Comment from Jim Wile

Excellent

What a shocker for Emma to find out she's been stalked for a long time by a murderer, and that she would likely have become another victim. It's amazing this girl can hold it together after all the bad things that have happened to her in the last month. I'm sure it's Seth's influence that's enabling her to keep her head on straight.

This was an interesting and well written chapter full of surprises!

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"They lady you saw me hugging..." - Either "That" or "The"

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 Comment Written 10-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2023

Thank you for the catch. I can't believe as many times as I read that and didn't see it. I appreciate the help.

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

Crisp writing with rising tension as the stalker's activities are disclosed. The dialogue and characterisation are spot on.

A couple of minor typos:

Chuckling(,) Pastor Pat said, "I hoped you'd suggest it."
faced Jake. "Are their (there) nude photos?"

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 Comment Written 10-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2023

Thank you for the kind review and the catches. I have made the corrections. I always appreciate the help.