CSP: A Collection of Poems
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Comment from joan marie
Excellent quote at the end. So true. These clarity poems are good at increasing vocabulary, also. I like the artwork saying things can go either way. joan marie
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Excellent quote at the end. So true. These clarity poems are good at increasing vocabulary, also. I like the artwork saying things can go either way. joan marie
Comment Written 14-Mar-2009
Comment from nora arjuna
Hi sixteezkid, this is the first perfect pyramid shape I've come across among the entries. And you have great phrases within the shape. I enjoyed and wish you all the best.
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Hi sixteezkid, this is the first perfect pyramid shape I've come across among the entries. And you have great phrases within the shape. I enjoyed and wish you all the best.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2009
Comment from Firefly54
Happenstance... what an interesting word... did you just invent it? Tis rather a good one. You've obeyed all the rules... it looks good and sounds good.. love that last line, "Life's proof that nothing is assured" Good luck!
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Happenstance... what an interesting word... did you just invent it? Tis rather a good one. You've obeyed all the rules... it looks good and sounds good.. love that last line, "Life's proof that nothing is assured" Good luck!
Comment Written 14-Mar-2009
Comment from Kentucky Sweet Pea
Good solid CP, Suz, and a great contest entry! Jerry would call it a classic and so do I. Good luck in the competition.
Love,
Pea
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Good solid CP, Suz, and a great contest entry! Jerry would call it a classic and so do I. Good luck in the competition.
Love,
Pea
Comment Written 14-Mar-2009
Comment from Alcuin
Technically, this is a fine poem. It fits the form, it even has a pyramidal shape. Unfortunately, it's a beautiful definition of 'luck' or 'chance' rather than 'fate'. The definition of 'fate' that I understand is around destiny and particularly predestination, rather than anything random.
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Technically, this is a fine poem. It fits the form, it even has a pyramidal shape. Unfortunately, it's a beautiful definition of 'luck' or 'chance' rather than 'fate'. The definition of 'fate' that I understand is around destiny and particularly predestination, rather than anything random.
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Comment Written 14-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2009
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In the dictionaries, it also has another meaning: "A final result or consequence; an outcome." From Merriam Webster's: > c: the circumstances that befall someone or something "did not know the fate of her former classmates". Thanks for your review. Sue
Comment from Roisin
Hi Sue. What a beautiful clarity poem. 'Happenstance' - I love that word. You've chosen beautiful words and put them together well to flow wonderfully. I see you're ahead in the last vote for your 'Pierced' one. I think you'll do well in this one too. Good luck.
Hugs
Roisin
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Hi Sue. What a beautiful clarity poem. 'Happenstance' - I love that word. You've chosen beautiful words and put them together well to flow wonderfully. I see you're ahead in the last vote for your 'Pierced' one. I think you'll do well in this one too. Good luck.
Hugs
Roisin
Comment Written 14-Mar-2009
Comment from c_lucas
Very well written in the correct form. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme. I wish you the best of luck in your contest.
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Very well written in the correct form. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme. I wish you the best of luck in your contest.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2009
Comment from rmdelta
Sue, an excellent poem and a wonderful contest entry, my dear friend. Well chosen wording make this a great entry which will be hard to beat. good luck
Reggie
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Sue, an excellent poem and a wonderful contest entry, my dear friend. Well chosen wording make this a great entry which will be hard to beat. good luck
Reggie
Comment Written 14-Mar-2009
Comment from jaeladarling
I can surely attest to that last line! Oi.
I don't know how you get all these poetry forms straight. The only time I've ever written any specific form was by accident. LOL But you have a good grasp on it. I enjoyed this poem both for its meaning and its style. Thanks for sharing!
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I can surely attest to that last line! Oi.
I don't know how you get all these poetry forms straight. The only time I've ever written any specific form was by accident. LOL But you have a good grasp on it. I enjoyed this poem both for its meaning and its style. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 14-Mar-2009
Comment from Jazh
This is an interesting and clever poem, Sue. I like the message/meaning, and your use of alliteration. You have fulfilled all the (rather complicated) requirements for this contest....good luck!
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This is an interesting and clever poem, Sue. I like the message/meaning, and your use of alliteration. You have fulfilled all the (rather complicated) requirements for this contest....good luck!
Comment Written 14-Mar-2009