Comment from Hitcher

Excellent

Clever Sue, very clever friend! Has got to be a contender for sure, two sentences, two stories entwined heaven then Hell. There is a graveyard full of such relationships, sad[very] but unfortunately true. Good Luck!

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2009

A graveyard, indeed. My heart goes out to all those children. Thank you so much for your wonderful compliments and review, friend. :-)) Sue

Comment from joan marie

Excellent

There is no answer. It can be only one of two ways, I don't know why it just all goes wrong sometimes. You said it all in so few words. Good read. joan marie

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2009

Joan Marie, I do not know what people are looking for. It's right under their noses, yet they continue to sabotage all that is THE BEST. No answer to the "why

reply by the author on 19-Jan-2009

Joan Marie, I do not know what people are looking for. It's right under their noses, yet they continue to sabotage all that is THE BEST. No answer to the "why". Thank you for your great review. Very much appreciated. Sue

reply by joan marie on 19-Jan-2009

So many wrongs to right. But God gave us the ability to make choices. Too many make the wrong ones. Some of us are pulled up and saved to live a better life. jm

Comment from lovemyta

Excellent

Both 2 sentences are true. Our families are falling apart. Try as I might, mine fell apart. I tried but my husband would not. Why? How? There is no answer. It is over. There is no going back. Everyone needs a home and a wife, or husband, and children. Why? Because we are people and people need people.

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2009

Same here. Had it all and more. Nothing else to want for in this world. Pffft! Gone. Why? Don't know. I didn't have to suffer abuse (thank God), but there are families suffering that right now as we speak and I can't think about it. The fear in children,knowing the instability of it all. And they grow up asking, "Why?" Thank you for sharing your story. And for your review. With regards, Sue

reply by lovemyta on 19-Jan-2009

I have found I am much happier without him. I don't have to walk on eggshells all the time. With him he was so critical and he abused me emotionally all the time. Now I have time for myself and I don't have to worry about what he "thinks". I can go places and do what I want. It really is nice. I can even have my own mother over and she can call when she wants. It really has its advantages. And you know what? I don't miss him at all. I bring in the bacon and I spend it how I want and pay my bills and spend it how I want too. It is really great to tell you the truth. I have never, never been happier. The divorce should be finally in March and I can't wait.

Comment from The Rivaling Mimic

Excellent

The art choice is definitly suiting for this piece. The appearance of a once happy family split in real life. I love it!

The Rivaling Mimic

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2009

How many families have that happy face, yet behind closed doors, there is havoc? Shockingly, too many. Thank you for your great review and comments! Much appreciated...Sue

Comment from Marjorie D.

Excellent

Wow! Super job, Sixteezkid! I think you captured the intent of the contest perfectly. You've show the two opposite ends of the spectrum. The very best of luck in the contest. It's terrific.

XO

Marjorie

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2009

marjorie, thanks for your awesome compliments! Sadly, it's all true. Thanks for your review and well-wishes in the contest. :-)) Sue

Comment from FredCollingwood

Excellent

Parents, children, home. Everything one needs.
Abuse, neglect, betrayal, divorce, sadness. Why?

This has to be difficult and you excelled, here. Great job.

Fred

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2009

Fred, it defies logic. We are born to grow up and have a family and nurture them. Instead, so many suffer from within their own home. Beyond sad. Thank you so much for your review. As always, it is very much appreciated...Sue

reply by FredCollingwood on 19-Jan-2009

I'm glad you posted it. I hope a lot of people see it.

Comment from rmdelta

Excellent

Sue,

A terrific contest entry, Sue. Twelve great words and it should be a contest winner, I'm betting. The words you chose certainly fit the contest rules as well as any I've seen so far, my friend. Good luck.

Reggie

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2009

Hi Reggie. So kind of you to make those comments. I'm reading your story slow, but now up to Sam going up to the Doc's to tell him what happened to his parents. (I've read a lot of story writers here, but "shhhhh..." you got the goods, my man.) Seamless. Great dialogue. Never mind. Will brag about it when I finish and review! Take care, Reg :-)) Sue

Comment from Brian S. Pratt

Excellent

Parents, children, home. Everything one needs.
Abuse, neglect, betrayal, divorce, sadness. Why
-one of happiness, another the destructionof it.

great job capturing the two disparate worlds. well done indeed.

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 Comment Written 19-Jan-2009

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reply by the author on 19-Jan-2009

Yes, two separate worlds, as it may seem. Thanks very much for your review! Sue