Tantalizing Eyes
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Comment from CCasetta
A riveting chapter (I will make sure I read many more of yours). You have such a terrific feel for the dialogue that the story moves seamlessly, effortlessly. i really can hardly wait to see what happens next. Wonderful.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2009
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A riveting chapter (I will make sure I read many more of yours). You have such a terrific feel for the dialogue that the story moves seamlessly, effortlessly. i really can hardly wait to see what happens next. Wonderful.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2009
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Thank you for your review and I appreciate the kind words.
Comment from bookishfabler
I know this is a book and I took achance. I really liked it. I didn't see any nits or spags, but it may have been because I wasn't looking very hard. I was interested in what was going on. Not typical in a fifth chapter of a book where I hadn't read earlier chapters. Very well done.
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reply by the author on 29-Nov-2009
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I know this is a book and I took achance. I really liked it. I didn't see any nits or spags, but it may have been because I wasn't looking very hard. I was interested in what was going on. Not typical in a fifth chapter of a book where I hadn't read earlier chapters. Very well done.
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book
Comment Written 29-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2009
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Thank you for your review and kind words.
Comment from c_lucas
Another well written chapter. It looks like Leya is guilty by default. The fault of wanting to help. This has good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good job.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2009
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Another well written chapter. It looks like Leya is guilty by default. The fault of wanting to help. This has good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good job.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2009
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Thank you for your review and continued support.
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You're welcome, Barbara. Charlie
Comment from Juliette Chamberlain
I suppose it does make sense to search Leya's room but I get the feeling that Peggy enjoys humiliating Leya as much as possible. You have created a lot of sympathy for Leya through how you describe her. One almost feels protective towards her.
Juliette
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2009
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I suppose it does make sense to search Leya's room but I get the feeling that Peggy enjoys humiliating Leya as much as possible. You have created a lot of sympathy for Leya through how you describe her. One almost feels protective towards her.
Juliette
Comment Written 29-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2009
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Thank you for your review. I am glad you feel that way. I am trying to get the readers to feel sorry for her, after I painted such a horrible first picture of her.
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Yes, isn't it strange how the story almost begins to write itself!!!!
J.
Comment from Writeaway...
Another exciting chapte add to your novel barbara.wilkey. I found no spags and was kept interested from the beginning, you left me wondering what's going to happen next, excellent job, keep writing!!
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reply by the author on 29-Nov-2009
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Another exciting chapte add to your novel barbara.wilkey. I found no spags and was kept interested from the beginning, you left me wondering what's going to happen next, excellent job, keep writing!!
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Comment Written 29-Nov-2009
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2009
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Thank you for your review and kind words.
