CSP: A Collection of Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 29 "Manna from Uncle Sam"A collection of poetry
55 total reviews
Comment from honeytree
Big Governments cost money.I believe we have to have big governments. We have make sure that the people are reached in some way, telling them what has been done and what is to be done particularly within my country.
We should believe in a democracy, it is vital for any country not to have a dictatorship,particularly within my country as well.
I like what the writer has written and big governments are necessary sometimes, particularly within Australia a vast continent.
Honeytree
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Big Governments cost money.I believe we have to have big governments. We have make sure that the people are reached in some way, telling them what has been done and what is to be done particularly within my country.
We should believe in a democracy, it is vital for any country not to have a dictatorship,particularly within my country as well.
I like what the writer has written and big governments are necessary sometimes, particularly within Australia a vast continent.
Honeytree
Comment Written 10-Mar-2009
Comment from howling harp
i love it so much. and i think you are right. i don't know whats going to happen in the future for the economy but i don't think its going to be pretty for my son. nice job
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i love it so much. and i think you are right. i don't know whats going to happen in the future for the economy but i don't think its going to be pretty for my son. nice job
Comment Written 10-Mar-2009
Comment from prodigal
Virtual six here. I have no sixes left to give this week. I couldn't agree with you more on this poem, but in addition to that, I feel that even if I didn't agree with you this is written in a sort of light hearted, non threatening manner that I would not be offended. Well done- Sam
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Virtual six here. I have no sixes left to give this week. I couldn't agree with you more on this poem, but in addition to that, I feel that even if I didn't agree with you this is written in a sort of light hearted, non threatening manner that I would not be offended. Well done- Sam
Comment Written 10-Mar-2009
Comment from Roisin
Well, well, well Sue! I'd say you've got a lot of political juices flowing with this poem, LOL. Great job of putting your views across in such perfect rhymes and rhythm. Great job.
Hugs
Roisin
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Well, well, well Sue! I'd say you've got a lot of political juices flowing with this poem, LOL. Great job of putting your views across in such perfect rhymes and rhythm. Great job.
Hugs
Roisin
Comment Written 10-Mar-2009
Comment from Joan E.
Good comments in your notes, especially about reminding us to judge work for its craft. I enjoyed your satire and the way you wove your poem around everyday words, labels and adages like "robbing Peter to pay Paul". At the same time, you managed to create strong rhymes. I also liked the picture you chose to accentuate your theme.
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Good comments in your notes, especially about reminding us to judge work for its craft. I enjoyed your satire and the way you wove your poem around everyday words, labels and adages like "robbing Peter to pay Paul". At the same time, you managed to create strong rhymes. I also liked the picture you chose to accentuate your theme.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2009
Comment from jaeladarling
You have to have that type of warning for both political and religious works because people tend to rate based on opinion rather than style. Sad, really.
Anyway, I thought your poem was very well written, and I do agree with you wholeheartedly on the issue. Thanks for sharing this with us. Cheers!
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You have to have that type of warning for both political and religious works because people tend to rate based on opinion rather than style. Sad, really.
Anyway, I thought your poem was very well written, and I do agree with you wholeheartedly on the issue. Thanks for sharing this with us. Cheers!
Comment Written 10-Mar-2009
Comment from findingmyroom
Amen. Ok, now... your rhyme is spot-on, and your sentiment slices through any possible ambiguity. You describe the feeding frenzy with style and panache, my favorite image being "To feed the pigs who want their fill."
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Amen. Ok, now... your rhyme is spot-on, and your sentiment slices through any possible ambiguity. You describe the feeding frenzy with style and panache, my favorite image being "To feed the pigs who want their fill."
Comment Written 10-Mar-2009
Comment from debskatz
Hey Sue,
Well, your form is pretty darn good! Perfect iambic tetrameter & all the rhymes are fine. As to the content, unfortunately, I think you're right. I believe in the scientific theory "Survival of the Fittest." I think it got put off a bit, but it's gonna happen & Detroit (for example) will either change or die.
Thanks for sharing!
smiles,
deb
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2009
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Hey Sue,
Well, your form is pretty darn good! Perfect iambic tetrameter & all the rhymes are fine. As to the content, unfortunately, I think you're right. I believe in the scientific theory "Survival of the Fittest." I think it got put off a bit, but it's gonna happen & Detroit (for example) will either change or die.
Thanks for sharing!
smiles,
deb
Comment Written 10-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2009
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Government does not know how to change anything. They are not wealth creators. Their history proves that anything they touch, they ruin. It's very upsetting. This money printing madness is going to come back to haunt us in a big way. And that's only one facet. Thanks very much for your review. Regards, Sue
Comment from c_lucas
Do I detect a little scarcasm in your poem? (LOL) Very well written with very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Nine thousand items of pork. Let's start raising pigs.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2009
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Do I detect a little scarcasm in your poem? (LOL) Very well written with very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Nine thousand items of pork. Let's start raising pigs.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2009
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Ha! Yes, there are plenty of troughs to dine from! Just a wee bit of sarcasm here, yes. :-)) Thanks for your review. Sue
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You're welcome, Sue. Charlie
Comment from Luvs2rite4u
I give you 5 stars because of the way you presented your content. Such a wonderful style, and knowledge. I enjoyed
the "pigs" characters'. Also, I feel you can go farther with this style of writing. I saw no typo's, or anything to change. Bravo
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2009
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I give you 5 stars because of the way you presented your content. Such a wonderful style, and knowledge. I enjoyed
the "pigs" characters'. Also, I feel you can go farther with this style of writing. I saw no typo's, or anything to change. Bravo
Comment Written 10-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2009
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Thank you very much for your specific comments and very kind review. Much appreciated, Sue