Hope Emerges Through the Rain
Blessing...43 total reviews
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
Your poem is very agreable, but it is not the 5-3-5 lune as requested in the writing prompt, but the alternative 3-5-3 form developed by Jack Collom. Wouldn't this be excluded from the contest?
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Revision:
Looking good I would put orb instead of sun in the last line, to avoid repetition
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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022
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Your poem is very agreable, but it is not the 5-3-5 lune as requested in the writing prompt, but the alternative 3-5-3 form developed by Jack Collom. Wouldn't this be excluded from the contest?
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Revision:
Looking good I would put orb instead of sun in the last line, to avoid repetition
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Comment Written 20-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022
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Katherine, thanks so much for the heads up... as soon as I saw your review I changed it... I'm wondering if you would be kind enough to take a second look...
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updated comment FYI
Comment from harmony13
The first two line of this poem flow and connect well. The last line
says it all! I thought about the rain and how it cleanses the earth. I
found the words of this poem meaningful. The artwork is awesome and compliments both the theme and words of this poem.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022
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The first two line of this poem flow and connect well. The last line
says it all! I thought about the rain and how it cleanses the earth. I
found the words of this poem meaningful. The artwork is awesome and compliments both the theme and words of this poem.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022
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thanks so much for your lovely review... xo
Comment from mermaids
"Devine gift" is such a comforting last line, it shows how the rain can be important and nourishing. You have created a lune that impacts the reader and shows nature in action with a faith based feeling. Excellent use of words.
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reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022
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"Devine gift" is such a comforting last line, it shows how the rain can be important and nourishing. You have created a lune that impacts the reader and shows nature in action with a faith based feeling. Excellent use of words.
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Comment Written 20-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022
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Thanks so very much mermaids... I'm very grateful for your review...xo
