumpty hearts keep getting put back together again, and life goes on."
You are so right about the difference between boys and girls when it comes to break-ups. Your writing reminds me of Erma Bombeck who wrote "If Life is a Bowl of Cherries, What Am I Doing in the Pits".
I love the art work of Smurphgirl's you used. I loved your piece.
missy98writer.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2009
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BethShelby,
I loved your humorous and great advise as a mother. Your writing is wonderful and descriptive.
"I'm the mother of four children, all of which have had their hearts shattered so many times they look like pieces of a jigsaw puzzle. Nevertheless, their Humpty-Dumpty hearts keep getting put back together again, and life goes on."
You are so right about the difference between boys and girls when it comes to break-ups. Your writing reminds me of Erma Bombeck who wrote "If Life is a Bowl of Cherries, What Am I Doing in the Pits".
I love the art work of Smurphgirl's you used. I loved your piece.
missy98writer.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2009
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Thank you Missy, I'm so glad you liked it. You are the second reviewer who said it sounded like Erma Bombeck. I am flattered.
Beth
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She used to be one of my favorite humor writers and your story reminded me of her funny take on life and kids.
Melissa.
Comment from CCasetta
Great piece of writing. Kind of a "How to" story presented with sensitivity and gentle humor (I especially like the observation how a broken heart is like chicken pox). Wonderful bit of reading. --Curt
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2009
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Great piece of writing. Kind of a "How to" story presented with sensitivity and gentle humor (I especially like the observation how a broken heart is like chicken pox). Wonderful bit of reading. --Curt
Comment Written 04-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2009
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Curt, Thanks so much for the review and the nice comments.
Beth
Comment from BJean
Boy can I relate to your story having raised seven and still living:) Very good advice about them not receiving our advice! You sure made up for your lack of heartache.
I enjoyed your story from start to finish. Brought a smile. It is very well written. Love, Jean
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2009
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Boy can I relate to your story having raised seven and still living:) Very good advice about them not receiving our advice! You sure made up for your lack of heartache.
I enjoyed your story from start to finish. Brought a smile. It is very well written. Love, Jean
Comment Written 04-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2009
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Thank you so much Jean. I really appreciat you review and your nice comments. I'm so glad you liked it.
Beth
Comment from Belinda
Beth, I've been there as well. As mothers we really can do nothing but be there for them. (We cannot even try to speak badly of the other party to make them feel better, as he/she might defend them to no end ... ha-ha). And as you say, this too will pass. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2009
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Beth, I've been there as well. As mothers we really can do nothing but be there for them. (We cannot even try to speak badly of the other party to make them feel better, as he/she might defend them to no end ... ha-ha). And as you say, this too will pass. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2009
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Thank you for reading and for your excellent comments.
Beth
Comment from adewpearl
The world IF full of jerks - IS
all of which have had their hearts shattered - all of WHOM
see it from his prospective - PERSPECTIVE
offer any helpful advise - ADVICE
don't feel to bad - TOO
I truly enjoyed your look at the parent's guide to dealing with a child's broken heart - tragic as the events are at the time, you have mined each situation for the comic gold that dwells within. Your commentary and observations are hilarious - you truly do understand human nature and children! A great read. Brooke
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2009
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The world IF full of jerks - IS
all of which have had their hearts shattered - all of WHOM
see it from his prospective - PERSPECTIVE
offer any helpful advise - ADVICE
don't feel to bad - TOO
I truly enjoyed your look at the parent's guide to dealing with a child's broken heart - tragic as the events are at the time, you have mined each situation for the comic gold that dwells within. Your commentary and observations are hilarious - you truly do understand human nature and children! A great read. Brooke
Comment Written 04-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2009
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Thnak you Brooke, You are so helpful with your eagle eye for reviewing. I have fixed all the spags. I'm so glad you found this humorous.
Beth
Comment from Queenise
Good story,Beth. I can understand. My oldest is going through some things now. Great content and wonderful advice. Enjoyable to read. Just a few things to check. Good art work. Friend clarify:The world if full of jerks sentence. 2.This is where councilors or counselors and support groups come in? 3.still don't feel to, or too bad? All in all,I got a lot out of this. Queenise
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2009
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Good story,Beth. I can understand. My oldest is going through some things now. Great content and wonderful advice. Enjoyable to read. Just a few things to check. Good art work. Friend clarify:The world if full of jerks sentence. 2.This is where councilors or counselors and support groups come in? 3.still don't feel to, or too bad? All in all,I got a lot out of this. Queenise
Comment Written 04-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2009
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Queenise, Thank you so much for the nice review and for finding my spags. I'm glad you found it enjoyable. We try to help but all we can do is be there for them.
Beth
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You are one of my favorite people to read on this site. So down to earth and real. Wise. Blessings,friend. Queenise
Comment from Mastery
Beth, this is a wonderful piece of writing. It is loving, humorous, and damned good advice overall. It is also well written. It reminds me somehow of Erma Bombeck's old column in the papers. Remember her? The main thing i liked about this was you tell it all so free and easy just like a good mother would tell her kids the advice. Bob
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2009
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Beth, this is a wonderful piece of writing. It is loving, humorous, and damned good advice overall. It is also well written. It reminds me somehow of Erma Bombeck's old column in the papers. Remember her? The main thing i liked about this was you tell it all so free and easy just like a good mother would tell her kids the advice. Bob
Comment Written 04-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2009
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Bob, Thank you so much for the great review. I always liked Erma Bombeck and I'm flattered that this sounds like her writing. I appreciate the fact that you would like to give me a six.
Beth
Comment from fionageorge
These are the words of a very wise and considerate mother. Truth is, we do not know how to heal a broken hears, as you said, we are not equipped.
I love the way you have written this, lightheartedly, but at the same time, meaningful and with great insight.
Well done Beth, I can so relate to all these scenarios, and being in the same situation as you (marriage at 19), it is difficult to see your children in pain. Yet, we must be wise, and only give advice when they ask for it.
Warmest regards to you my friend
Marijke
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reply by the author on 04-Dec-2009
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These are the words of a very wise and considerate mother. Truth is, we do not know how to heal a broken hears, as you said, we are not equipped.
I love the way you have written this, lightheartedly, but at the same time, meaningful and with great insight.
Well done Beth, I can so relate to all these scenarios, and being in the same situation as you (marriage at 19), it is difficult to see your children in pain. Yet, we must be wise, and only give advice when they ask for it.
Warmest regards to you my friend
Marijke
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Comment Written 04-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2009
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Thanks so much for the really great review. I'm so glad you liked it and your comments are delightful.
Cheers,
Beth
