The Sadness of Quiet
Remembering Zoe98 total reviews
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
Your poem was gripping; a moving and emotional read that sunk into my heart creating tears. The time sequencing and flow of the poem was perfection, beginning with your dear wife's passing and delving deeper into the emptiness you still feel with her absence.
The imagery you created was also perfection; the silence and void of not having your dear one with you.
I liked the message of how we often unconsciously feel time will always be there for us, so we take for granted the blessing of each day spent with our spouse or loved one.
The 2nd and 3rd stanzas tore at my heart.
Thank you so much for sharing. Bless you and welcome to FanStory!
Gale
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Your poem was gripping; a moving and emotional read that sunk into my heart creating tears. The time sequencing and flow of the poem was perfection, beginning with your dear wife's passing and delving deeper into the emptiness you still feel with her absence.
The imagery you created was also perfection; the silence and void of not having your dear one with you.
I liked the message of how we often unconsciously feel time will always be there for us, so we take for granted the blessing of each day spent with our spouse or loved one.
The 2nd and 3rd stanzas tore at my heart.
Thank you so much for sharing. Bless you and welcome to FanStory!
Gale
Comment Written 20-Oct-2021
Comment from dragonpoet
This sounds like depression setting in with the grief of the loss of a spouse or significant other. It shows the regrets of things that can't be changed or corrected from the past.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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This sounds like depression setting in with the grief of the loss of a spouse or significant other. It shows the regrets of things that can't be changed or corrected from the past.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
dragonpoet
Comment Written 20-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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Thank You, very much.
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You're welcome.
dragonoet
Comment from Sanku
This is a very emotional pouring of grief and loneliness. 'Death slipped under the door ..' is a very original way personifying death.All the best for the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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This is a very emotional pouring of grief and loneliness. 'Death slipped under the door ..' is a very original way personifying death.All the best for the contest.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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Thank You, very kind of you.
Comment from Rachel L
Hello Terry,
This is heartbreaking. Very lovely poem though, it made me feel something I'm just not sure what, which is a good thing. a very good job.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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Hello Terry,
This is heartbreaking. Very lovely poem though, it made me feel something I'm just not sure what, which is a good thing. a very good job.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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Thank You, very kind of you.
Comment from victor 66
Loved ones will always pass on. The trick is to make sure that you make a point of expressing love and whatever feelings that need to be conveyed before this person dies. There's a great deal of pain and remorse in your poem. I felt it. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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Loved ones will always pass on. The trick is to make sure that you make a point of expressing love and whatever feelings that need to be conveyed before this person dies. There's a great deal of pain and remorse in your poem. I felt it. Best wishes.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2021
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Thank You.
Comment from Poetofheart2013
A very powerful and
Touching poem full of
really powerful imaging
and thoughts and emotions. Flows really
good to. I really enjoyed
reading it. Just keep
the good work!
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2021
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A very powerful and
Touching poem full of
really powerful imaging
and thoughts and emotions. Flows really
good to. I really enjoyed
reading it. Just keep
the good work!
Comment Written 19-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2021
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You are very kind, thank you.
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Thank You
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Thank You, very much.
Comment from Nancy s
Wow! What a touching piece! It is sad and true, and brings out feelings that many can not phrase correctly. Very vulnerable and open, and very beautiful.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2021
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Wow! What a touching piece! It is sad and true, and brings out feelings that many can not phrase correctly. Very vulnerable and open, and very beautiful.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2021
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Thank you very much for the review.
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a nicely written poem. Very sad but touching words. Not forgotten not amended . There is no joy there is no bright only sadness and the quiet.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2021
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This is a nicely written poem. Very sad but touching words. Not forgotten not amended . There is no joy there is no bright only sadness and the quiet.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2021
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Thank You very much for your review.
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Your welcome
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Sometimes we need quietness to write or to think about our problems. I find a nice quiet place when speaking or praying to God. You are speaking about someone dying in your poem. The atmosphere does become silent when that happens.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2021
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Sometimes we need quietness to write or to think about our problems. I find a nice quiet place when speaking or praying to God. You are speaking about someone dying in your poem. The atmosphere does become silent when that happens.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2021
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Thank You, very mcuh.
Comment from Annette R.
I usually have trouble following the meaning of poems especially if the rhyming is not obvious. Not this one though. This one touched my heart as my husband we thought was healthy just didn't wake up one morning. The easiest way to go for him not so easy for the rest of us. And yes grief seems silent from missing his voice. This is the first time I have printed a poem to save. Thank you.
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I usually have trouble following the meaning of poems especially if the rhyming is not obvious. Not this one though. This one touched my heart as my husband we thought was healthy just didn't wake up one morning. The easiest way to go for him not so easy for the rest of us. And yes grief seems silent from missing his voice. This is the first time I have printed a poem to save. Thank you.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2021
