A Hopeless Case
A rhymed poem for the contest56 total reviews
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
This one has to have a perfect six eventhough i had to look up a few words to understand the meaning of the line and when i did it was spot on. I loved the rhyming and the meter perfect.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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This one has to have a perfect six eventhough i had to look up a few words to understand the meaning of the line and when i did it was spot on. I loved the rhyming and the meter perfect.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Thanks, Barb. I appreciate your review and the sixer. All good wishes. Keep well! Tony
Comment from LisaMay
Fields of asphodel might sound pretty to a tipsy person thinking of flowers, but the shades of Hades when in a drunken squalor is quite another matter.
"Circumlocutious balderdash" is my favourite line - it might have some folks running for their dictionaries. I would say Professor Strunk and his mate White would say (if they were Aussies) "Pissed again!"
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Fields of asphodel might sound pretty to a tipsy person thinking of flowers, but the shades of Hades when in a drunken squalor is quite another matter.
"Circumlocutious balderdash" is my favourite line - it might have some folks running for their dictionaries. I would say Professor Strunk and his mate White would say (if they were Aussies) "Pissed again!"
Comment Written 22-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Thanks, LisaMay. I suspect this one might have driven them both to drink! All good wishes. Keep well! Tony
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Since Webster has been changing the definition of many words these past few month, it makes me wonder if Strunk is changing too. Hmmm? I enjoyed reading your contest entry and I am sure you don't need my well wishes, I'll give them to you anyway. Good luck.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Since Webster has been changing the definition of many words these past few month, it makes me wonder if Strunk is changing too. Hmmm? I enjoyed reading your contest entry and I am sure you don't need my well wishes, I'll give them to you anyway. Good luck.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Thanks, Barbara. I suspect that Professors White and Strunk might have found this all a bit long-winded! LOL
All good wishes. Keep well! Tony
Comment from dragonpoet
Tony,
This sonnet describes an alcoholic well. I would say plain drunk. Inebriated is for those high class people who don't want to admit they are, in fact, drunk.
Good luck in the contest
Keep writing and stay healhty.
Joan
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Tony,
This sonnet describes an alcoholic well. I would say plain drunk. Inebriated is for those high class people who don't want to admit they are, in fact, drunk.
Good luck in the contest
Keep writing and stay healhty.
Joan
Comment Written 22-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Thanks, Joan. I appreciate your review. All good wishes. Keep well! Tony
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No problem, Tony.
Joan
Comment from joycetreasures
Hello TFAWCUS,
I pray you are well. I had to look up several words, but I am adding to my vocabulary. Nicely written poem about a hopeless case of a man. lol. I loved the line that he's unaware of his disgrace. Also, I like the line that his word come tumbling -- some are rash, and on his twisted tongue he trips. Yes, he's drunk. Nicely written, sir. Thanks and happy future writing:-)
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Hello TFAWCUS,
I pray you are well. I had to look up several words, but I am adding to my vocabulary. Nicely written poem about a hopeless case of a man. lol. I loved the line that he's unaware of his disgrace. Also, I like the line that his word come tumbling -- some are rash, and on his twisted tongue he trips. Yes, he's drunk. Nicely written, sir. Thanks and happy future writing:-)
Comment Written 22-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Thanks, Joyce. I appreciate your review. All good wishes. Keep well! Tony
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You are so welcome.
Comment from Janet Foor
I hate to think that there is a "hopeless case" but having grown up in a home with an alcoholic father, I can't help but wonder if it's true.
This is a remarkable rhyming poem Tony. Strong and vivid descriptions to complete the picture of a drunk.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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I hate to think that there is a "hopeless case" but having grown up in a home with an alcoholic father, I can't help but wonder if it's true.
This is a remarkable rhyming poem Tony. Strong and vivid descriptions to complete the picture of a drunk.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 22-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Thanks, Janet. I appreciate your review. Kind of you to drop a six on this. Although it's easy to poke fun at alcoholism, it's no joke really. All good wishes. Keep well! Tony
Comment from estory
Nice take on the sonnet form, in a very different theme. Gloria did one like this with a humorous bent. I like all the word play, and the rhythm and rhyme scheme was well worked through to make for some good echoing effects to go along with the funny portrait of the inebriated professor, talking trash. estory
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Nice take on the sonnet form, in a very different theme. Gloria did one like this with a humorous bent. I like all the word play, and the rhythm and rhyme scheme was well worked through to make for some good echoing effects to go along with the funny portrait of the inebriated professor, talking trash. estory
Comment Written 22-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Thanks, estory. I appreciate your review and kind words. All good wishes, Tony. Keep well!
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
A very good rhyming poem that truly tells a story of the results of the imbiber. A great picture with all the clues front and center, I would say he's really drunk!
Ralf
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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A very good rhyming poem that truly tells a story of the results of the imbiber. A great picture with all the clues front and center, I would say he's really drunk!
Ralf
Comment Written 22-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Thanks, Ralf. I appreciate your review and kind words. All good wishes, Tony. Keep well!
Comment from Kingsrookviii
Wow. This is so very, very sophisticated. Also, it has words I had to look up! I always like that. This is full of extremely memorable lines and upon reading it aloud can play with how it hits me for consideration. I'm impressed. Well done.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Wow. This is so very, very sophisticated. Also, it has words I had to look up! I always like that. This is full of extremely memorable lines and upon reading it aloud can play with how it hits me for consideration. I'm impressed. Well done.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Thanks, Kingsrookviii. I appreciate your review and kind words and am honoured bt your sixth star. All good wishes, Tony. Keep well!
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Wow! You have done a magnificent job of describing--vividly, with well-chosen, powerful words--a guy that is blind, staggering slobbering drunk!
When he gets sober, he will read your poem and say, "SO TRUE"! LOL!
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Wow! You have done a magnificent job of describing--vividly, with well-chosen, powerful words--a guy that is blind, staggering slobbering drunk!
When he gets sober, he will read your poem and say, "SO TRUE"! LOL!
Comment Written 22-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2020
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Thanks, Janice. I appreciate your review and kind words. All good wishes, Tony. Keep well!
