CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from Winslow
Dear Sixteen,
Yes, we are born with freewill but we are coiled in predetermined DNA. Excellent triolet with superb flow and rhyming.
Good luck in the contest.
Warm regards,
Winslow
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2009
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Dear Sixteen,
Yes, we are born with freewill but we are coiled in predetermined DNA. Excellent triolet with superb flow and rhyming.
Good luck in the contest.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 06-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2009
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Yes, that DNA gets in the way on many fronts sometimes! HA! I try to circumvent it all the time! Thanks much for your excellent review. Sue :-)
Comment from MJMuraco
Sue, this poem is lovely and I really like the message it sends. The triolet seems like it would be a hard poem to write but you seem to have mastered it nicely.
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Sue, this poem is lovely and I really like the message it sends. The triolet seems like it would be a hard poem to write but you seem to have mastered it nicely.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2009
Comment from Judian James
Without a doubt, one of my favorite forms to write in. I love a good triolet. There is a definite challenge to be able to carry off your thought, use all the repeating lines and yet not bore or come across as obviously repetitious. You carried it off beautifully and your piece has a lovely, positive message.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2009
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Without a doubt, one of my favorite forms to write in. I love a good triolet. There is a definite challenge to be able to carry off your thought, use all the repeating lines and yet not bore or come across as obviously repetitious. You carried it off beautifully and your piece has a lovely, positive message.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2009
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Yes, that is key: Can't bore the reader! Ha! Gotta find a way to "hide" the repetition. Thanks so much for your compliments and great review, Jude! Sue
Comment from amada
This is a great triolet and the repetition of the phrases gave it a special emphasis. The words you express are thoughtful, free will, what a gift!
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This is a great triolet and the repetition of the phrases gave it a special emphasis. The words you express are thoughtful, free will, what a gift!
Comment Written 06-Apr-2009
Comment from chaswriter
Sue - I feel so dumb. Not sure if I have ever heard of a Triolet poem. You certainly write it well with its rhythm and easy read. Charlie
PS - That picture certainly caught my eye. LOL.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2009
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Sue - I feel so dumb. Not sure if I have ever heard of a Triolet poem. You certainly write it well with its rhythm and easy read. Charlie
PS - That picture certainly caught my eye. LOL.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2009
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Now, why would that picture catch your eye?? I'm lost. :-)) Oh, and thanks for paying attention to the poem, also. HA!! Sue
Comment from Just2Write
Tiolets are such a nice way to convey our thoughts in poetry. You have done a very lovely job with this poem about free will and the choices we can make becauase of them.
Unique, we are born with free will
How true those words! I liked the symbolism of Daphne breaking free of her Laurel tree roots. (A story of mythology that I recently learned about from Bard Owl) We learn so much here in our FS Classroom. Rose.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2009
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Tiolets are such a nice way to convey our thoughts in poetry. You have done a very lovely job with this poem about free will and the choices we can make becauase of them.
Unique, we are born with free will
How true those words! I liked the symbolism of Daphne breaking free of her Laurel tree roots. (A story of mythology that I recently learned about from Bard Owl) We learn so much here in our FS Classroom. Rose.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2009
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I learned of this story from the artist of this painting. He's a friend of mine. I know absolutely nothing about mythology. Yes, and I just read a new poem by Brooke with mythology in it. And I learned something new. We do have a classroom here! HA! Thanks so much for your very kind review. Sue :-)
Comment from joan marie
I agree that we were born with the ability to make our own choices. Maybe that is why our world is so messed up. But we should make our own choices. Perhaps not the one she made. Leaves behind damaged people but very poignant write. joan marie
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I agree that we were born with the ability to make our own choices. Maybe that is why our world is so messed up. But we should make our own choices. Perhaps not the one she made. Leaves behind damaged people but very poignant write. joan marie
Comment Written 06-Apr-2009
Comment from jeslaf
Sue, your poetry is always accompanied by the most exquisite, interesting (and fitting) artwork--you have mastered this more than any other on site. I agree with your 'gift' sentiment re: free will, and love the image of being naked, free, and in charge of one's own roots/destiny. :)
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2009
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Sue, your poetry is always accompanied by the most exquisite, interesting (and fitting) artwork--you have mastered this more than any other on site. I agree with your 'gift' sentiment re: free will, and love the image of being naked, free, and in charge of one's own roots/destiny. :)
Comment Written 06-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2009
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I do admit that before I post a poem, I search high and low for just the artwork that makes me "feel" my words. And I love art so much! And love sharing it. Thank you for your great compliment. And for your very kind review. Sue :-)
Comment from Wendyanne
Hi 60skid. This is a well written piece of poetry in triolet style. I have never tried one of these as they seem so complicated lol. Well done. Enjoyed the sentiments
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2009
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Hi 60skid. This is a well written piece of poetry in triolet style. I have never tried one of these as they seem so complicated lol. Well done. Enjoyed the sentiments
Comment Written 06-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2009
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Thanks very much for your great review. You should try one. Not as difficult as one would think. Very satisfying! With regards, Sue
Comment from DrCarter2001
What a complex poem form a triolet is. I like what you've done with this one, though, and a solid, purposeful message you've created with just a few words. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2009
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What a complex poem form a triolet is. I like what you've done with this one, though, and a solid, purposeful message you've created with just a few words. Nicely done.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2009
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Dr., thanks so much for your compliments and very kind review. Sue :-)